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[sid] => 185979
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[aid] => mick
[title] => Dark Destroyer
[time] => 2019-03-09 03:03:48
[hometext] => Dark Humor
[bodytext] => They hang in my attic
In alphabetical order
Cause I*m a dead body hoarder
Some are thin, some are fat
Some even have goiter
That*s what you get
When you loiter
Some are even my former employers
The law will never jail
The dark destroyer
Because I have
One hell of a lawyer
[comments] => 6
[counter] => 145
[topic] => 13
[informant] => Jamesstockdale
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Dark Destroyer
Contributed by
Jamesstockdale
on
Saturday, 9th March 2019 @ 03:03:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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They hang in my attic
In alphabetical order
Cause I*m a dead body hoarder
Some are thin, some are fat
Some even have goiter
That*s what you get
When you loiter
Some are even my former employers
The law will never jail
The dark destroyer
Because I have
One hell of a lawyer
Copyright ©
Jamesstockdale
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2019-03-09 03:03:48] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Dark Destroyer
(User Rating: 1 ) by ingeniusidiot on
Saturday, 9th March 2019 @ 06:57:28 PM AEST (User
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Though a great piece its a bit dark for you
The last line gives it that humorous twist which
if you hadnt mentioned it being "dark humor"
we/'/d be none the wiser until getting to the final line.
A dead body hoarder...hmmm...if for any lengthy
amount of time that must be hell on the sinuses and
stomach due to the gut wrenching smell (lol)
Once again great piece
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Re: Dark Destroyer
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 9th March 2019 @ 11:57:20 PM AEST (User
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Ha! I/'/ve a few I/'/d like you to take care of...what/'/s a couple more bodies between friends.
Well done bddy
Oh barkeep!!
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Re: Dark Destroyer
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 10th March 2019 @ 01:21:26 AM AEST (User
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starts out really dark,
and then the last line,
"Because I have a hell of a
Lawyer", susses it out and reigns it all
back into even
more darkness.
Scary and dark,
because it emotes
a terrible truth.
just how many
bodies are buried
by those who can
afford one hell
of a law firm,
no one really
knows.
Or so it
seems.
Great write ---
says something
without saying
it, making you
think.
Peace!
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Re: Dark Destroyer
(User Rating: 1 ) by Invierno on
Monday, 11th March 2019 @ 01:46:49 AM AEST (User
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I agree with Ingenious (anything but) Idiot. It IS a tad dark coming from you. That said, I THEN say, write more! Heck, we only use on average 6% or 7% of our noggin. Whop knows what would happen if we used untapped portions? John Travolta went super smart in that movie where he grew genius from a brain tumor. I liked the flow...a little herky, but on tack, with a nice dab of humor thrown in.
An interesting question arises from the movie premise.
Question-
Would you trade a long lifetime lived as a mundane, thoroughly average man to become a short lived flaming comet, but in that shorter time span, experienced a brilliance of intellect previously unknown to our collective human experience?
I/'/m interested in ANYONE responding to this. pm me. "Yes" or "No" answers are meaningless without defining why.
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Re: Dark Destroyer
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th August 2020 @ 05:22:41 AM AEST (User
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// Heeheehee. I love it!!!
Thanks,
tkd
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Re: Dark Destroyer
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th August 2020 @ 05:23:52 AM AEST (User
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// I`ll bet that lawyer is expensive!!!!
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