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[aid] => mick
[title] => Bolt Action Love Letters
[time] => 2005-02-20 02:41:51
[hometext] => ...wrote this awhile ago...just getting around to posting it...peace
[bodytext] => And every angel will fly
Over this twilight city skyline
And the doves all turn to ravens
While static flies through
Your timebomb eyes
If I told you the gun was loaded
Would you dance with me
And if I told you that you could pull the trigger
Would you kiss me one last time
So you might as well kill me
With your loaded lips
Feel my tongue against the
Cool brass of your cased love
You hit my with your bullets
And your slit wrist mind tricks
Though this time...
This time I'm shooting back
Cool brass-encased heartfelt bullets fly
From my ink-ridden gun as I
Write these letters I'll never send
So you might as well kill me
With your loaded lips
Feel my tongue against the
Cool brass of your cased love
[comments] => 7
[counter] => 240
[topic] => 34
[informant] => eyesxcriedxout1989
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[acomm] => 0
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[score] => 10
[ratings] => 2
[editpoem] => 1
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Bolt Action Love Letters
Contributed by
eyesxcriedxout1989
on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 02:41:51 AM in AEST
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And every angel will fly
Over this twilight city skyline
And the doves all turn to ravens
While static flies through
Your timebomb eyes
If I told you the gun was loaded
Would you dance with me
And if I told you that you could pull the trigger
Would you kiss me one last time
So you might as well kill me
With your loaded lips
Feel my tongue against the
Cool brass of your cased love
You hit my with your bullets
And your slit wrist mind tricks
Though this time...
This time I'm shooting back
Cool brass-encased heartfelt bullets fly
From my ink-ridden gun as I
Write these letters I'll never send
So you might as well kill me
With your loaded lips
Feel my tongue against the
Cool brass of your cased love
Copyright ©
eyesxcriedxout1989
... [
2005-02-20 02:41:51]
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Re: Bolt Action Love Letters
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by jmakuer on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 02:45:32 AM AEST
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| its aight well writen..come by and check out my poems |
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Re: Bolt Action Love Letters
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 03:56:20 AM AEST
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Good to see you posting again Mason, this was really good the presentation of the stanzas and the words were writen well.
Great song too.
Jane ^_^ |
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Re: Bolt Action Love Letters
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 06:08:15 AM AEST
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| ***** this is amazing.. well done!!! |
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Re: Bolt Action Love Letters
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by EVERxSOxSWEET on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 04:20:59 PM AEST
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| thats awesum mason..blehh im jealous..you're great at writting stuff...pm me when you get a chance |
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Re: Bolt Action Love Letters
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 05:12:55 PM AEST
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Cool stuff, Mason!
--Ghosty |
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Re: Bolt Action Love Letters
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 07:42:50 AM AEST
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Before reading through your lyrics I had assumed it was poetry, then after my first read, I felt like it should have been a song, as I looked beneath your title I saw that these were song lyrics and quietly nodded my head with agreement. *Lol *
Now with that said, I would like to congratulate you on the content.
People usually go on to describe one angel… yet you have surpassed that, stating that “every angel will fly”.
This line seems rather powerful to me, an excellent first line, which really throws you into the piece, effectively obtaining one’s interest.
“Twilight city skyline” –your settings are always vividly surreal.
“And the doves all turn to ravens”-much like a dream… shape-shifting the good, materialising it into evil.
“If I told you the gun was loaded, would you dance with me”… is true love worth dying for?
Perhaps!
“And if I told you that you could pull the trigger, would you kiss me one last time”… heart wrenching… ouch.
Your lyrics very much torture the heart, sufficiently.
“So you might as well kill me
With your loaded lips
Feel my tongue against the
Cool brass of your cased love”
Personification of love, through bullets, a dangerous liaison.
“This time I'm shooting back
Cool brass-encased heartfelt bullets fly
From my ink-ridden gun as I
Write these letters I'll never send”
-Insanely expressed.
The boy has talent.
“Ink ridden gun”
*Dies *
Wow.
*Dies again *
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Re: Bolt Action Love Letters
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 15th November 2014 @ 12:14:37 AM AEST
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DAMN!!!
cool brass of your cased love....
what a cost. damn dude. this was amazing. great lines and imagery. |
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