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[sid] => 186309
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[aid] => mick
[title] => Melancholy Morning
[time] => 2019-06-15 22:04:14
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[bodytext] => The persistent, bullying rays
of a callous, morning sun
light up the remnants of excavated dreams;
memories now dusted down and displayed
in ink-stained cases of self-reproach:
exhibits for the museum of melancholy.
The mind is a cache of indelible thoughts;
those buried the deepest
rise with the greatest anguish.
In his pensive haze of reflection,
he understands:
life is but the ephemeral, chaotic
flight of a dying butterfly,
carried on the careless breeze of destiny
to the alluring gates of pain-free eternity.
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[informant] => TheNugget
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[topicname] => FathersDayPoems
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Melancholy Morning
Contributed by
TheNugget
on
Saturday, 15th June 2019 @ 10:04:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
FathersDayPoems
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The persistent, bullying rays
of a callous, morning sun
light up the remnants of excavated dreams;
memories now dusted down and displayed
in ink-stained cases of self-reproach:
exhibits for the museum of melancholy.
The mind is a cache of indelible thoughts;
those buried the deepest
rise with the greatest anguish.
In his pensive haze of reflection,
he understands:
life is but the ephemeral, chaotic
flight of a dying butterfly,
carried on the careless breeze of destiny
to the alluring gates of pain-free eternity.
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TheNugget
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2019-06-15 22:04:14] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Melancholy Morning
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 16th June 2019 @ 02:59:42 AM AEST (User
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really cool, existential
It hits the mind, talks to him
some thoughts searching for
some prospective / somehow
like a pot of gold / or better
than
I really like this. Most people hear
it when they read what you wrote
--- it aint rote
Great job!
Peace! |
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Re: Melancholy Morning
(User Rating: 1 ) by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 16th June 2019 @ 03:36:48 AM AEST (User
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I really like this flow
good stuff
well done.... |
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Re: Melancholy Morning
(User Rating: 1 ) by softerware on
Sunday, 16th June 2019 @ 04:57:42 PM AEST (User
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Each stanza of your poem is a complete statement on its own merit.
Your write is wealthy with truths and speaks to your beliefs and experiences. I enjoyed disassembling it and
found it to be so well constructed that each statement stands on its own. Quite a feat, which makes it such a pleasure to read.
You honor your readers by wasting no words, and we are flattered and appreciative.
softerware |
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Re: Melancholy Morning
(User Rating: 1 ) by MoonlitAngel on
Saturday, 22nd June 2019 @ 07:59:42 PM AEST (User
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I love this simple phrase - "excavated dreams". really wonderful imagery all throughout the piece. it/'/s dark, but somehow has a happy ending. love it! |
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Re: Melancholy Morning
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 15th November 2019 @ 12:55:58 PM AEST (User
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Hmmm.. Fathers day poetry eh ?
That second stanza though!!
//The mind is a cache of indelible thoughts;
those buried the deepest
rise with the greatest anguish.//
Yes sir. .. .
And in other unrelated/related news, with the mention of dying butterflies and such ... for no reason at all I will tell you I’m currently housing a former wooly bear caterpillar (now cocooned), in my home. 🤷♀️ Since you’re curious, his (?) name is Wookie. Wook for short 😉.
None of us can escape metamorphosis in the end, huh?
~Scorp |
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