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[catid] => 1
[aid] => Mick
[title] => The Wait
[time] => 2003-09-22 11:05:00
[hometext] => I can`t tell you the feeling watching life drain,
I can`t tell you why I see.
[bodytext] => She sat at the curb rocking,
missing the touch, tastes, smells
of earth she left behind.
Night held her
in its cradle, safe
from the eyes
of the world;
she cried.
Relieved from words
to the people that loved her,
no chance to confess
mistakes she made.
Deep in the night,
the dark as a shield,
she waited; then watched
as they carried her body away.
Late last night
a young girl fell asleep
at the wheel........ Crow
[things I see in the dead of night]
Please, be aware, buckle-up,
and do not drink and drive....
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 192
[topic] => 39
[informant] => crow
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 9
[ratings] => 2
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Grief
)
The Wait
Contributed by
crow
on
Monday, 22nd September 2003 @ 11:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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She sat at the curb rocking,
missing the touch, tastes, smells
of earth she left behind.
Night held her
in its cradle, safe
from the eyes
of the world;
she cried.
Relieved from words
to the people that loved her,
no chance to confess
mistakes she made.
Deep in the night,
the dark as a shield,
she waited; then watched
as they carried her body away.
Late last night
a young girl fell asleep
at the wheel........ Crow
[things I see in the dead of night]
Please, be aware, buckle-up,
and do not drink and drive....
Copyright ©
crow
... [
2003-09-22 11:05:00]
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Re: The Wait
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd September 2003 @ 11:22:21 AM AEST
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that is a horrible thing to see and feel. your poem is strong, and i think a tribute to the girl who lost her life. painted_echos
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Re: The Wait
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by Ilhar on
Monday, 22nd September 2003 @ 11:25:12 AM AEST
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well written and oh so sad w/ a very good message
Shari |
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Re: The Wait
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by jaeann on
Monday, 22nd September 2003 @ 11:35:30 AM AEST
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| how so sad........i am sorry you had to be there for that.... |
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Re: The Wait
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by norm on
Monday, 22nd September 2003 @ 12:07:13 PM AEST
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If you could stop, there is no doubt,
The carnage that you see about,
The horror of the roadway smash
sometimes caused by dope or hash
You'd do it Crow, that I know.
The girl's asleep, her soul to keep
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Re: The Wait
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by Walt on
Monday, 22nd September 2003 @ 12:23:14 PM AEST
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Sad is the song that ends young, sadder is the song, that should not have ended. Good write.
walt |
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Re: The Wait
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by LovingWhispers on
Monday, 22nd September 2003 @ 06:32:31 PM AEST
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Its amazing..no matter how many times we are warned,shown what can happen for our actions,some just never..for whatever reason..listen.Such a sad event.Hope you are okay.
My poem"the phonecall" was written to show the pain a drunk driver can cause.Please take care..I know you carry these burdens of the night with you... |
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Re: The Wait
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by EmSal on
Tuesday, 23rd September 2003 @ 01:02:23 AM AEST
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Such an emotional write, beautifully written. I have been in a few car accidents myself, where I wasn't the driver and I have seen and felt things myself, so I can understand the message of this poem. It's a tragic loss. All the best. Take care.
Emma. |
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Re: The Wait
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 23rd September 2003 @ 09:47:26 AM AEST
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Crow
it takes an incredible person to do the job that you do.This is a touching write with a very good message. I lost a best friend due to a drunk driver .
Michelle |
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Re: The Wait
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th September 2003 @ 09:25:02 AM AEST
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It's so sad to see the affects of alcohol and what its abuse does.And even the none drinkers are affected by alcohol.
This is a lovely write with a much needed message. I only wish the old adage live and learn sunk into peoples heads!
Well spoken,crow! :'(''''''''''' {{{crow}}}
Angel always...godspeed my friend...joni |
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Re: The Wait
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by Merry on
Wednesday, 24th September 2003 @ 09:17:16 PM AEST
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this is so sad and so real - you are a special person to be able to do what you do - just to be there - even when there is nothing you can do - it must be terrible for you.
And thanks for reminding all of us to buckle up and drive safe.
merry
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