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Array ( [sid] => 76173 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Dying in My Dreams [time] => 2004-12-17 10:21:08 [hometext] => sort of a Part 1 to a several-piece, long poem that I hope to write. a summary of my love life over the past few years, I guess. whatever gets me writing again. [bodytext] => When I'm dying in my dreams
I'm everything I'll ever be
My words are my life's sad song
And they will be here when I'm gone

...and I feel it slipping away...

Once upon a time, I had a dream
Where nothing at all was as it seemed
And I wondered how it could be wrong
When it always made me feel so strong
He was a voice of reason, a friend
One on whom I felt I could depend
His words, his thoughts, they kept me going
And I was falling without even knowing

Feeling so alone, empty and weak
Dissociated, I could not speak
The sky kept falling inside my head
Happiness hanging from a distant thread
Tangled up in his beautiful words
Reflecting the light, vision all blurred
Venomous eyes reduced me to tears
Everything I thought I knew just disappeared

Taken over, I could not forget
Actions I just refused to regret
Pushed and pulled, alone again and bent
But all along there was discontent
He came to me, falling so slowly
Till the day I found myself lonely
Waiting for something that would not come
Lost in love, I never thought I'd feel this numb...

and I let it all fall away...

Now I'm tearing at the seams
Screaming inside to be set free
But although I don't feel strong
I'll be holding you when you're gone... [comments] => 10 [counter] => 657 [topic] => 24 [informant] => MoonlitAngel [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 35 [ratings] => 7 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => LoveRemembered )
Dying in My Dreams

Contributed by MoonlitAngel on Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 10:21:08 AM in AEST
Topic: LoveRemembered



When I'm dying in my dreams
I'm everything I'll ever be
My words are my life's sad song
And they will be here when I'm gone

...and I feel it slipping away...

Once upon a time, I had a dream
Where nothing at all was as it seemed
And I wondered how it could be wrong
When it always made me feel so strong
He was a voice of reason, a friend
One on whom I felt I could depend
His words, his thoughts, they kept me going
And I was falling without even knowing

Feeling so alone, empty and weak
Dissociated, I could not speak
The sky kept falling inside my head
Happiness hanging from a distant thread
Tangled up in his beautiful words
Reflecting the light, vision all blurred
Venomous eyes reduced me to tears
Everything I thought I knew just disappeared

Taken over, I could not forget
Actions I just refused to regret
Pushed and pulled, alone again and bent
But all along there was discontent
He came to me, falling so slowly
Till the day I found myself lonely
Waiting for something that would not come
Lost in love, I never thought I'd feel this numb...

and I let it all fall away...

Now I'm tearing at the seams
Screaming inside to be set free
But although I don't feel strong
I'll be holding you when you're gone...




Copyright © MoonlitAngel ... [ 2004-12-17 10:21:08]
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Re: Dying in My Dreams (User Rating: 1 )
by pixie on Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 10:57:06 AM AEST
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such a sad and well expressed emotional write, great wrote Dee

pixie xx


Re: Dying in My Dreams (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 11:03:47 AM AEST
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amazing and brilliant write dee. well written and well expressed. i love your style. i hope to read your other parts to this =]


Re: Dying in My Dreams (User Rating: 1 )
by katyqueen35 on Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 12:30:39 PM AEST
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I agree with pix very sad write.
An excellent emotional poem.
great job.


Re: Dying in My Dreams (User Rating: 1 )
by Red_October on Friday, 17th December 2004 @ 01:49:40 PM AEST
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"His words, his thoughts, they kept me going
And I was falling without even knowing"

I relate to these lines the best. I really enjoyed reading this. Tiffany J. (Red_October)


Re: Dying in My Dreams (User Rating: 1 )
by Black13 on Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 11:25:11 AM AEST
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Wow....
This will be long indeed.
I would love to know what set this idea off and I hope you continue it through to the end.
Not your norm but I still liked it very much.


Re: Dying in My Dreams (User Rating: 1 )
by Rakerman1999 on Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 07:40:23 PM AEST
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excellent...I'll be watching the rest ;o)
Roses
Larry


Re: Dying in My Dreams (User Rating: 1 )
by Bridget_theMidget_Powerz on Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 11:33:46 PM AEST
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Wow, this is one of the best poems I've ever read, just as good as part two, which I read first heehee.


Re: Dying in My Dreams (User Rating: 1 )
by blowfish_jane on Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 01:52:39 AM AEST
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Dee, this is such a sad emotional write. It is writen and composed so well.

Hugs,
Jane x


Re: Dying in My Dreams (User Rating: 1 )
by Fionndruinne on Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 11:54:00 PM AEST
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A beautiful and touching piece. I like the elegance with which the emotion is portrayed. Well done, indeed.

Andrew


Re: Dying in My Dreams (User Rating: 1 )
by Wachumiri on Saturday, 1st December 2007 @ 06:33:56 AM AEST
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Wow...
I love that last line, it's so true. So often we cling to what we know, what we had, because there is at least a feeling of belonging, because we know that place.
Take care, that was a beautifully penned sigh.
David




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