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[title] => Liquid Spiders
[time] => 2014-12-01 10:32:28
[hometext] => If I can't be honest here, then where?
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My robed wife- a Tuesday, 7 PM.
Standing at the table under the naked kitchen light;
gathered and rowed- one more thing to do,
empty ½ pints, pints, a fifth or two.
“Spiders”, she calls them,
vodka's frozen remnants thawed,
poured drop by drop until full shot
then down her thirsty maw.
I see her from my easy chair,
lost at times in stare- seeing the kitchen
that could have been,
my wife years before...well, then.
But the pot and the kettle are both black,
no saving spiders for me-
At least her sad table arrangement
lends to economy,
so who of us fine pair
are the better or worse alcoholic?
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[informant] => Invierno
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Liquid Spiders
Contributed by
Invierno
on
Monday, 1st December 2014 @ 10:32:28 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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My robed wife- a Tuesday, 7 PM.
Standing at the table under the naked kitchen light;
gathered and rowed- one more thing to do,
empty ½ pints, pints, a fifth or two.
“Spiders”, she calls them,
vodka's frozen remnants thawed,
poured drop by drop until full shot
then down her thirsty maw.
I see her from my easy chair,
lost at times in stare- seeing the kitchen
that could have been,
my wife years before...well, then.
But the pot and the kettle are both black,
no saving spiders for me-
At least her sad table arrangement
lends to economy,
so who of us fine pair
are the better or worse alcoholic?
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Invierno
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2014-12-01 10:32:28]
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Re: Liquid Spiders
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 1st December 2014 @ 11:08:38 AM AEST
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Great post. I reside in the same sort of coupling, and I can tell you with 100% clarity:
The only "better" alcoholic is a sober one. There is zero grey area for dispute. Though, not everyone who leans on the booze crutch is an alcoholic.
Forget trying to help each other. That is a painful and frustrating road. Instead, help yourself. Whatever way you need help- get it. In some situations, helping ourselves first is the only shot we have at helping others.
I really enjoyed this write. Thank you for posting, and sorry for rambling.
Good luck.
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Re: Liquid Spiders
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st December 2014 @ 01:39:42 PM AEST
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I think you can be completely honest here and you have been with this very heartfelt write. While I can't directly relate to the chemical dependency I can relate as a codependent. There probably is no such thing as a better or worse alcoholic. Some just try harder not to be dependent. I agree with The Scorpendous One, "The only 'better' alcoholic is a sober one".
Best regards for you. Great poem...you really put yourself out there.
Tim
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Re: Liquid Spiders
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by Archie on
Monday, 1st December 2014 @ 04:27:46 PM AEST
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| This brings back memories of my childhood. today I can deal with them better, but it does not change that my mother was an alcoholic and it eventually killed her. . .I like the style of it any way. |
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Re: Liquid Spiders
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by Beyfoxman5 on
Monday, 1st December 2014 @ 04:56:45 PM AEST
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The incredible honesty here shows me that you do not buy any lies. To me that is certainly a step in the right direction. You have much to offer this world. You hsve no idea where your influence will end. Remember That. Good luck.
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Re: Liquid Spiders
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by softerware on
Tuesday, 2nd December 2014 @ 08:38:57 PM AEST
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Brutal honesty. This could not have been easy to write. You begin as an observer and close as a participant. We are limited by what we believe ourselves to be. You are, as I know you, loved, necessary, admired, trusted, gifted, capable, observant, and resourceful. As long you breathe, you have power. Do not decide that you are over quite yet! I can assure you that life has been waiting for you, and there is much becoming left on your table.
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Re: Liquid Spiders
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by TheDreamer on
Wednesday, 3rd December 2014 @ 12:55:38 AM AEST
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| This is a brave honest write. We're all here with you invierno. Thank you for sharing. I hope you find the happiness you're looking for. |
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Re: Liquid Spiders
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by kmec1990 on
Wednesday, 3rd December 2014 @ 02:37:30 AM AEST
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I have also lived this through my childhood as a codependent and chose not to use for that reason but I watched addiction rob my family of some of the best of us. Brave write. I hope you find the peace you seek.
Kris |
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Re: Liquid Spiders
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 3rd December 2014 @ 06:35:18 AM AEST
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| Firstly, I think you can be honest here. This is a friendly site with a predominance of empathetic members. Secondly, you stand out as one of the most honest and fearless writers that I have encountered here. As for the Bottled Imps: there are few answers left by empty bottles, and even less happiness. A from-the-gut poem that deserves the utmost respect and admiration. |
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Re: Liquid Spiders
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 4th December 2014 @ 02:31:12 PM AEST
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raw and brutal honesty, yet stated so calmly matter of
fact- this just makes me sad, seeing the kitchen that
could have been... ~my best two cents is don't
compare- identify:: like the story about the alcoholic in
the making- he looks down the bar to the guy last in the
row who's falling off his chair and says to himself ''i'm not
that bad'' ~::yet::~
hugs n' love nessa |
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