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Dream a Little Dream
Contributed by
bigperm
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Sunday, 13th September 2009 @ 08:37:02 AM in AEST
Topic:
ChildrensPoetry
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The child of light makes a wish into the well
Into the darkness, where an echo is a yell.
She drops a coin and pays the price.
She hopes that her payment's enough to suffice.
The coin falls far, but it never makes a sound.
There is no splash no end to be found.
Only
a low voice speakingmuttering this sound.
Close your eyes, stand stillcount to three.
Lean closer...look insidelisten to me.
Closerclosershes almost there.
When
cold arms grab her pulls her in by the hair!
Head over feet, as she begins to fall.
Her family is near, their not far at all
But
with her breathe takenshe cant make out the call.
Falling faster, her heart skips a beat.
When
she stops in mid-airnothing touching her feet.
Alone in the darknothing can be seen.
Thoughts of spooky creatures and things that are mean.
Then spotted in the distancea small glowing light.
It draws in closer as she tears up with fright.
The thing is getting closerthe area becoming bright.
Then a voice speaks calmly. Childeverything's alright.
I dont want to harm you. Ive watched over you, since you were born.
The child looks in amazement a snow white unicorn.
Youre in the land of dreams, where wishes come true.
I received your cointhe one that you threw.
Your wish is my command. What gift can I bestow?
Surely youve something in mindjust let me know.
The girl began to smilea grin from ear to ear.
Ill tell you what I wantits a... [Wait whats that I hear?]
Poof
oh no
the unicorn is gone; and the child in her bed.
This must have been a dream, something in her head.
But the wish, she thought, this is so not cool.
Then her mommys voice is heard: Sweetie, time to get up for school.
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2009-09-13 08:37:02]
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Re: Dream a Little Dream
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by TsunamiWaverider on
Sunday, 13th September 2009 @ 08:50:10 AM AEST
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Now THAT'S a poem...unlike 99% of the rubbish people try to pass off as poetry.
Well done! |
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Re: Dream a Little Dream
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by simonwrite on
Saturday, 7th November 2009 @ 03:44:48 PM AEST
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i liked it but a little too rigid in rythym for my taste
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Re: Dream a Little Dream
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by The_Phantom on
Sunday, 10th October 2010 @ 08:27:20 AM AEST
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| Well done, I could feel what the child was going through, well written, thank you for the read. |
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Re: Dream a Little Dream
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd December 2010 @ 01:36:24 AM AEST
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Except for some minor typos, I think this is great! I love the ending.
I think you should have this corrected: their not far at all…
But
with her breathe taken…she can’t make out the call.
to
they're not far at all…
But
with her breath taken…she can’t make out the call.
Just an observation. Otherwise a really great poem!
Take care,
Tim
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