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sit down my dear
i'll tell u a story
about a land far away from here.

it's a land of mystery
of wonderful dreams
it has everything you've ever wanted
of all types of things.

it's got a beautiful ocean
that when u look out
all u can see
is a deep blue ocean
a never ending sea.

and it has mountains
with snow at the peek
up there so high
it could snow for weeks.

then there's the forest
with all kinds of spiders and snakes
and beautiful trees
that have tropical birds and a wonderful lake
right in the middle
so there's nothing at stake.

then there's a desert
it seems as hot as the sun
all kinds of creatures live there
so you'd beter beware.

now my dear
you must go to sleep
your very sick this month
so dream of a land that you can keep.

i turn around
there the child sleeps
never to wake again.
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a land far away

Contributed by shorty_52 on Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 01:53:50 AM in AEST
Topic: fictional

now now now
sit down my dear
i'll tell u a story
about a land far away from here.

it's a land of mystery
of wonderful dreams
it has everything you've ever wanted
of all types of things.

it's got a beautiful ocean
that when u look out
all u can see
is a deep blue ocean
a never ending sea.

and it has mountains
with snow at the peek
up there so high
it could snow for weeks.

then there's the forest
with all kinds of spiders and snakes
and beautiful trees
that have tropical birds and a wonderful lake
right in the middle
so there's nothing at stake.

then there's a desert
it seems as hot as the sun
all kinds of creatures live there
so you'd beter beware.

now my dear
you must go to sleep
your very sick this month
so dream of a land that you can keep.

i turn around
there the child sleeps
never to wake again.

Copyright © shorty_52 ... [ 2004-07-31 01:53:50]
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Re: a land far away (User Rating: 1 )
by kyletycz on Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 01:57:33 AM AEST
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its very interesting, i like it...... keep up the good work

Re: a land far away (User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 02:11:26 AM AEST
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good topography.yea...it is interesting.. venkat

Re: a land far away (User Rating: 1 )
by MJC on Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 02:44:32 AM AEST
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i like the idea of the poem and i can picture the whole scene, i was really shocked about the ending though, didn't see that coming.

Re: a land far away (User Rating: 1 )
by secretwind on Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 02:48:54 AM AEST
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I dig the scenic vibe....

Re: a land far away (User Rating: 1 )
by deathdrop on Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 03:52:39 AM AEST
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beautiful description! but very sadly ended...
i'm sure the child will be traveling there!

Re: a land far away (User Rating: 1 )
by AspenGlow on Saturday, 31st July 2004 @ 01:25:31 PM AEST
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Sounds like a place to stay in and never wake up.

Very Good write, thank you for sharing.

Re: a land far away (User Rating: 1 )
by Heartfilledblood on Monday, 9th August 2004 @ 12:46:46 AM AEST
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This ending is pretty crazy. Very sad. But the descriptions of places would set any kid in a place of happiness. Great write babe :)

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