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Frozen
Contributed by
Dierna
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Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 04:23:03 PM in AEST
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Frozen inside Without you Leave me here How can you Take the fools Way out
A witches spell Cast by an Angel I try to release What was never mine I try to release The love inside
Frozen inside Without you Leave me here How can you Take the fools Way out
Leaving me I don't get a choice Coward, Fool! The love of my life All describe The one that was never mine.
Frozen inside Without you Leave me here How can you Take the fools Way out
Bound by power love and soul You never were You always are The one inside me The one I can never reach
Frozen inside Without you Leave me here How can you Take the fools Way out
Saved by Grace Called by god Bring back the feelings Return the life Bring back the Love inside!
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Dierna
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2004-05-27 16:23:03] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Frozen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Overstated on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 04:50:55 PM AEST (User
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| nice heartfelt piece nicely done!!! |
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Re: Frozen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Whisper on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 06:10:38 PM AEST (User
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Nice .I can almost hear those words put to music.
Whisper
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Re: Frozen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kusko on
Monday, 21st June 2004 @ 07:11:33 PM AEST (User
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Good
but the spacing of the poem is too broken.
I really like the ideas behind it and the thoughts, but maybe you should try more flowing lines in your poetry.
Right now it sounds like spaztic sobs.
But that's not necessarily a bad thing if that's what you were going for.
~Kusko |
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