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[title] => Just Two Falling Stars
[time] => 2019-11-18 14:35:08
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[bodytext] => Grounded by gravity
But known to float in your depravity
Don`t throw me a lifeline
If I drown, I`ll be fine
Beats dying on the vine
Our stars no longer shine bright
As your darkness divides the light
We`re just two falling stars
Passing in the night
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Just Two Falling Stars
Contributed by
jamesstockdale
on
Monday, 18th November 2019 @ 02:35:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Grounded by gravity
But known to float in your depravity
Don`t throw me a lifeline
If I drown, I`ll be fine
Beats dying on the vine
Our stars no longer shine bright
As your darkness divides the light
We`re just two falling stars
Passing in the night
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jamesstockdale
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2019-11-18 14:35:08] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Just Two Falling Stars
(User Rating: 1 ) by n2dep2care on
Monday, 18th November 2019 @ 03:33:28 PM AEST (User
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I like this a lot! Try using "floating in your depravity" for the seconf stance.
"As darkness divides the light" it makes it sound less judgmental and places the blame on both people. Just a suggestion. Really good poem! |
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Re: Just Two Falling Stars
(User Rating: 1 ) by unknown_utopia on
Tuesday, 19th November 2019 @ 11:16:22 PM AEST (User
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yes yes
watering a dead plant is useless
time to move on
let me go
I feel ya brother..... |
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Re: Just Two Falling Stars
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd March 2020 @ 10:33:03 PM AEST (User
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Aaaa, she/'/s a ***** anyway. 🙂 Short, bitterly sweet and great flow, Joe, er, Jimmy. |
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