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Repetition
Contributed by
pyrofungus
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Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 10:33:15 AM in AEST
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Screams mocked by the past
They wait and hide
Till the time is right
Reappearing in the mouths of angry fools
To repeat what has already happened before
In the past
Lies those words
Those cries
Those distorted faces
Crippled by anger
Time set aside in the future
To repeat the past
To set forth such anger
Mistakesthat are repeated
Over and over again
Life just repeats itself
Until you sit back and notice
Everything repeats itself over time
You cant stop it!
Youve tried
So you sit back
Listening to the screams
As the past fades into the future
And you cant do anything about it!
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2004-11-24 10:33:15]
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Re: Repetition
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by Onslaught on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 11:02:03 AM AEST
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| Yup, I sure have noticed that, but when we actually stop trying to help, is when we are truly dead and meaningless. It might not accomplish much in the end, and it probably never has before, but at least others can say that we tried. Very good insight you have there, good write. I have a poem similar to this, you should check it out if you are interested. It is called "Gestrandet Auf Der Oberfläche". |
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Re: Repetition
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by little_genna on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 11:27:38 AM AEST
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Hey
This poem is cool,
Ive noticed this as well,
But still we carry on repeating the same things.
I really like this poem, it holds alot of truth.
Take care
Gen xx |
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Re: Repetition
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 07:14:57 PM AEST
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| powerful. ::cant believe the stupidity i had at not noticing it:: very truthful and well written. |
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Re: Repetition
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by Undeadsuperstar on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 11:33:33 AM AEST
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| I like that the title of this is Repitition, because the ideas within are redundant in and of themselves. Time does slip into the past, but i think that the final line about how we can't do anything about it clashes with the rest of the poem. Sorta like you got to the end and weren't really sure how to end it. I do like your ideas though, bu remember (according to Einstein's theory of relativity) time is not cyclical, its linear. |
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Re: Repetition
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by Jen54 on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 11:47:55 AM AEST
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great write!
Keep it up!!!
-Jen |
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Re: Repetition
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by Dominick-Destruction on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 08:02:40 AM AEST
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Wow!...So blunt & powerful...I like it ^_^
xDDx |
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Re: Repetition
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by Mortis-Dark on
Monday, 6th December 2004 @ 11:42:29 AM AEST
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| This poem is amazing. I like the way you make your words seem to roll. Awesome write. |
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Re: Repetition
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by Amaterian_Angel on
Tuesday, 7th December 2004 @ 01:15:07 PM AEST
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| Thanks for your comment on my poem... Your poems are great (in a sad sorta way)... (^_^) |
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