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Its not reality
Contributed by
boredoms_burden
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Wednesday, 27th December 2006 @ 02:19:33 PM in AEST
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i look at the sky , its changed so much over all of these years
its changed through pain, its changed through a mind full of fears
as i embrace my desire to feel the warmth and feel the power
i take my spirit with my mind it shall devouer
looking through from the other side
i find myself with no where to hide
i was blessed with reason now the hard part is to put it to use
hold it in and hold it tight so that it will never let loose
its not just perfecting by repetition
but its securing the divinity of our intuition
within me are the talents to do what is said that cant be done
to change everything that lies beneath the blistering sun
throw out what is believed to be the norm
take what your given and shape it into form
reveal what is hidden deep within
beneath the scars and under the sin
a power so great you wouldnt dare to fathom the prize
a power that lies behind the flesh, but is buried within all eyes
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Re: Its not reality
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 27th December 2006 @ 08:19:48 PM AEST
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You know, I think you really have something here. With some more punctuation and some smartening up you could make this into a really good poem.
I like your ideas a lot, and some of your lines are really good.
I like the last one a lot.
Well done.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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