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[aid] => mick
[title] => Bleak Thoughts of This Woman
[time] => 2006-10-14 16:34:20
[hometext] =>
[bodytext] => One step forward two steps back,
Oh whats this lady to do,
I try to go forward do my best,
And life kicks me back thats true,
I try to be good as I should,
No enemies I want to make,
But me as I am just get stuck in a jam,
So again I have made a mistake,
I work hard for my living, am honest and giving,
And am generous to all of my friends,
I scrimp and save, and work like a slave,
But my overdraft won't come to an end,
I go out once in a while, it does make me smile,
But my halo is starting to wilt,
For its no land of honey, spending good money,
In fact it just fills me with guilt,
Tomorrow I will be good, as I really should,
Clean the windows and vacuum the floor,
I will stay away all day from the computer I say,
Even though its the thing I adore,
But where would I be, without my poetry,
Its the thing that keeps me quite sane,
I think I should wait, and let life be my fate,
And stop worrying , be happy again,
So here is my words, perhaps they are absurd,
But they are how I am feeling tonight,
I know not what I seek, I am feeling quite bleak,
But tomorrow I may just see the light.
[comments] => 8
[counter] => 279
[topic] => 61
[informant] => jerseysue
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 14
[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
)
Bleak Thoughts of This Woman
Contributed by
jerseysue
on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 04:34:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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One step forward two steps back,
Oh whats this lady to do,
I try to go forward do my best,
And life kicks me back thats true,
I try to be good as I should,
No enemies I want to make,
But me as I am just get stuck in a jam,
So again I have made a mistake,
I work hard for my living, am honest and giving,
And am generous to all of my friends,
I scrimp and save, and work like a slave,
But my overdraft won't come to an end,
I go out once in a while, it does make me smile,
But my halo is starting to wilt,
For its no land of honey, spending good money,
In fact it just fills me with guilt,
Tomorrow I will be good, as I really should,
Clean the windows and vacuum the floor,
I will stay away all day from the computer I say,
Even though its the thing I adore,
But where would I be, without my poetry,
Its the thing that keeps me quite sane,
I think I should wait, and let life be my fate,
And stop worrying , be happy again,
So here is my words, perhaps they are absurd,
But they are how I am feeling tonight,
I know not what I seek, I am feeling quite bleak,
But tomorrow I may just see the light.
Copyright ©
jerseysue
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2006-10-14 16:34:20]
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Re: Bleak Thoughts of This Woman
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 04:46:14 PM AEST
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Your are sat at your keyboard bashing away
Knowing you have had an awful day
I know what you mean and what you feel
You're just trying to get on and even keel
I love to read what you have wrote
Sometimes you bring a lump to my throat
I have no answers to the dilemas you face
But your poetry is your saving grace
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Re: Bleak Thoughts of This Woman
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by one-curly-fry on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 06:18:44 PM AEST
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Don't try to change yourself - whatever works for you works for you. If you enjoy the comp and writing, you must give yourself time for it - esp. if your working so hard.
You can't deny who you are!
Nice poem and the rhyming pattern was well done.
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Re: Bleak Thoughts of This Woman
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by emystar on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 09:37:41 PM AEST
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Very god writing, my friend.
I think we all can relate.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Bleak Thoughts of This Woman
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by lillyjane on
Sunday, 15th October 2006 @ 04:12:03 AM AEST
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| I know just how you feel Sue, next sunday we will drown our sorrows and get out and sod everything haha.. You deserve to enjoy your self when you work hard and you do Sue you should not for guilty about it either..xxx |
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Re: Bleak Thoughts of This Woman
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 15th October 2006 @ 05:03:54 PM AEST
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Aw sue .. I get this .. SOOOOO get this.
I agree with lilly though .. you shouldn't feel bad for
indulging in something that really makes you happy.
(Especially since it is not so terrible a vice .. if it even
can be VIEWED as such .. lol)
What is life for if not to enjoy right? Keep writing and
posting, hun. It's good for the soul. : )
best of luck to you~
~Breezy
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Re: Bleak Thoughts of This Woman
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by doug on
Sunday, 15th October 2006 @ 07:01:56 PM AEST
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Life can be so very hard.
I think you deserve to have
your down time. I hope
you can find a balance
that allows you to enjoy
yourself more. Don't
worry to much about those
windows. When I'm dying I will
not ask myself - did I clean
enough windows? All I will
ask myself is - Did I enjoy my
time here. best wishes , Truly Doug |
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Re: Bleak Thoughts of This Woman
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 29th October 2006 @ 04:24:14 PM AEST
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My friend you should never ever feel guilty for spending some money every now and then on a good time. We take nothing with us when we pass from this world. I so much agree with Doug. I would rather go from this world knowing that I enjoyed my time here than to think I spent all my life slaving away.
Chin up sweet lady we have our bouts of these thoughts. Dismiss them and enjoy life hun. Rock on superstar~
big warm huggers,
Sue M |
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Re: Bleak Thoughts of This Woman
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 18th November 2006 @ 06:47:51 PM AEST
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| I liked this poem. I wouldnt live without my poetry. poetry is my life. Great job! |
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