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[aid] => mick
[title] => Do you still...?
[time] => 2004-02-07 14:42:23
[hometext] => Just written this poem, it tells exactly what I've just experienced, I'm not a victim in it don't know what to say still feeling blue
[bodytext] => Do you still think about me? Did you forgive me? Do you despise me now?,
I don’t want a serious relation, stop pestering me, that’s what I told you,
It just that I got tired of your perfect act, what did you expect a kiss and a bow?,
Our relation was a simple lie, both hid our true feelings, how could I let it continue?
You took me out and saw a horror movie, told me was one of your favourites,
I knew you were lying just to please me, kept closing your eyes all the time,
Breathing over my neck every second, what did you think I am one of your puppets?
Behaved like a perfect gentleman but I knew it was all fake, I got tired of your pantomime
Still I’m sitting here in front of my laptop writing a poem and decide to dedicate it to you,
Because although I knew that what we had wasn’t true, I can’t stop feeling blue
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[informant] => necromant
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[score] => 15
[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
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Do you still...?
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necromant
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Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 02:42:23 PM in AEST
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Do you still think about me? Did you forgive me? Do you despise me now?,
I don’t want a serious relation, stop pestering me, that’s what I told you,
It just that I got tired of your perfect act, what did you expect a kiss and a bow?,
Our relation was a simple lie, both hid our true feelings, how could I let it continue?
You took me out and saw a horror movie, told me was one of your favourites,
I knew you were lying just to please me, kept closing your eyes all the time,
Breathing over my neck every second, what did you think I am one of your puppets?
Behaved like a perfect gentleman but I knew it was all fake, I got tired of your pantomime
Still I’m sitting here in front of my laptop writing a poem and decide to dedicate it to you,
Because although I knew that what we had wasn’t true, I can’t stop feeling blue
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Re: Do you still...?
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by Trhpeanut on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 03:17:03 PM AEST
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Very beautiful poem. and exellent use of words. i'm sorry about your 'loss' if that's what you want to call it. but remember..someone better will come along.
-words of 'wisdom' from the mind of tiffany. |
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Re: Do you still...?
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by booboo on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 03:24:04 PM AEST
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~aww~{as tears roll down}ur poem reminded me so much of someth'n i once had with someone who i thought was special,but obviously it wasn't all that great at all,any ways GREAT work!!!!
Booboo
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Re: Do you still...?
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 06:18:42 PM AEST
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| its hard when love upsets you; goes on with its life and forgets you, keep writin' although your feelin' blue; may true love come to you, hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Do you still...?
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by emystar on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 06:30:48 PM AEST
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Very good job here.
Luv your struture of diving right to the point.
Better 2 know now so u can put behind u or try again. Either way it's a great write. It shows how one juw humbles in luv at times.
hang, tuff, luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Do you still...?
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by Kie on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 09:31:45 PM AEST
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| You expressed what I have thought so many times. You expressed it well. Hang in there, I hope it gets better. Kie |
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Re: Do you still...?
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by harshreality on
Sunday, 8th February 2004 @ 02:45:20 AM AEST
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| I think you cared about this person more than you realized. Sometimes people pretend to like things you do b/c they want to get close to you to know you and they don't know how to get their foot in the door. It doesn't neccesarily meen they're feelings aren't true it just meens they're intentions were misunderstood. Once they feel closer to you they usually open up and show their true selves. Everything takes time. Maybe you should give this person a 2nd chance. You never know what could happen. |
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Re: Do you still...?
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by venkat on
Monday, 9th February 2004 @ 03:54:04 AM AEST
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| painted a situation very well .. and expressed the feelings also very nicely..venkat |
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Re: Do you still...?
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by Wrybod on
Monday, 9th February 2004 @ 05:56:30 AM AEST
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Me "to a tee"between the ages of 22 and 27.
All came to an end in my poem ......
.Wolf....with hindsight.
I wish I'd been able to read poems like this back then
bob |
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Re: Do you still...?
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by loveisendless on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 11:43:58 PM AEST
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TRUE BLUE? YOU SOUND TOO GOOD FOR ALL HE HAS TO OFFER!! YOU SHOULD BE YOURSELF AS HE SHOULD ALSO!! A LOVE YOU MAKE CAN'T BE NOTHING IF IT'S ALL FAKE!!! YOU DID THE RIGHT THING NO MATTER HOW MUCH IT HURT!!!! A VERY NICE POEM INDEED!!!!!
LOL-DAN!!!!!! |
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Re: Do you still...?
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by arden on
Thursday, 1st April 2004 @ 11:30:55 AM AEST
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very beautiful and sad. nicely written. loved this. keep it up.
Arden |
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