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[aid] => mick
[title] => Here, Now, Tonight
[time] => 2005-03-28 03:10:03
[hometext] => *** Judith Pordon managed it in ten short lines in her extraordinary piece... it took me thirty four -- but I (*wink*) had more to say ***
[bodytext] =>
Dare I breathe even?
Would you hear, perhaps
Even the quietest of inhales
And exhales, were I to do so?
Might I be tempted to utter
Something perhaps not quite
Appropriate, were I to break
The seal that binds my lips
Under the guise of taking
A deep breath?
Had I and did you, could it
Somehow still be alright?
Or would moonbeams fade
And drift away on the memory
Of a shooting star? Would
Regret slip in and steal the air
And would the melody still
Live there? Or would the sound
Of my hushed and lonely voice
Tear it away?
Breathless, I am, and silent
At least for now as I consider the
Possibility that my eyes may
Give me away. Would you tell me
If they did? Should I close my eyes
And fall away to dream of moonbeams
Shining bright? And if I clasp
The air and beg the song and listen,
Quietly, as the night moves on…
Would that be alright?
- Or -
would you have me
breathe
... here, now, tonight?
[comments] => 17
[counter] => 347
[topic] => 2
[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 50
[ratings] => 10
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => LovePoetry
)
Here, Now, Tonight
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 03:10:03 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Dare I breathe even?
Would you hear, perhaps
Even the quietest of inhales
And exhales, were I to do so?
Might I be tempted to utter
Something perhaps not quite
Appropriate, were I to break
The seal that binds my lips
Under the guise of taking
A deep breath?
Had I and did you, could it
Somehow still be alright?
Or would moonbeams fade
And drift away on the memory
Of a shooting star? Would
Regret slip in and steal the air
And would the melody still
Live there? Or would the sound
Of my hushed and lonely voice
Tear it away?
Breathless, I am, and silent
At least for now as I consider the
Possibility that my eyes may
Give me away. Would you tell me
If they did? Should I close my eyes
And fall away to dream of moonbeams
Shining bright? And if I clasp
The air and beg the song and listen,
Quietly, as the night moves on…
Would that be alright?
- Or -
would you have me
breathe
... here, now, tonight?
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
... [
2005-03-28 03:10:03]
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by emystar on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 03:26:32 AM AEST
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wow this is definently a brethe taking masterpeice.
huggs,
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by Avernus on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 03:30:50 AM AEST
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| This is an amazing work of art. Very touching and incredibly well written.... in other words, beautiful! |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 06:09:59 AM AEST
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Whoa!!! now that was just breath taking.
Amazing lines and rythem Snemmy, im really impressed (remind me not to since you posses such skills as a writer) with this.
Anyways this was lovely and great, it was amazing really. Well done.
Jane |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by Kie on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 06:42:18 AM AEST
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I can't remember a time that I didn't appreciate quality poetry that could unravel the ribbons of my heart so to speak.
This poem I think will touch everyone on some level--maybe different levels and maybe it will be read and felt-- from the viewer's emotional eye. It just moves you and you comply due to the elegant way you pen your words.
From wishes to why's you weave the magic that makes me hold my breath.
Then of course I sigh and think "I wish I had written that".
Very well done again SNM.
Kie |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 07:04:53 AM AEST
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yes the soft wonderings of longing. I liked this - the atmosphere that permeated from your words, simple amd sweet.
Thanks for sharing this/
mj |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by Sensommar on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 07:20:35 AM AEST
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Painfully beautiful
The moment just before....A whspering delicate lovepoem .....beautiful With love Pia |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by sweetangeluk on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 08:30:40 AM AEST
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Beautiful so gentle and all inspiring.
A really magnificent write
Love Angelxxxx |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 10:15:49 AM AEST
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Hun..welcome back...
This is fabulous. It kept me reading all the way through. It even made me breathless. Lol.
I can't really tell you how much I love this poem, hun. My words would not do it justice.
I can't wait to read more.
Phil |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 02:12:53 PM AEST
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Were it up to me ... I would have you breathe ... here, now, and forever ... that I may rest my eyes upon many more such creations of words and beauty. And furthermore, I would have you with your eyes open, that you may point out all of the things that I fail to see.
Nazzy ~
( what he sees here is astounding ) |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 02:30:30 PM AEST
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Gosh.......sigh
This....this is sooo romantic.
I can almost hear your voice in this one. If the one I loved said this to me....I know what my answer would be...
Very stirring. |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by UnlovedChild on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 01:05:45 AM AEST
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| A beautifully written poem. |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by NightOwl on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 07:46:21 PM AEST
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Awesome... it conveys very strong emotions that really come through in this piece. Well done! Please write again.
*~Erin~* |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by freckle on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 10:27:33 PM AEST
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Oh Snemmy, you have been writing masterpieces....what wonderful reads...they remind me of the classics that I loved to read and re-read as a young woman. Great job with this write and I will be looking for more...
Carol (Who is of late reminded of an old comic strip where the guy has writer's block and what he has written so far is...The....) That is me lately! |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 11:21:29 PM AEST
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Wow!! What an exceptional piece of art you have here.....
Magnificent write!!!!
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 01:44:02 AM AEST
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This is outstanding. A masterpiece. I have to admit, I think this is definitely one of my favourites of yours. Your poetry is so delightful to read anyway, but this seriously is so original, creative and wonderful, I'm left in awe.
Take Care
- Becca |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 12:19:30 PM AEST
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| If I had to judge this book by it's cover, I'd say it was going to be unique, simply by reading the title you've come up with. Lol, as wrong as it was for me to do that, I was not at all let down by it. I just loved reading this one, and I guess I should probably add this one to the pile, as I have yet to read a poem that's disappointed me by you. I loved the flowing nature of this poem, as well as all your others. A lot of thought went into this one, from what I can tell, due to its ability to so greatly convey what you were trying to say in order to sort of make the conclusion make sense. Then again, I'm not sure if i'm making sense now, lol. That was one heck of a conclusion too. I just loved it, that title and that conclusion and simply the flowing nature of it all. Outstanding stuff! |
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Re: Here, Now, Tonight
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 11:11:47 PM AEST
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*sighs*
You write the most beautiful and exquisite love poems.
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