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Hollow
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Boldpen
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Wednesday, 11th January 2012 @ 06:42:52 AM in AEST
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Hollow
Standing alone on the worlds edge,
He prayed for hours and hours,
And there arrived a sage.
Ill give you a boon, he said,
But, with it, a curse will be spread
You will have no enemies,
But neither will you have any love
You will have no good memories,
Neither will you have any casualties.
Or, you can choose to have 1 love,
But, with it, come a thousand enemies.
The choice was not that tough.
He didnt choose love.
Life is hard, he said,
1 more enemy, and hed be dead
He lived his life peacefully,
But, the devil had other plans for him, painfully.
Dante showed him a glimpse of love,
One, he couldnt have enough.
He pleaded to the sage,
I made a choice, please let me change
The sage took pity.
Have some love, have an identity
The man happy and satisfied,
Blindly walked past his demise.
He got love, a lot of love
But she soon left him
And he sat there in disgust.
The pain of a thousand enemies wasnt even comparable
to the sting of love.
He was vulnerable,
Too afraid to love, too afraid to trust.
The devil laughed to his hearts content
The girl he loved was never content
This is the reality of us humans,
There is no love, there is no hate,
Life is just an empty tunnel, leading to our empty fate.
You will have no love,
But neither will you have any enemies.
You will have no good memories,
Neither will you have any casualties.
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Boldpen
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2012-01-11 06:42:52]
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Re: Hollow
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by KingNothing on
Wednesday, 11th January 2012 @ 02:47:51 PM AEST
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a vry nice poem! I really like the way you have put especially the part "This is the reality of us humans, There is no love, there is no hate, Life is just an empty tunnel, leading to our empty fate."
have you read Gothe's Faust? (I hope I got the spelling right) it speacks somehow about the same delima you put in your poem, if you have read it I would like to hear what you think of it, if you haven't read it, I urge you to. the end of it is described by the critics as a "good" ending and moving towards the better, but for some reason it didn't get to my liking.
anyway, overall, you did a great work! keep it coming. |
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Re: Hollow
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by richard2 on
Thursday, 12th January 2012 @ 06:06:29 AM AEST
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| I enjoyed this poem, Life is full of choices I guess and how we chose leads to its own reward. |
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