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[aid] => mick
[title] => Scared
[time] => 2004-05-10 16:42:08
[hometext] => I've discovered how hard it can be to trust people.
[bodytext] => I quiver here.
Tears drown my eyes.
I'm afraid that I love you.
I'm scared that I'll try.
Will you hurt me,
Like all the rest?
My heart says you won't,
That you'll try your best.
But how can it be?
That you could love me.
I am so untrusting.
How true can it be?
I deserve not your love,
Nor your friendship at that,
But I treasure it whole-heartedly,
I'm so seemingly trapped.
It scares me when you
Tell me you'll be there for me,
But what hurts me more,
Is when I doubt that you will be.
Don't promise me.
Don't let me down.
You made my heart soar
With a hope so profound.
I want to trust you,
As does my heart,
But when so many times broken,
Difficult is its part.
Thank you for your promise
To always be there.
Can you hold to that oath?
Do you unconditionally care?
What is a friend?
I'd have to say you,
Who convinced my sore heart
That love could be true!
[comments] => 9
[counter] => 173
[topic] => 48
[informant] => eatfresh22
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[pollID] => 0
[score] => 35
[ratings] => 7
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => EmotionalPoetry
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Scared
Contributed by
eatfresh22
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Monday, 10th May 2004 @ 04:42:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I quiver here.
Tears drown my eyes.
I'm afraid that I love you.
I'm scared that I'll try.
Will you hurt me,
Like all the rest?
My heart says you won't,
That you'll try your best.
But how can it be?
That you could love me.
I am so untrusting.
How true can it be?
I deserve not your love,
Nor your friendship at that,
But I treasure it whole-heartedly,
I'm so seemingly trapped.
It scares me when you
Tell me you'll be there for me,
But what hurts me more,
Is when I doubt that you will be.
Don't promise me.
Don't let me down.
You made my heart soar
With a hope so profound.
I want to trust you,
As does my heart,
But when so many times broken,
Difficult is its part.
Thank you for your promise
To always be there.
Can you hold to that oath?
Do you unconditionally care?
What is a friend?
I'd have to say you,
Who convinced my sore heart
That love could be true!
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eatfresh22
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2004-05-10 16:42:08]
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Re: Scared
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by burdened on
Monday, 10th May 2004 @ 05:01:14 PM AEST
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very fresh and very true.
spoken like a true poet. |
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Re: Scared
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 10th May 2004 @ 09:32:11 PM AEST
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Aww...
Beautifully done. Your way of writing is very graceful. And no spelling errors!
ME AND DAVID are proud.
Foscathà, Ceima
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Re: Scared
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by eatfresh22 on
Tuesday, 11th May 2004 @ 10:07:35 AM AEST
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| Andrew! It's DAVID and I!!!!!! Are you ever going to get it right? You are so old and stubborn and set in your ways. Nineteen year old boys! Fiesty characters I tell you. |
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Re: Scared
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 11:33:44 AM AEST
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Ah, well. I suppose it takes my great age to learn the hidden complexities of Life, as well as language. Such as, for instance, that it is PERFECTLY ACCEPTABLE to use "me and David" instead of "David and I", regardless of what the grammarians say. There's no reason the personal pronoun can't be subject as well as object in this part of speech.
You'll see it one day, when you're old like me. But we love you as a kid, Carrie!
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Re: Scared
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 12th May 2004 @ 02:12:59 PM AEST
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Don't be scared of love. It may lead you on a path seldom walked, one where you've never been, but that's the magic of love. Seeing the beautiful, wonderful world for the first time. You see the world from a whole new point of view (you know, like if you stood on your desk...)
Yes Andrew, we are glad and happy and all those adjectives!
Keep writing Carrie. (You'll age soon enough)
Take care
David |
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Re: Scared
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by liquidsunshine on
Thursday, 27th May 2004 @ 04:01:29 PM AEST
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This one reminds me a bit of one of my poems... can't remember what I called it at the moment, but it's got something in it like
"Just four letters
Full of ____
That strike terror
With one mere sound"
Anywho... its good to know that you are honest with yourself about your feelings. I think love really is scary... but to different people, its scary for different reasons.
AND...Yet again, you've got such a great poem that I don't even know how to praise you.
Love,
Chelsea |
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Re: Scared
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by GeorgeJamesDelgado on
Tuesday, 15th June 2004 @ 10:16:24 AM AEST
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Oh, sooo honest and true. I can feel you.
The woman that I love ( she lives in another state ) I think, is becoming disenterested in me. She told me that she was going to perform some healing sessions with some friends from out of town last Saturday. She didn't leave me any message on my cell phone. I know I have a problem trusting women that I love. I asked her Monday morning why she hadn't contacted me and she told me that she went to the movies with her friends. Then ( I may have screwed up here) I asked who her friends were and she said that I didn't know them. Right away I became suspicious, thinking that she went out with a male friend ( specifically with a lover that she used to have; she told me that he lives in another state). I asked her again who her friends were and she blew her stack.
She doesn't share with me as I do with her.
I think that she went out with a male friend. I am married ( my wife changed many years ago) she is divorced. We went together during out senior year in high school and I loved her very much. Please give me a woman's viewpoint if you would. I need help here.
Thanks--Love your poem
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Re: Scared
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by SweetRhythm on
Wednesday, 16th June 2004 @ 08:27:24 AM AEST
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What can I say.....sensational, truly amazing. Excellent write, I thouroughly enjoyed every verse. Very well put together. So true of many peoples fears to let people in, especially where love is concerned.
Corinna |
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Re: Scared
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by faith_my_eyes on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 04:26:29 PM AEST
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Wonderful! And the one for whom you wrote this... is worthy of trusting. He is one of the most loyal people I know.... Just remember, above all, trust the Lord. He is the one who ultimately shows us and teaches us how to trust.
Em |
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