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Array ( [sid] => 45979 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Trouble in paradise [time] => 2004-05-03 08:59:16 [hometext] => [bodytext] => The sea slaps the sand
cleansing the sure
washing away impurities with the tide
the ripples of waves surface occasionally
like yesterdays guilt
and the sunrises to emphasise a new start

it seams so long since I played in the sand
when my ignorance created bliss
combined with innocence they walked hand in hand

now I march
denting the sand
big heavy footprints
dug like a trench
as a forget me not
a reminder of the present

I don’t know exactly how long i will be stuck on this beach
with the only things as company the birds flying over me
so much beauty
in paradise
but when you cant share it
its not so nice

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Trouble in paradise

Contributed by loopylou on Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 08:59:16 AM in AEST
Topic: oops

The sea slaps the sand
cleansing the sure
washing away impurities with the tide
the ripples of waves surface occasionally
like yesterdays guilt
and the sunrises to emphasise a new start

it seams so long since I played in the sand
when my ignorance created bliss
combined with innocence they walked hand in hand

now I march
denting the sand
big heavy footprints
dug like a trench
as a forget me not
a reminder of the present

I don’t know exactly how long i will be stuck on this beach
with the only things as company the birds flying over me
so much beauty
in paradise
but when you cant share it
its not so nice

Copyright © loopylou ... [ 2004-05-03 08:59:16]
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Re: Trouble in paradise (User Rating: 1 )
by dAWn on Monday, 3rd May 2004 @ 09:14:25 AM AEST
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very pictoresque, though a tad sad.... liked the symbolism

Re: Trouble in paradise (User Rating: 1 )
by JennyFruFru on Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 12:33:31 PM AEST
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i agree its def. paints a vivid image and the symbolism is awesome.........its seem so lonely and isolated there ..... :) :) :) good place to ponder i guess.....

Re: Trouble in paradise (User Rating: 1 )
by prajwal on Wednesday, 2nd June 2004 @ 06:02:06 AM AEST
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GOOD WRITE! THE WORDS , THE EXPRESSIONS ARE ALL SO PERFECT AND WELL PLACED. WISH TO READ YOUR OTHER COMPOSITIONS TOO.

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