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[title] => DRUNK ON A BUS
[time] => 2004-06-15 16:30:01
[hometext] => Watching drunks can be very entertaining......they come up with the best comments!
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"DRUNK ON A BUS"
I like watching drunk men.
Completely uninhibited again, and again.
They seem to be so at peace,
in their own skin, such a release!
In all my travels, I observed many.
Traversing a street, full of brandy.
But seeing a drunk on a transit bus...
I laughed so hard, I exited with weakness.
Driver was impatient with him,
as he staggered a board!
Fumbling, he couldn't find his pocket where
his money is stored!
Finally the driver just takes off!
The drunk reacts to the sudden movement
by stumbling on the floorboard!
Then he proceeds to stumble to the back.
The Bus stops at the next stop, to the front
his comeback!
He is still fumbling, trying to retrieve his change.
When the bus starts up again, he finds this most strange?
Once again he stumbles toward the back.
Next stop the same thing happens,
jerking forward.....controls he lack!
Finally after several stops, he's had enough!!!
He exits from the front, no more of this stuff!!!
"Hey," shouts the bus driver...."You didn't pay today!"
The drunk, reeling, shouts back.......
"Why should I?--I had to walk all the way!!!"
Created by
Cheri Cam LeBren
June 14, 2004
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
"It was a woman who drove me to drink, and
I never had the courtesy to thank her for it!"
~W. C. Fields~
"Sober Smiles!"
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DRUNK ON A BUS
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lovingcritters
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Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 04:30:01 PM in AEST
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"DRUNK ON A BUS"
I like watching drunk men.
Completely uninhibited again, and again.
They seem to be so at peace,
in their own skin, such a release!
In all my travels, I observed many.
Traversing a street, full of brandy.
But seeing a drunk on a transit bus...
I laughed so hard, I exited with weakness.
Driver was impatient with him,
as he staggered a board!
Fumbling, he couldn't find his pocket where
his money is stored!
Finally the driver just takes off!
The drunk reacts to the sudden movement
by stumbling on the floorboard!
Then he proceeds to stumble to the back.
The Bus stops at the next stop, to the front
his comeback!
He is still fumbling, trying to retrieve his change.
When the bus starts up again, he finds this most strange?
Once again he stumbles toward the back.
Next stop the same thing happens,
jerking forward.....controls he lack!
Finally after several stops, he's had enough!!!
He exits from the front, no more of this stuff!!!
"Hey," shouts the bus driver...."You didn't pay today!"
The drunk, reeling, shouts back.......
"Why should I?--I had to walk all the way!!!"
Created by
Cheri Cam LeBren
June 14, 2004
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
"It was a woman who drove me to drink, and
I never had the courtesy to thank her for it!"
~W. C. Fields~
"Sober Smiles!"
Copyright ©
lovingcritters
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2004-06-15 16:30:01]
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by 01_zanzebar on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 04:37:47 PM AEST
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hahahahhahah, that is absolutly flimmin' fantaschtische, danke lol, i know the comedy of drunks on the bus too, luvly work. good day |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by slackoffsamiam on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 04:38:36 PM AEST
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| That was an excellent poem, I like the ending. |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by yellow_sundragon on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 05:11:31 PM AEST
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Ahhh.... This made me smile... a good poem... Though when I first read your note I thought to myself that I don't see anything funny with public drunkness.... Now I see what you mean...
Jaime |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 05:39:43 PM AEST
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Ja wirklich fantastisch.fantastisch, !
Grossartig.!
Exceedingly well penned ConSue.
We ought to meet these fellows that are so inspiring that poets exalt them.
Great writing Con Sue
FAMTASTOSCJH!
lOVE AND PEACE
eLIZABETH |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 05:53:34 PM AEST
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I really enjoyed reading that.
I've perchanced across many a drunkard on a bus, and have even entertained the role myself on more than a few occasions. ;o)
Great visuals. |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 06:32:41 PM AEST
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lmao! hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 06:34:35 PM AEST
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This is sad and funny at the same time. They can either be very obnoxious or very comical. You had a comical one thank goodness.
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 07:18:04 PM AEST
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growing up w/ my father i was around drunks alot, which supplied me w/ a lot of laughs as a teenager
Hugs
Shari |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by Dusty on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 07:42:08 PM AEST
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| Oh, this one made me giggle. I love it! |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by JT on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 09:38:51 PM AEST
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great story. smiles all round
-jt- |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by LOWMAN613 on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 10:39:50 PM AEST
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| I needed this great laugh! Christina |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 02:41:55 AM AEST
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Funny!
luv your brat,
emy |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 03:58:30 AM AEST
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| Aww very funny..very nice poem. venkat |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 05:35:10 AM AEST
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heheheeh this was great, best one I've read in a while :)
pixie xx |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by Aika on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 01:35:09 PM AEST
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| you are really amazing! omg!! absolute talent, what else you can write about? or.. better question: is there something, you could not write about??? Truely amazing, CONNIE!!! Love, AIka:-) |
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by AnGeL_M on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 07:01:22 PM AEST
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Connie This Was Great Loved It Excellent Write G/F !!!!
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Re: DRUNK ON A BUS
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by Baronhawk on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 08:03:33 AM AEST
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In truth I find no consequence from this tale I most want only to abandon...(a drunk friend once threw up in my car and I have an aversion to drunken persons afterward...not to mention in my faith it is forbidden to indulge in the drink...oh well anyway... faith are but a cover to many these days...) But as always in your gentle writes you have found a way to insinuate an ounce of your infallible humor to warm the heart. I was laughing at this tale...one more reason to those who drink to abstain...I guess the stupidity that drinks brings out in us...heh heh heh... A nicely woven tale of a humorous story. Once again your humor doth tends to bring laughter in to the lives of your readers... Nice write!
"behold..upon this stage...the antics of drunken men..." |
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