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Array ( [sid] => 116891 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => ticket for two (please) [time] => 2006-03-23 01:54:35 [hometext] => its not really that easy to explain the meaning of this poem in a few short words, send me a comment and ill do my best to clarify [bodytext] => I've been gone
longer than you think
so lost in the shadows
I linger
each day I sink
farther from reality
and draw near what's real
come to me
into the shade
away from your matrix
save me
wake me from this dream
take me from this place
help me fall,
fall deeper into the darkest
outskirts of my mind
I'll take you with me
unless you would rather
stay asleep
and wake me up
into your dream,
I'll be waiting...... [comments] => 2 [counter] => 192 [topic] => 43 [informant] => bakacaka [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 4 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => oops )

ticket for two (please)

Contributed by bakacaka on Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 01:54:35 AM in AEST
Topic: oops

I've been gone
longer than you think
so lost in the shadows
I linger
each day I sink
farther from reality
and draw near what's real
come to me
into the shade
away from your matrix
save me
wake me from this dream
take me from this place
help me fall,
fall deeper into the darkest
outskirts of my mind
I'll take you with me
unless you would rather
stay asleep
and wake me up
into your dream,
I'll be waiting......

Copyright © bakacaka ... [ 2006-03-23 01:54:35]
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Re: ticket for two (please) (User Rating: 1 )
by twick on Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 02:09:26 AM AEST
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So here is what I think:

You are searching, searching for someone to go with you "into the shade" It sounds like maybe you aren't even sure if this shadow is good or bad from the tone of the poem. That leads to the question, will this person join you and journey with you into the real reality. There might be a connotation to God but I didn't get that. I get this double reality with the reference to the matrix and wonder which reality is better, which one is the real reality or the accepted reality. It seems though that you aren't happy with either unless this person joins you and that you are stuck waiting in the shadows for them to decide. The title is awesome because there is this urgency to decide because you can't stay in the shadows for much longer.

Fantastic!

I think you have the makings of a great poet and I will definitely read more as you post.
Never stop writing.

Re: ticket for two (please) (User Rating: 1 )
by NoSaint on Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 08:02:48 AM AEST
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this could be taken many ways...a good write which leaves the reader to fill in between the lines

NS

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