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[aid] => mick
[title] => Exit Tomorrow
[time] => 2004-11-17 23:19:54
[hometext] => Hi,I'm New,..I made this poem up as i went along..Sorry if it's dull..
[bodytext] => Do you still see so clearly in my face?
The way you said you did the other day.
I'm not sure if we're okay.
My heart is burning from this pain.
Do you ever wonder why?
When you're alone and you cry.
Did you know i do the same?
These foolish games we choose to play.
I don't understand anything.
Atleast that's what he said before I left.
Now i'm here,and i miss him so much
I long for his touch..his touch..one more time..
It's not fair to want it all.
But what do you do when you're feeling so small.
You can't let go,but it hurts so much to hold onto.
And i don't know what to do...
So close your eyes,and I'll say goodbye.
This pain is too much for one life time.
I'm sorry for all the bad things i do...
I can't believe what I've done to you.
[comments] => 8
[counter] => 200
[topic] => 48
[informant] => tasteof_ink
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 14
[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => EmotionalPoetry
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Exit Tomorrow
Contributed by
tasteof_ink
on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 11:19:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Do you still see so clearly in my face?
The way you said you did the other day.
I'm not sure if we're okay.
My heart is burning from this pain.
Do you ever wonder why?
When you're alone and you cry.
Did you know i do the same?
These foolish games we choose to play.
I don't understand anything.
Atleast that's what he said before I left.
Now i'm here,and i miss him so much
I long for his touch..his touch..one more time..
It's not fair to want it all.
But what do you do when you're feeling so small.
You can't let go,but it hurts so much to hold onto.
And i don't know what to do...
So close your eyes,and I'll say goodbye.
This pain is too much for one life time.
I'm sorry for all the bad things i do...
I can't believe what I've done to you.
Copyright ©
tasteof_ink
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2004-11-17 23:19:54]
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Re: Exit Tomorrow
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by a_bear on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 11:33:19 PM AEST
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| Hi..welcome to the site. Good start. post more..don't expect too many replies..lol; sometimes we're a lazy bunch! Sometimes we're good though.. we try hard. good job..and again, welcome, my name's mary.. don't judge me by that last piece of trash.. read .. let's see..read them all..LOL. |
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Re: Exit Tomorrow
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by kaytie on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 11:38:31 PM AEST
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| hi, thanks for commenting on my poem..i'm new at this too. your poem was good..i can definitely relate. lata |
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Re: Exit Tomorrow
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by TheRaven on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 12:12:44 AM AEST
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Yes, welcome. As with your other poem, this is very good. I agree with a_bear, we can sometimes be very lazy at replying. However, I'm trying to do three a night. lol.
Anyway, great write. Why all the guilt? Well, have fun at YDPC. peace
the raven |
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Re: Exit Tomorrow
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by Row on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 01:22:35 AM AEST
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| hello, make urself at home and have a nice stay |
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Re: Exit Tomorrow
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by witch_derna on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 01:36:51 AM AEST
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Welcome, Im kinda new here to. My husband recommended this site to me. So far it's pretty cool. It's easy for me to say let go of your pain but doing it is a whole different thing.
Blessings sent to you.
MaDonna |
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Re: Exit Tomorrow
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by brokenwings on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 03:49:45 AM AEST
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well every one else has welcomed you and i'm not one to rock the boat so welcome.. have fun...great write...
tasha |
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Re: Exit Tomorrow
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 06:51:11 AM AEST
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Welcome to our family, lol looking at the comments made me wonder wether I am lazy....lol nah i comment on alot of writes, the difference with me is I dont spend as much time on the site as others...so if I miss a poem just pm me and I will be happy to take a look and have read...leave a comment and maybe even a star :D
As to this poem, I enjoyed it, you have an awesome talent..espeicially for something just thrown together..to me it looks like a poem carefully composed over a few days or more.
Felt what you described..the sadness the tenderness the tears, a picture you did paint leaving its inprint in my mind..awesome poem. |
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Re: Exit Tomorrow
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 08:29:45 AM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC!!! :)
I really like this and I also have to say it is brilliant for something just thrown together. I would have also said this seems like it has been looked at for days. lol.
Stunning. (And not dull at all)
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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