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Array ( [sid] => 124247 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Shall We? [time] => 2006-08-09 01:48:19 [hometext] => (A reflection, this) For those that bemoan the fact that their beloved 'doesn't dance'.... I offer this - an alternative perspective. [bodytext] =>


Author's Note: Lest there be any confusion, I did, for the record, look the definition up. There are many variations, of course - but "to move rhythmically usually to music, using prescribed or improvised steps and gestures" would, I believe, serve as an acceptable enough example. I looked again at this piece after reading that definition and believe, yes - it does 'work'....... though..... perhaps I've taken some poetic liberties in how I interpret the phrases "move rhythmically", "to music" and... um... "using prescribed or improvised steps and gestures" as well. *grins* ~Snemmy





We were learned in trapping
thoughts, in holding tongues –
in gluing ourselves back together
in private only to subsequently
fall apart when again alone.
We knew the art of
singing in silence
and of turning things around
to avoid having to look
too closely at the mirror
or having to admit the
indomitable existence
of our dreams.
We hung ourselves on walls,
smiled religiously
and quietly said our prayers.

We knew well the places
To go to hide from ourselves
but found ourselves, by then,
increasingly less inclined
to visit them.
We were becoming accustomed
to our newly dilated pupils -
having made our way, mostly,
through the temporary
blindness that comes of having
extracted oneself from the
deep dark of the wings to
tumble into the initially
overwhelming bright lights
of center stage.
We knew our place –
but it no longer mattered.

We went about the business
of unlearning in slow
motion at first – with the
awkwardness of teenagers
attempting to reproduce the
graceful movements
that had been demonstrated once
before them in a Saturday
afternoon dance class –
the result of their parents
having seen one too many
romantic musical productions.

We felt, though, like movie stars…
You in your outdated tuxedo –
its tails pointing toward your sneakers
and I, in a second hand wedding gown
that I had been inclined to dye blue.
Step - together - step - together
Your back, strong –
my head tilted just so,
our gaze fixed on one another –
half smiles curling our lips
at the corners.

And it was strange and wonderful
and admittedly, perhaps, ridiculous
but it would have seemed somehow
even more gauche to have been
so foolish to have denied
ourselves the stage.
We’d spin and trip, trip and spin
grinning at times at our own clumsiness,
grabbing on to one another
to regain our balance – and
catching one another
each time we fell.

We moved on and on,
gaining confidence and skill
with each new movement
experienced together there
in each other’s arms.
It felt like forever that we
stayed there together
holding our breath and waiting...
for the music to begin.

But, finally, upon the arrival
of that very first note,
as you extended your hand,
you would smile and
ever so wonderfully inquire

“Shall we dance?”

And immediately,
for simply having done so,
you would so completely
and so elegantly
sweep
me
away. [comments] => 8 [counter] => 318 [topic] => 2 [informant] => Silent-No-More [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 30 [ratings] => 6 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => LovePoetry )

Shall We?

Contributed by Silent-No-More on Wednesday, 9th August 2006 @ 01:48:19 AM in AEST
Topic: LovePoetry




Author's Note: Lest there be any confusion, I did, for the record, look the definition up. There are many variations, of course - but "to move rhythmically usually to music, using prescribed or improvised steps and gestures" would, I believe, serve as an acceptable enough example. I looked again at this piece after reading that definition and believe, yes - it does 'work'....... though..... perhaps I've taken some poetic liberties in how I interpret the phrases "move rhythmically", "to music" and... um... "using prescribed or improvised steps and gestures" as well. *grins* ~Snemmy





We were learned in trapping
thoughts, in holding tongues –
in gluing ourselves back together
in private only to subsequently
fall apart when again alone.
We knew the art of
singing in silence
and of turning things around
to avoid having to look
too closely at the mirror
or having to admit the
indomitable existence
of our dreams.
We hung ourselves on walls,
smiled religiously
and quietly said our prayers.

We knew well the places
To go to hide from ourselves
but found ourselves, by then,
increasingly less inclined
to visit them.
We were becoming accustomed
to our newly dilated pupils -
having made our way, mostly,
through the temporary
blindness that comes of having
extracted oneself from the
deep dark of the wings to
tumble into the initially
overwhelming bright lights
of center stage.
We knew our place –
but it no longer mattered.

We went about the business
of unlearning in slow
motion at first – with the
awkwardness of teenagers
attempting to reproduce the
graceful movements
that had been demonstrated once
before them in a Saturday
afternoon dance class –
the result of their parents
having seen one too many
romantic musical productions.

We felt, though, like movie stars…
You in your outdated tuxedo –
its tails pointing toward your sneakers
and I, in a second hand wedding gown
that I had been inclined to dye blue.
Step - together - step - together
Your back, strong –
my head tilted just so,
our gaze fixed on one another –
half smiles curling our lips
at the corners.

