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[aid] => mick
[title] => Terror Inside
[time] => 2005-05-08 22:16:41
[hometext] => *** I've known for a while now that something was coming. I just didn't know what. This is what finally came. I can't (or won't?) explain it. ***
[bodytext] =>
I didn't realize it
until it was far too late.
Now, it seems so horribly obvious.
Terror... must be invisible.
How else would it gain entry?
Who would open the door to it
Unless they didn't know they were doing so?
Invisible, yes.
Until...
It grew tired of living inside
The seemingly secure walls that keep you
And the world
Apart.
Until...
It and you, intending or ignorant,
Stumble head long into each other
And collapse
Into one.
Until...
It grips you, wrapping its hands
Around your disbelieving throat until
You cannot
Breathe.
Yes, terror must be invisible.
Until... the moment
It chooses to show itself
A blood red beast
That looks far too much like a
grotesquely disfigured - you
As it stands there, laughing
At what was once you
And you
Remember...
That one day when a cold draft
Brushed across your knees
As you held the door open
For some salesman
That wouldn't go away
And you realize - far too late
That must have been when
You...
Let it in.
[comments] => 17
[counter] => 312
[topic] => 13
[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 43
[ratings] => 9
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => DarkPoetry
)
Terror Inside
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 10:16:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I didn't realize it
until it was far too late.
Now, it seems so horribly obvious.
Terror... must be invisible.
How else would it gain entry?
Who would open the door to it
Unless they didn't know they were doing so?
Invisible, yes.
Until...
It grew tired of living inside
The seemingly secure walls that keep you
And the world
Apart.
Until...
It and you, intending or ignorant,
Stumble head long into each other
And collapse
Into one.
Until...
It grips you, wrapping its hands
Around your disbelieving throat until
You cannot
Breathe.
Yes, terror must be invisible.
Until... the moment
It chooses to show itself
A blood red beast
That looks far too much like a
grotesquely disfigured - you
As it stands there, laughing
At what was once you
And you
Remember...
That one day when a cold draft
Brushed across your knees
As you held the door open
For some salesman
That wouldn't go away
And you realize - far too late
That must have been when
You...
Let it in.
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2005-05-08 22:16:41]
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Re: Terror Inside
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by CrimsonTears on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 10:37:45 PM AEST
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this is a really great poem..very deep...great job!
Lots of Love
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Re: Terror Inside
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 10:41:55 PM AEST
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| Very emotional and personal...I hope whatever demons you're dealing with you conquer. *hugs SnM* Scorp. |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 10:46:16 PM AEST
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oh absolutely astounding! WOW, this poem captured me so
just brilliant work and very thought provoking.
terror can overcome us when we least expect it and yes it is invisible inside us, especially to others.
lovely work, u should be proud |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by mina-1 on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 11:43:49 PM AEST
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A real thought provoking piece of poetry. I hope u overcome and beat the demons that harbour inside. Hang tuff.
A remarkable and very well conveyed poem.
*hugs*
~sue~ |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 01:53:12 AM AEST
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This was clearly emotive and sad at the same time. We sometimes harbor feelings we wish we couldn't feel and yet they somehow manage to creep back at us.
Nicely written Snemmita.
Hugs,
Jane xxx |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by SocialMisfit on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 02:04:51 AM AEST
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hmm this was good, it felt very dark and personal and sad, you did capture the feeling of terror very well too gratz.
SM |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 08:17:55 AM AEST
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This poem gets my between the lines comment, one need not go deep 2 feel the
the depths of what this poem is saying, and
says it very effectivly i might add, well written
posesses an inner strenght 2 it . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 09:05:22 AM AEST
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This poem gets my between the lines comment, one need not go deep 2 feel the
the depths of what this poem is saying, and
says it very effectivly i might add, well written
posesses an inner strenght 2 it . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by dthwlkr on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 03:00:04 PM AEST
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| errrrrrrrr you sure this is a poem???seems more like your thoughts have been tied together loosely.though beautifuly put but really puts strain on the head as it is quite confusing so thats what robs it of the unimaginable terror it can unleash.i read all the comments everybody seems to love it bring it out more clearly and trust me you'll blow the minds of all the readers.KEEP WORKING |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by secretwind on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 11:05:01 PM AEST
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Your Innervisions are soooooo Interesting
forget critics
flow on.....
The SecretWind |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 07:07:26 PM AEST
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This is truly brilliant expression, my friend. Well done! Your words are captivating, and terribly true at the same time.
Most definitely a five-star work.
Andrew |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 06:04:52 PM AEST
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wow so daeep and emotional.
great write. |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 17th May 2005 @ 07:02:52 AM AEST
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Absolutely gripping - and the realisation at the end chilled me to the bone! Another simply rendered, potent entry to your burgeoning folio.
My favourite lines
Terror… must be invisible.
How else would it gain entry?
always a pleasure,
Spike
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Re: Terror Inside
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by heartless_soul on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 06:41:53 PM AEST
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wow, is the only thing that comes to mind when I read this. It has truth in it that is rarly captured by artist today, Bravo. You showd us what its like to be the one over taken by terror. And terror is invisible untell it has you where it wants you then... it is the most horrifying thing that could ever be. Truly a poem worthy of note. Do keep up thew good work and I too hope that you will over come you troubles and pain that are in your life. I will pray for you. Be well
*H_S* |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by waos on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 10:52:43 PM AEST
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Wow, am I glad I read this. I can't presume to understand it in the way
you do, but perhaps that's the wonder of poetry, interpretation. This was
gorgeous and thoughtful and really makes one think. It seemed random,
but was truly tied together. The simplicity of the ending really brought it
home to me. That was what made it rock I think. Sweet work!
~Kara |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 09:18:12 PM AEST
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how did I miss this flow?
Excellent |
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Re: Terror Inside
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 11:18:53 PM AEST
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Whatever it was that inspired this poem, you need not explain. However, I am truly sorry for whatever pain you may have been going through at the time.
But inspiration did indeed cause you to write a remarkable and riveting poem to say the least.
I honestly believe that you could write anything about any subject and make it exciting and a thrill to read.
This was dark and descriptive. It had me pinned to the monitor. What an interesting perspective on an individual's own terrifying thoughts and problems.
Once again...
*applauds your talent*
*hugs all big and bear like just in case you needed it or need it*
Tim
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