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Array ( [sid] => 119134 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => The Lord's Prayer Revisited [time] => 2006-04-28 09:40:37 [hometext] => Sadly this is perhaps how the Lord's Prayer should read, as this is how it seems to have become.I hope no offence is taken by anyone , it is not the intention [bodytext] => Our father, which art in heaven
Though we may take as deities money and power
And call you by many names according to what we believe is right
Hallowed be thy name
How often we use it in rage, despair and frustration
Thy kingdom come, thy will be done, on earth as it is in heaven
Your kingdom raped of resources, of its beauty
When did you ask us to leave you this carcass ?
Would we soil the soil in the garden of Eden ?
Give us this day our daily bread
Now we are demanding, no longer are we asking
And forgive us our trespasses
As we forgive those that trespass against us
Give us the right to do as we please with no conscience
To butcher and slaughter those we consider enemies and their innocent families
And lead us not into temptation, but deliver us from evil
Allow us to steal on the basis that it should be ours
But let us not be punished as we ourselves no longer deem it a crime
For thine is the kingdom, the power and the glory
Yet we keep it here, redesigned, more efficient and up to date
Forever and ever
Amen. [comments] => 6 [counter] => 372 [topic] => 48 [informant] => puppy_dog_eyes [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 9 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => EmotionalPoetry )

The Lord's Prayer Revisited

Contributed by puppy_dog_eyes on Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 09:40:37 AM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

Our father, which art in heaven
Though we may take as deities money and power
And call you by many names according to what we believe is right
Hallowed be thy name
How often we use it in rage, despair and frustration
Thy kingdom come, thy will be done, on earth as it is in heaven
Your kingdom raped of resources, of its beauty
When did you ask us to leave you this carcass ?
Would we soil the soil in the garden of Eden ?
Give us this day our daily bread
Now we are demanding, no longer are we asking
And forgive us our trespasses
As we forgive those that trespass against us
Give us the right to do as we please with no conscience
To butcher and slaughter those we consider enemies and their innocent families
And lead us not into temptation, but deliver us from evil
Allow us to steal on the basis that it should be ours
But let us not be punished as we ourselves no longer deem it a crime
For thine is the kingdom, the power and the glory
Yet we keep it here, redesigned, more efficient and up to date
Forever and ever
Amen.

Copyright © puppy_dog_eyes ... [ 2006-04-28 09:40:37]
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Re: The Lord's Prayer Revisited (User Rating: 1 )
by bigduck6769 on Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 10:16:13 AM AEST
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no offebse is taken, but it seems like you have taken the prayer totally out of context..

Re: The Lord's Prayer Revisited (User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 10:20:44 AM AEST
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Incredible. Yes I can understand where your coming from with this. We have had similar conversations here at our home. No offense taken.

Michelle

Re: The Lord's Prayer Revisited (User Rating: 1 )
by xXx_Fem_Fatale_xXx on Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 10:31:24 AM AEST
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So often I battle with those Bible sellers at the door about how God doesnt want many things when they tell me about Gay people not being God's will. In me opinion, you have it pretty accurate on how the world has become to this day. Perhaps one day there was an Eden as it was discribed in the Bible but not today..no..too much war and mass destruction. Like I said in one of the forums, many religions and many wars about it but there is only one God really. Just named differently. Many impressions about the Bible but it all comes down to the same thing, Love eachother.

Provoking poem for sure but much more true to the truth.

Nats

Re: The Lord's Prayer Revisited (User Rating: 1 )
by blue_angel on Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 11:21:19 AM AEST
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Regretably, I have to agree with what you have written. People have become so vindictive in this world...

thank you for sharing. this was an amazing write. keep it up!

~Jenny

Re: The Lord's Prayer Revisited (User Rating: 1 )
by deadheadpoet on Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 12:25:27 PM AEST
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I say I'm not religious but more spiritual. Earth/Nature is my "god". I liked the piece. I remembering growing up in Catholic school and having to read this very prayer. I think you've made it real. Some say that earth is hell or earth is purgatory... I'll I can say if there is one "god", one creator....then they must be extremely disgusted. Thanks for sharing. Peace, Laura

Re: The Lord's Prayer Revisited (User Rating: 1 )
by Eternal_Dreamer on Saturday, 29th April 2006 @ 01:24:28 AM AEST
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~*Steve*~
A real thought provoking write u have presented us with. No offence taken.
You have written this well and with great depth. This is the way of the people in this world today. Sad, yet so true.
Well done and keep up with the great work.
*warm hugs*
~*suzie Q

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