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Buildings stand tall, people rush by
In a painted world of black and white
And deep in a corner, out of sight
A lonely girl lurks, she’s faded to grey

In the shadows she crouched, her eyes filled with fear
She tried to speak, but no one could hear
Her hair was a mess, her face a disgrace
She was only trying to find her place
But look at her now
Alone and tired, her days have expired
She’s just turned sixteen, she’s only a teen

She clutches an old guitar
It’s battered and dull, its strings are frayed
Its days of beauty are long decayed
Yet she holds it tight to her chest

Abstract walls and dirty doors
Turning wheels and dusty floors
Have been her only home for years
Once she had so many fears
But now she is free
Cos she can sing a song on her old guitar

She strums a chord of an unknown tune
People pass by, don’t stop and stare
They make their way without a care
They laugh and speak of teens in the streets
‘See what they’ve done, this path they choose
We’ve heard it all in the daily news’

But the girl only smiles
As the broken chords fill her empty mind
She strums and strums
As dawn slips to dusk
And stars fill the evening sky

Beggars crowd the busy streets
Many weep and wonder why
But this battered girl does not cry
She just strums a song on her old guitar
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The Old Guitar

Contributed by Stej00 on Monday, 20th March 2006 @ 06:45:38 AM in AEST
Topic: StoryPoetry



I walk a flooded city street
Buildings stand tall, people rush by
In a painted world of black and white
And deep in a corner, out of sight
A lonely girl lurks, she’s faded to grey

In the shadows she crouched, her eyes filled with fear
She tried to speak, but no one could hear
Her hair was a mess, her face a disgrace
She was only trying to find her place
But look at her now
Alone and tired, her days have expired
She’s just turned sixteen, she’s only a teen

She clutches an old guitar
It’s battered and dull, its strings are frayed
Its days of beauty are long decayed
Yet she holds it tight to her chest

Abstract walls and dirty doors
Turning wheels and dusty floors
Have been her only home for years
Once she had so many fears
But now she is free
Cos she can sing a song on her old guitar

She strums a chord of an unknown tune
People pass by, don’t stop and stare
They make their way without a care
They laugh and speak of teens in the streets
‘See what they’ve done, this path they choose
We’ve heard it all in the daily news’

But the girl only smiles
As the broken chords fill her empty mind
She strums and strums
As dawn slips to dusk
And stars fill the evening sky

Beggars crowd the busy streets
Many weep and wonder why
But this battered girl does not cry
She just strums a song on her old guitar




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Re: The Old Guitar (User Rating: 1 )
by freespirit on Monday, 20th March 2006 @ 11:19:47 AM AEST
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I realy love the way you have written this
so true about so many teens I work with street kids have seen the suffering and pain
they go through the lost children of the night good write god bless
freespirt 5 stars on this one


Re: The Old Guitar (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 20th March 2006 @ 07:09:39 PM AEST
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I would have liked the poem more if this was less observational - show/tell -, but I guess that can be fixed.

What was the song about? Could the name give this greater depth?

N_F


Re: The Old Guitar (User Rating: 1 )
by arc on Monday, 20th March 2006 @ 07:41:08 PM AEST
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i like it i am a guitar player myself and thats all i do so i better be carefull




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