And it was strange and wonderful
and admittedly, perhaps, ridiculous
but it would have seemed somehow
even more gauche to have been
so foolish to have denied
ourselves the stage.
We’d spin and trip, trip and spin
grinning at times at our own clumsiness,
grabbing on to one another
to regain our balance – and
catching one another
each time we fell.

We moved on and on,
gaining confidence and skill
with each new movement
experienced together there
in each other’s arms.
It felt like forever that we
stayed there together
holding our breath and waiting...
for the music to begin.

But, finally, upon the arrival
of that very first note,
as you extended your hand,
you would smile and
ever so wonderfully inquire

“Shall we dance?”

And immediately,
for simply having done so,
you would so completely
and so elegantly
sweep
me
away.




Copyright © Silent-No-More ... [ 2006-08-09 01:48:19]
(Date/Time posted on site)





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Re: Shall We? (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 9th August 2006 @ 01:58:46 AM AEST
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This is good writing. You have gone to a lot of trouble penning this in such a manner that the reader can see what is happening. It works very well-a picture is worth a thousand words. The movement of strophes is perfect, great cohesion throughout. Thanks,

larkspur


Re: Shall We? (User Rating: 1 )
by deadheadpoet on Wednesday, 9th August 2006 @ 02:50:51 PM AEST
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My dear friend, I am just so in love with the way your write. Each piece is filled with so much deep thought and caring. I couldn't help but thinking this dance.....this dance is so much of what we call life. I can tell you this piece danced it's way into my skin. Truly a fan. Always overwhelmed after a read of yours. Peace and hugs,
Laura


Re: Shall We? (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 14th August 2006 @ 05:51:32 PM AEST
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My lord girl! This piece is BURSTING with emotions and
metaphors galore!! I absolutely LOVE this first bit ..

"We were learned in trapping
thoughts, in holding tongues –
in gluing ourselves back together
in private only to subsequently
fall apart when again alone."


God .. I know and relate to that well. So beautifully put, hun!
The piece, itself, is almost a dance .. (even though, I know
I KNOW, they do not dance until the very end .. lol)
but there is such a sway and sweep to the whole thing ..
.. a motion .. movement in the most rapturous way possible.

That last stanza is OUTSTANDING!! I love this.

Gorgeous write snemmers!!

~Breezy


Re: Shall We? (User Rating: 1 )
by RLWildPassions on Tuesday, 15th August 2006 @ 06:50:21 PM AEST
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There is so much to do with life here.. this poem... a wide awakening... what we have learned, what we have done, what we find out about ourselves later on down that road of trials... my we sure do evolve don't we... one must smile as they look back.. then smile again for having such wonderful moments and memories... makes us who we are.. who are we lol... is what I got out of this poem.. lovely .. nastalgic.. also kept thinking of my oldest son not wanting to dance in public, or sing... and now... he can do it all... plus whistle a happy tune... RL


Re: Shall We? (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 05:24:14 AM AEST
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You are soooooooo descriptive in your writing!!!!! The images formed in my mind so easily while reading this. And soooo beautiful it tis....a touch of nostalgia, a touch of learning "how to", growing, life, and a most pleasant thought of love between two people. Wonderful, Snemmers, really wonderful.

I love the sneakers!!!!!


Re: Shall We? (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 23rd August 2006 @ 10:10:56 AM AEST
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You've masterfully captured the moment so vividly in a poetic conversation style that one is contentedly watching the practice of the moment crescendo to the "sweeping away" finale. A storytellin' poetess you are, Snemmy! With your typical magnificence!

wabl
KenMoore
cowboy


Re: Shall We? (User Rating: 1 )
by needledancing on Saturday, 31st March 2007 @ 11:26:32 AM AEST
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I just kept reading it over and over and over..in awe and wonderment of how it was like total recall of each step through the education of and growth of and perfection of The Dance.
You in your outdated tuxedo –
its tails pointing toward your sneakers
and I, in a second hand wedding gown
that I had been inclined to dye blue.

Favourite line...shows the artistic choice extends to the exterior clothings.

Another incredible piece of work.


Re: Shall We? (User Rating: 1 )
by Dom on Sunday, 26th August 2007 @ 08:23:33 PM AEST
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Oh Snemmy this is soooo beautiful, so utterly wonderful! From the metaphors throughout to the descriptions and the sweet endearing awkardness. I cannot find fault with this piece (though when I enjoy a piece this much it little matters to me if there are small flaws!)
This feels like it had to written, there is nothing forced about it, I am certain the ideas simply poured out of you and onto the page where you shaped them into this brilliant poem!

I loved it (could you tell?!) and I'm going to stop gushing now, its probably for the best!

Dom




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