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you call the wall soft
Contributed by
lostrelic
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Monday, 19th November 2007 @ 12:28:48 PM in AEST
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we flake and turn like a swindle in the mud
calling all banks swayed in this wake
look at the time i am sure your wrong
your just a sheep trying to find where you belonged
ok ok fine no sharp pen lets just see where i begin
cradle of kittens a whine in the park
whats real or just fantasy latent views
cold corner faded echo
time in running smeared view
is that the poetry you need commercial rhymes with vivid sullen views
strapping on a blank mask trying to cry to the masses
wait crying is to weak for you to resemble
tools for this question falling to the stars
what did i step my foot in this eco pool of dna
splashing times of truth against a blank wall
making pools of sadness with the soup of life
only to make two mistakes
yes not just one but two
a spiral to the end
and dirty fingers in the pie
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lostrelic
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2007-11-19 12:28:48]
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Re: you call the wall soft
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by emystar on
Monday, 19th November 2007 @ 12:35:20 PM AEST
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Good writing, my friend.
How you doing? I don't ever hear from you any more.
huggs,
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Re: you call the wall soft
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by simonedontplay on
Tuesday, 20th November 2007 @ 12:41:53 AM AEST
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| this is what i call a rare poetry, because not many writers like to step out the box this far, you did it, an it is great i really liked it because it was easy to understand |
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Re: you call the wall soft
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by Sunday_Theory on
Thursday, 27th December 2007 @ 09:28:38 AM AEST
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Beautifully melancholy.
The imagery speaks loudly.
Nice
Write.
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