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[title] => which may the mystery
[time] => 2007-04-25 12:25:07
[hometext] => finding the more excellent world
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like the crow who scales the skies
looking ever for new shining objects
i sat in my car waiting for my daughter
listening to the music wafting in the air,
with the thousand colours of morning
i had seen him fly across my path twice
so i sat there dumbly waiting to see him
but he had been near the home mountain,
where ever was it he flew to in a storm?
maybe it was high over a wondering world
well, for me, he created much happy joy
so i sat dreaming of those darkest wings,
eventually she returned to the car and me
i heard all about all neat things she bought
then on our merry way we went; off to eat
mashed potatoes, coleslaw, and chicken,
there was a little guilt about the later...
some talk of the date with her army man
mutual concern he will be on leave again
hope that this bloody idiot war will end,
knowledge, art, men, poetry, college, men
food, entertainment, clothes, anthropology
hair, nails, summer, dogs, the air, the time
{at times she thinks i dont pay attention}
back to the dorm and away she went with
a kiss, a smile, an i love you mom, see you
for her alone i suffered the heat of summer
on the ride home a dog ran in front of me,
no i did not run him over, scream, nor cry
or this would be a different poem altogether
up into the forest and higher still and more
all i needed for calm happiness around me,
missing my one truelove; i saw him again
flying beside me across the road twicemore
beautiful, graceful, black as pitch, fat, sassy
traveling solitary like me; yet were we?
§* *§
*|*
~:*perhaps he will soar upwards tonight
and touch with his wing the stars*:~
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which may the mystery
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 12:25:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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like the crow who scales the skies
looking ever for new shining objects
i sat in my car waiting for my daughter
listening to the music wafting in the air,
with the thousand colours of morning
i had seen him fly across my path twice
so i sat there dumbly waiting to see him
but he had been near the home mountain,
where ever was it he flew to in a storm?
maybe it was high over a wondering world
well, for me, he created much happy joy
so i sat dreaming of those darkest wings,
eventually she returned to the car and me
i heard all about all neat things she bought
then on our merry way we went; off to eat
mashed potatoes, coleslaw, and chicken,
there was a little guilt about the later...
some talk of the date with her army man
mutual concern he will be on leave again
hope that this bloody idiot war will end,
knowledge, art, men, poetry, college, men
food, entertainment, clothes, anthropology
hair, nails, summer, dogs, the air, the time
{at times she thinks i dont pay attention}
back to the dorm and away she went with
a kiss, a smile, an i love you mom, see you
for her alone i suffered the heat of summer
on the ride home a dog ran in front of me,
no i did not run him over, scream, nor cry
or this would be a different poem altogether
up into the forest and higher still and more
all i needed for calm happiness around me,
missing my one truelove; i saw him again
flying beside me across the road twicemore
beautiful, graceful, black as pitch, fat, sassy
traveling solitary like me; yet were we?
§* *§
*|*
~:*perhaps he will soar upwards tonight
and touch with his wing the stars*:~
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Re: which may the mystery
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by myheartsvoice on
Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 02:23:34 PM AEST
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Speaking of calm that's what this poem was for me. A murel of comforting vissions to sooth my ambivelant heart. Just lovely as always . . .
((((Nessa))))
Ben |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by Nazmythian on
Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 02:45:50 PM AEST
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I rather like that you paint a lost love as the Crow...
it deepens certain mythology of the bird.
Nazzy ~
( perhaps he will soar ... and touch the star he named after you ) |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 03:15:30 PM AEST
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| The Crow's flight is here an experience of freedom of joy and peace..let him soar upwards and and touch the stars with his wings of imagination. Very beautiful and bright write..love n hugs Nessa :-) venkat |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by FRANCO on
Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 07:18:36 PM AEST
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Though life trapped within the daily routine, it secretly yearns to fly like the crow and scale new heights, like the crow your thoughts flies along with you ....
"i saw him again flying beside me across the road twice more beautiful, graceful, black as pitch, fat,sassy traveling solitary like me; yet were we?"
Cheering you to spread your wings to fly along its course.
My friend your presentation is remarkably wonderful.
FRANCO. |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 11:22:02 PM AEST
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Wondeful, wonderful! I was captivated throughout. I particularly like how you chose to use the crow as a metaphor for that shadow within us all that haunts after the loss of love. A just superb job!
SPLENDID!
- SCM |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 11:30:49 PM AEST
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Oh Nessa .. how truly wonderful! I especially ADORED the last line of
the final stanza. My oh my! Who could deny the power and beauty of
that? I felt like I was right along there with you for the ride .. reminded
me of my OWN visits to college to take my son out for the day. Yes.
What a splendid piece of life poetry, hun. But that last stanza .. wow!
It'll stay with me for a while, I'm sure.
@-->-------
~Breezy
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Re: which may the mystery
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by Fernanda_F_Rocha on
Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 01:29:21 AM AEST
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| Nicely written!! |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by Fernanda_F_Rocha on
Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 01:30:15 AM AEST
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| Nicely written... |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 02:33:16 AM AEST
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OMG, Nessa...I am so in love with this write. It has so much life, honesty and heart to it. It felt so beautiful and inspiring to me. I am so glad I read this. Thank you.
Peace and hugs.
Laura |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 09:40:03 AM AEST
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Sweet friend Nessa~
through the magic of your pen you grace the hearts of your readers with your amazing poetry. I have come to so much enjoy your writings. There is always something in them that the reader can relate to and there is always a lasting impression that the reader gets to take away with them. Well done hun~
love & hugs,
sue m |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by Crow on
Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 11:43:49 AM AEST
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| Nessa the most best" reads are the little minutes in life we share with others. this is exceptional. I would read countless just to get to this write. again what a fine write. Vincent |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 01:03:34 PM AEST
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I love this
the way you put it into words are just out of this world .
You did an awsome job on this.
hugs |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by emystar on
Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 03:32:38 PM AEST
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Awesome, girlfriend.
Incredible, very deep, strong write.
luv, huggs, hope,
emy |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by Bruce on
Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 04:22:40 PM AEST
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| your usual heart warming write.so moving. |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by needledancing on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 03:27:23 AM AEST
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| You reflect the beauty of each and every day. Not a moment should be missed or not appreciated for its complexed simplicity of being. A wonderful refreshing write. |
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 07:09:22 AM AEST
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wow. this is stunning such wonders in this piece. its like a story unfolding and the ending is just superb
vampyress Jenni |
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by Willofree on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 07:22:47 AM AEST
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Nothing like being airborne to get a better view and a different perspective on life events. Soaring.... such freedom. The experience of setting our mind and feelings adrift, no telling what we may encounter.
Well done,
Will |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by richcol7522 on
Friday, 27th April 2007 @ 02:52:24 PM AEST
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Beautiful poem...you are a graceful poet. I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Rich |
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by Angelic_Demon on
Saturday, 28th April 2007 @ 05:54:27 AM AEST
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"knowledge, art, men, poetry, college, men
food, entertainment, clothes, anthropology
hair, nails, summer, dogs, the air, the time
{at times she thinks i dont pay attention}"
That seriously made me giggle. Mom, this is an awesome write. I seriously love it :D
(you might think I don't think you pay attention, but I know you do :P) |
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Re: which may the mystery
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by colinb on
Monday, 7th July 2014 @ 01:24:58 AM AEST
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| excellent life is to preciouse to miss a second |
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