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[aid] => mick
[title] => Back On the Bus
[time] => 2014-05-18 16:18:10
[hometext] => Thank you for allowing me to share...My loved ones would break if they had an inkling. (It's not under 'Suicide' as topic, so don't write to much into it. It's actually an uplift for me)
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I've considered many things of late-
inconsequential, I might add...
how at the end, nothing matters-
Just writing this, I feel afraid. (you assumed I would write 'sad'? I just did- Oh snap!
You've been had!).
I'll toss in a rhyme or three
if you'll allow (graciously) to let this slide as poetry-
now to the task, let's get it made- (prior line, granted, lame)
perhaps luck will shine (Oh, happy eyes!)
and the Bus won't stop for me today- missing it I won't contemplate-
(Five line stanza's all but this- Oh, such inexpensive bliss.)
Delete Back Space End, Home;
who thought a keyboard capable to poem?
Reinforced (Oh, brutal) Irony- pounded nail spiteful clarity-
inconsequential, all of it- I know, I know,
I should let this small point sit. (Never knowing when to quit... toying now, to be a feces).
Guilt (unique, to our species) is such amazing stuff- I already carry it for you
it's true, sitting through this pile of silt;
filtered sifted shaken stirred-
witness to this wreck I've built,
a life-portrait sitting of 'Disturbed'.
I must conclude, repair my face- the Bus is coming-
grass is growing, a doggie needing food,
The easy way would be (for me) to wave,
“I'm fine, no need to slow!”- And I would, dammit (I'll have you know),
But I'm loved and love and so, (chin up!) on the bus I go.
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Back On the Bus
Contributed by
Invierno
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Sunday, 18th May 2014 @ 04:18:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I've considered many things of late-
inconsequential, I might add...
how at the end, nothing matters-
Just writing this, I feel afraid. (you assumed I would write 'sad'? I just did- Oh snap!
You've been had!).
I'll toss in a rhyme or three
if you'll allow (graciously) to let this slide as poetry-
now to the task, let's get it made- (prior line, granted, lame)
perhaps luck will shine (Oh, happy eyes!)
and the Bus won't stop for me today- missing it I won't contemplate-
(Five line stanza's all but this- Oh, such inexpensive bliss.)
Delete Back Space End, Home;
who thought a keyboard capable to poem?
Reinforced (Oh, brutal) Irony- pounded nail spiteful clarity-
inconsequential, all of it- I know, I know,
I should let this small point sit. (Never knowing when to quit... toying now, to be a feces).
Guilt (unique, to our species) is such amazing stuff- I already carry it for you
it's true, sitting through this pile of silt;
filtered sifted shaken stirred-
witness to this wreck I've built,
a life-portrait sitting of 'Disturbed'.
I must conclude, repair my face- the Bus is coming-
grass is growing, a doggie needing food,
The easy way would be (for me) to wave,
“I'm fine, no need to slow!”- And I would, dammit (I'll have you know),
But I'm loved and love and so, (chin up!) on the bus I go.
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Invierno
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2014-05-18 16:18:10]
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by RussellReinhardt on
Monday, 19th May 2014 @ 03:38:18 AM AEST
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I have one question for you my friend. Did the bus get you home on time. LoL nice witty piece
Greeting
Rus |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by dvtpdw on
Monday, 19th May 2014 @ 02:13:43 PM AEST
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| I truly like this piece - brought a smile to an smileless day. Very nice write - very enjoyable read, P. |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by pettles on
Monday, 19th May 2014 @ 06:12:43 PM AEST
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| nice I write my best poems on the bus |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by ScribereHabeo on
Monday, 19th May 2014 @ 09:18:14 PM AEST
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Kind of funny to start, but it really made me think and it is a really feel good poem.
Thanks for the read -Z.D |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 20th May 2014 @ 03:23:52 PM AEST
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Haha:) I love this, and the little pokes at writers and our idiosyncrasies. This was my favourite part:
Guilt (unique, to our species) is such amazing stuff- I already carry it for you
it's true, sitting through this pile of silt;
filtered sifted shaken stirred-
witness to this wreck I've built,
a life-portrait sitting of 'Disturbed'.
~Scorp |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by speedy on
Tuesday, 20th May 2014 @ 09:12:59 PM AEST
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Great write.
Hannah B |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by brew on
Tuesday, 3rd June 2014 @ 08:58:32 AM AEST
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Interesting post. Hope that bus at least slowed down for you to run and catch. lol Thanks for posting, i grinned.
brew~ |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 5th July 2014 @ 12:58:20 PM AEST
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those minutes- and a glimpse into your life:: all of our
lives collective as we find poetry in the world, time to
sit and observe on a street, as life breathes along,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by irisblue on
Monday, 27th July 2015 @ 10:43:22 PM AEST
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| we all struggle and feel like what's the point sometimes. I love that you know your loved and keep on keeping on. greatly expressed! |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 4th August 2015 @ 07:11:31 AM AEST
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This poem is pretty damn cool, dammit!
I too am curious if the bus got you there on time. I remember trying to get one in the rain and the bus driver of the one that stopped said my bus was the one right behind him. That bus drove right on by!
I enjoyed this. Thank you.
Tim |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by softerware on
Thursday, 26th November 2015 @ 02:22:57 PM AEST
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What seems a steady trickle of fickle thought in random rhyme is once again a view from eyes that see the duplicity in the simple things we take for granted!
"who thought a keyboard capable to poem?"
NOT ME!
You have coaxed fixed horizons and narrow concepts to expand. This is pure seduction of the intelligence; and an invitation to depart ourselves. Hardly "inconsequential, all of it" No, no!
The bus is coming..and we would have you know, that few could make standing by the road waiting for a bus, such a hopeful metaphor for life!
softerware |
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Re: Back On the Bus
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by alicewhite on
Thursday, 27th June 2019 @ 03:43:09 AM AEST
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I saw on the buses before
Now earlier i said i see or saw
Or sensed a man
Who looks alot like one of the actors from on the busses
The tall one with long teeth
Ask your mum
Even if im wrong
Thinking of nothing
Makes thoughts thought with out thinking
Fun
By the way wether or not your house is haunted
I know without dought
I couldn/'/t say
Ieo her other friend is blessing her house today |
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