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[title] => No So Dearly Departed
[time] => 2019-04-04 18:20:39
[hometext] => Be careful where you rest.
[bodytext] => Burning sun. The boy laid back.
A shady tree. A grassy nap.
The earth yawned and swallowed.
He sunk in black hollows.
Below. With me. To stay.
Who slept upon my grave today.
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No So Dearly Departed
Contributed by
softerware
on
Thursday, 4th April 2019 @ 06:20:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
fictional
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Burning sun. The boy laid back.
A shady tree. A grassy nap.
The earth yawned and swallowed.
He sunk in black hollows.
Below. With me. To stay.
Who slept upon my grave today.
Copyright ©
softerware
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2019-04-04 18:20:39] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: No So Dearly Departed
(User Rating: 1 ) by ingeniusidiot on
Thursday, 4th April 2019 @ 07:02:21 PM AEST (User
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Kinda reminds me of Aladdin when he is standing
before the entrance of the Cave of Wonders and the
Cave asks "Who dare disturbs my slumber?!"
Its a different kind of piece for you.
Although fictional there is a dark element to your
piece as well.
Brilliant absolutely brilliant
Rich |
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Re: No So Dearly Departed
(User Rating: 1 ) by JamesStockdale on
Thursday, 4th April 2019 @ 11:20:18 PM AEST (User
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Two of these on one page....neat.
Yes it is dark for you. Nice and chilling. |
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Re: No So Dearly Departed
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jecks on
Thursday, 4th April 2019 @ 11:46:58 PM AEST (User
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Ha! The first thing I thought of was COOL!
But seriously I love the way you put this together. It reads well and entertains! |
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