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Array ( [sid] => 129980 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Visitation [time] => 2006-12-31 00:31:12 [hometext] => Written after a fever and perhaps a 'near death experience.' Last for 2006 Peace & Cheers! [bodytext] =>

Wrong
Huh? What?
Mistaken...
when called arrogant,
so young at 16
propped up on illusions
and coping skills stilts
come from broken trust
with tiny slivers of faith,
immodest intellience...

Its taken 10 years after
dying to tell you...
'I wounded you
made you fear what
you did not understand...'

Dear Goddess of the Rainbow

Iris
are we
really speaking?
I have the flu
and may be delirious
forgive the crying...
but
could you ever possibly
have spared me fear
or misunderstanding?

In gratitude...

'Yes but you must get up now
your temperature is too high...'

huh what

'You musssst gett upppp
takee summm aassssspprinsssszzzz'

uppppzzzzsss
uzzzzsss
uzzzsss
zzzssss
sss

Cough, wheeze, cough
Instructions from phlegm?
A Mommie memory
and the need
to stay healthy
saved this life
alone in the middle
of the night.

AJPIII
[comments] => 7 [counter] => 304 [topic] => 24 [informant] => yangdantien [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 20 [ratings] => 4 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => LoveRemembered )

Visitation

Contributed by yangdantien on Sunday, 31st December 2006 @ 12:31:12 AM in AEST
Topic: LoveRemembered

Wrong
Huh? What?
Mistaken...
when called arrogant,
so young at 16
propped up on illusions
and coping skills stilts
come from broken trust
with tiny slivers of faith,
immodest intellience...

Its taken 10 years after
dying to tell you...
'I wounded you
made you fear what
you did not understand...'

Dear Goddess of the Rainbow

Iris
are we
really speaking?
I have the flu
and may be delirious
forgive the crying...
but
could you ever possibly
have spared me fear
or misunderstanding?

In gratitude...

'Yes but you must get up now
your temperature is too high...'

huh what

'You musssst gett upppp
takee summm aassssspprinsssszzzz'

uppppzzzzsss
uzzzzsss
uzzzsss
zzzssss
sss

Cough, wheeze, cough
Instructions from phlegm?
A Mommie memory
and the need
to stay healthy
saved this life
alone in the middle
of the night.

AJPIII

Copyright © yangdantien ... [ 2006-12-31 00:31:12]
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Re: Visitation (User Rating: 1 )
by MisfitMe on Sunday, 31st December 2006 @ 01:13:17 AM AEST
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WOW & the style changes again...I like the taste of the mythical infused w/ your own unique pen...now let me tuck you in, babez.
there we go...

~Your Moon Maiden

Re: Visitation (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Sunday, 31st December 2006 @ 02:11:27 AM AEST
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and thankgoodness she came to the rescue.

Unique style and creative talent. Mystical in parts and tender in others, enjoyed this I did I did...... I hope you dont have a cold now.....

I would not want to try to figure out how to overnight air a huge container of chicken noodle soup and get it there still hot. * smiles*

hugsssss

~Michelle~

Re: Visitation (User Rating: 1 )
by deadheadpoet on Sunday, 31st December 2006 @ 11:08:57 AM AEST
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Hate being sick and I think I had the same thing, man. I was sorta wishin' I would meld into my couch for a couple days. Bless you bro, hope you are feeling better now.
Peace, love and hugs,
Laura

Re: Visitation (User Rating: 1 )
by unknown_utopia on Sunday, 31st December 2006 @ 03:01:29 PM AEST
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I really like the way this flows

Re: Visitation (User Rating: 1 )
by Eternal_Dreamer on Sunday, 14th January 2007 @ 07:22:24 PM AEST
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Thank God she came to visit you my dear friend. I hope that all is good and well with you. I hate being sick, so I do hope that you are back to being your same usual self.
An excellent write penned by the skilled & gifted AJ~ Well done my dear friend and thanks so much for sharing your work with us.
big warm hugs from across the blue,
sue m

Re: Visitation (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 12th March 2007 @ 01:59:23 PM AEST
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Hey, AJ, I really liked the presentation of this also. Captivating visual and usage of words and sounds not found in the dictionary but definite found in the flu! uuuukkhhhawhg! Good piece!

wabl
KenMoore
cowboy

Re: Visitation (User Rating: 1 )
by needledancing on Monday, 12th March 2007 @ 10:10:27 PM AEST
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Nurse on the scene...make room..
Sounds like you just about escaped us all here. Good piece..yes different for you.
I do believe though that souls from the past do guide us in these times...to awaken us to many things and for many reasons.

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