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[sid] => 84124
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Into the Nowhere
[time] => 2005-02-12 13:48:35
[hometext] => *** For Timbot's second challenge (oh! how enormously I struggled with this one!)
[bodytext] => A word is spoken
To a non-listening ear
And I remember
A moment gives in
To pathetic nothingness
And I envy it
Holding memories
Inside a tightly clenched fist
I try to follow
Begging the numbness
To reintroduce itself
I let go of you
Unrestricted now
But for your faithful shadow
I brave the abyss
From inside the void
I can hear your voice calling
I can still feel you
Your ever present
Silhouette stands before the
Disappearing sun
I let myself fall
Further into the nowhere
Until you are gone
In the dark alone
I find the answer you stole
All those years ago
I reach, only to
Feel the now familiar pain
As it slips away
[comments] => 12
[counter] => 300
[topic] => 61
[informant] => Silent-No-More
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 35
[ratings] => 7
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
)
Into the Nowhere
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 01:48:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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A word is spoken
To a non-listening ear
And I remember
A moment gives in
To pathetic nothingness
And I envy it
Holding memories
Inside a tightly clenched fist
I try to follow
Begging the numbness
To reintroduce itself
I let go of you
Unrestricted now
But for your faithful shadow
I brave the abyss
From inside the void
I can hear your voice calling
I can still feel you
Your ever present
Silhouette stands before the
Disappearing sun
I let myself fall
Further into the nowhere
Until you are gone
In the dark alone
I find the answer you stole
All those years ago
I reach, only to
Feel the now familiar pain
As it slips away
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2005-02-12 13:48:35]
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by ShadowDaughter on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 01:54:53 PM AEST
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My very breathing is shallow as I type this . . . I'm amazed. This is so beautiful, so powerful - so brave, hon - that I want to spirit it away, print it out, send it to a thousand famous publishers --all of whom will no doubt jump at the chance to publish this-- so it's forever immortalized and you can never deny that something so - so - so much - came from your pen.
I'm at a loss here, I honestly am. You and this are wonderful.
love,
Nora |
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 02:39:01 PM AEST
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Snemmy, that was just incredible. I agree with Nora 100% you could be such a wonderful published poet. I wouldnt mind buying this in a book. Great write, this is just amazing.
Jane x |
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 03:38:38 PM AEST
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| Excellent write. You should be really proud of this one! Much peace to you. Laura |
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 12th February 2005 @ 06:15:47 PM AEST
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I'm impressed! These are all such good and wonderful deep emotionally touched haiku. I especially like number five. It speaks of braveness. Kudos! (and cheers! :-) )
Onward!
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by Jen54 on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 12:42:49 PM AEST
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wow is all i can say at this moment.
There is so much emotion in it.
I LOVE IT!!!
-jen |
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 06:11:23 PM AEST
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Sorry Snemmy, gotta agree with Norry here, and everyone else too.
And you thought this was bad? Well girl, I think it is stunning...
I wish I could write a haiku that even came near to this in um...haikuness? lol
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 10:03:07 PM AEST
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This is probably the highest compliment I have ever given to anyone on this site. This reminds me of Bill Mallonee who wrote
"the guard just looked away, the moment has her say." The guy is just awesome, and so is this.
Here's the link, in case you're interested:
http://www.billandvol.com/music.asp
Stitch |
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 12:03:08 PM AEST
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Stunning ~
Well worth the struggle and the wait. Challenge met impressively. I'm unable to formulate much more than this as a response, as my words wish not to detract from what I have just read.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 08:09:25 PM AEST
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| good job! |
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by girltranscended on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 12:06:14 AM AEST
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Begging the numbness
To reintroduce itself
I let go of you
Your ever present
Silhouette stands before the
Disappearing sun
These are phenomenal! Great write! |
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 03:47:49 PM AEST
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| This is a very beautiful write. Good job. |
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Re: Into the Nowhere
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 01:17:41 AM AEST
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Amazing, and that seems not enough to describe what you have done here.
You know I'm not just saying this...your writing is beyond incredible.
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