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A Sad Good-bye
Contributed by
ki
on
Thursday, 3rd January 2008 @ 01:56:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I loved this man
With all my heart
And everything i had
He didn't give me anything
And treated me so bad
He hit me
With a mighty fist
And broke
2 of my ribs
Then kicked me
In the stomach
So I miscarrried my kids
And thru all of
The crazy times
I never left
His side
But he left me
With emptiness
And watched me
As I died
He took my world
From under me
And kicked me
In the teeth
Made his presence
Known aloud
And wouldnt
let me be
And when I took
My final breath
I couldn't wait
To die
So happy
It was over
Not a very sad
Good-bye
Copyright ©
ki
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2008-01-03 01:56:32]
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Re: A Sad Good-bye
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd January 2008 @ 08:48:57 AM AEST
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| another great write ki. i really like the gritty rawness of your descriptions |
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Re: A Sad Good-bye
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by little_genna on
Thursday, 3rd January 2008 @ 10:36:38 AM AEST
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| ok this provoked some bad memories of my childhood... but i loved the bluntness and absolutely raw emotion that it gives the reader... |
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Re: A Sad Good-bye
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by mrpeanut64 on
Thursday, 3rd January 2008 @ 02:43:45 PM AEST
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| beatifully done, but I am saddened that this is a tale that ever needs be written |
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Re: A Sad Good-bye
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 5th January 2008 @ 04:20:46 AM AEST
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i'm with peanut, it is painful to think that this had to be wrote, but you did it well.
D.Sapelo |
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Re: A Sad Good-bye
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by shawna14 on
Friday, 22nd February 2008 @ 03:34:47 PM AEST
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| Great piece of work i liked it alot |
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