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[title] => Nightmares Now Jump The Fence
[time] => 2020-05-13 19:41:48
[hometext] => An evil slithers all around us. Wake up!
[bodytext] =>
Nightmares now jump the fence,
having their way with waking hours,
through ears that hear and eyes that see,
the invisible swirl of evil power.
Tearing at my sanity,
ripping joy to pulvered dust
the trap in front, so plain to see,
in the herd I have no room to run.
Flower petals fade, or my eyes see them so,
a world I didn’t make
grows like mold on all I know.
People, masked, strangers now,
these baaing sheep in line for chips,
and fear, gnawing night and day,
clouds, and Death they come our way.
[comments] => 6
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[informant] => invierno
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[topicname] => news
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Nightmares Now Jump The Fence
Contributed by
invierno
on
Wednesday, 13th May 2020 @ 07:41:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
news
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Nightmares now jump the fence,
having their way with waking hours,
through ears that hear and eyes that see,
the invisible swirl of evil power.
Tearing at my sanity,
ripping joy to pulvered dust
the trap in front, so plain to see,
in the herd I have no room to run.
Flower petals fade, or my eyes see them so,
a world I didn’t make
grows like mold on all I know.
People, masked, strangers now,
these baaing sheep in line for chips,
and fear, gnawing night and day,
clouds, and Death they come our way.
Copyright ©
invierno
... [
2020-05-13 19:41:48] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Nightmares Now Jump The Fence
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th May 2020 @ 03:29:12 AM AEST (User
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Holy metaphors, Batman!!!! A bipartisan poem ‼️
No, seriously, I want to interpret this the way I would but then I can put another`s perspective on it as well.
I`m glad you share your talent with us lower life forms.
Thank you,
Dugan |
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Re: Nightmares Now Jump The Fence
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th May 2020 @ 03:42:40 AM AEST (User
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Just a footnote:
If I were to see/hear only this line, singled out "Nightmares now jump the fence" I immediately have an associative memory of a nightmare I had repeatedly, throughout life, oh they stopped some years ago, of being able to fly but always barely high enough to escape the angry mob that was always after me in my dreams. For some reason that line makes me think of those dreams. |
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Re: Nightmares Now Jump The Fence
(User Rating: 1 ) by speedy on
Monday, 18th May 2020 @ 06:14:55 PM AEST (User
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Sometimes it feels like a nightmare. I work in retail (in Ontario Canada), so it/'/s an accurate description of the way some people are reacting to this.
Great write!
Hannah B |
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Re: Nightmares Now Jump The Fence
(User Rating: 1 ) by speedy on
Monday, 18th May 2020 @ 06:17:26 PM AEST (User
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I was equating this with the corona virus issue, I guess. Maybe that wasn/'/t the point you were trying to make, but it probably fits that too.
It/'/s a great write though.
Hannah B |
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Re: Nightmares Now Jump The Fence
(User Rating: 1 ) by Aurelia on
Wednesday, 16th September 2020 @ 08:49:57 PM AEST (User
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Conveys an uncomfortably close emotion, one I didn/'/t know others felt too. The rhyme scheme is wild; I love how it/'/s unpredictable. And finally, because you asked for constructive feedback, I/'/ve never been a fan of having to twist the sentence structure to fit the rhyme in the last line; it feels passive l, like the poem is letting the rhyme happen to it rather than the other way around. Like ending on the wrong foot. But now I wonder if that/'/s done intentionally and if so I kind of like it, if it/'/s intended to make the reader feel off-kilter, incomplete, like there should be more. |
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Re: Nightmares Now Jump The Fence
(User Rating: 1 ) by unknown_utopia on
Friday, 13th November 2020 @ 03:49:34 AM AEST (User
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How did I miss this
dark delight
well done..... |
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