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[aid] => mick
[title] => too far
[time] => 2005-03-29 23:39:41
[hometext] => This is my first thing I'm putting on here.........comments appreciated
[bodytext] => I feel the cool metal against my wrist
I can anticipate the blade going in.
I push it in….deeper and deeper it goes
A sigh of relief...........
But I realize what I’ve done
I’ve gone too far this time.
The bleeding wont stop
It turns my pale white skin…red
My favourite shirt…red
My mom’s brand new bathroom tile…red
I am beginning to feel weaker
And I fall to the floor
Should I call for help?
Or just sit here all alone
That’s how it’s been all my life
So why should it be different at the end
I didn’t want it to end this way
I never pictured this when I was little
I thought my life would be great
I would be a doctor and a mom
Not a suicidal maniac that dies on her bathroom floor
My breath is getting shorter
Is this what its like to die?
For the first time in my life
I’m happy and worry free
I can finally say I’m fine
[comments] => 6
[counter] => 227
[topic] => 72
[informant] => brokengirl
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 17
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
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too far
Contributed by
brokengirl
on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 11:39:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
self-harmpoetry
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I feel the cool metal against my wrist
I can anticipate the blade going in.
I push it in….deeper and deeper it goes
A sigh of relief...........
But I realize what I’ve done
I’ve gone too far this time.
The bleeding wont stop
It turns my pale white skin…red
My favourite shirt…red
My mom’s brand new bathroom tile…red
I am beginning to feel weaker
And I fall to the floor
Should I call for help?
Or just sit here all alone
That’s how it’s been all my life
So why should it be different at the end
I didn’t want it to end this way
I never pictured this when I was little
I thought my life would be great
I would be a doctor and a mom
Not a suicidal maniac that dies on her bathroom floor
My breath is getting shorter
Is this what its like to die?
For the first time in my life
I’m happy and worry free
I can finally say I’m fine
Copyright ©
brokengirl
... [
2005-03-29 23:39:41]
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Re: too far
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by ForeverAlone on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 01:23:47 AM AEST
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Wow...very heart felt....I hope this is just a muses thoughts and not your real feeling torwords life....even though at times this is the way I feel...I hope all is good in your life
Clark |
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Re: too far
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by iodinelove on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 01:53:11 AM AEST
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You know, I slit my wrist once a few years ago...at first I actually felt really good. Then I went into shock and my body started to panic and my mind had a big meltdown and then I was at the hospital....they stiched me up and stuck me in the Mward for a week. They gave me drugs that made me fall asleep and then woke me up and asked me if I was suicidal...
"I was asleep lady...jesus..."
anyway, nice and naive...reminds me of some of things i wrote when i was younger...err...assuming your younger...
anyway, keep posting
(oh, and don't worry, I'm naive as well^_^)
always, abraham |
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Re: too far
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by blue_angel on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 11:51:19 AM AEST
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wow well written... i can unfortunatly say that i can relate... i hope that this is only writing, but if it isnt i advise you that it isnt going to help you in the end. i know it feels good at first, but it becomes both a mental and physical addiction and its a terrible habit that too many people have, me included. but i have brought myself to see that hurting myself will only bring more trouble, but its been so long and its awfully hard to try and break the habit... sending hope, luv, many hugs,
*angel hope to hear more from you soon |
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Re: too far
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by THUGGIN4REAL on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 04:10:39 PM AEST
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| you kept it real. but by taking your own life is only coping out, live and learn,your here for a reason,find that reason and live through it. you have a skill people would die for, how many people do you know that cant express their feelings? you can , live through it. good write |
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Re: too far
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 05:47:14 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC !!! I hope you find this place as enjoyable as I have ... I don't relate to suicide poetry ... I have a hard time commenting on it. I do believe this is a great opening post and is very expressive. I hope to see much more you you ...
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: too far
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 02:54:20 AM AEST
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Well done. If you're not telling your story, you've convinced an audience that iyou are. Good job. Though I hope not, I believe it is your story, your name implies that it might be. If that be the case, I wish you strength to rise above. Your wrist need not join your bleeding heart.
Take care,
David |
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