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[aid] => mick
[title] => Impossible stargazing
[time] => 2006-02-27 20:43:29
[hometext] => A 'trying-to-break-this-block' submission, so not the best I have written. Still, I rather like it, especially as it went places I didn't expect it to. Honest opinions only, please. Thankyou.
[bodytext] => Jumping into glitter,
Does not seem hard right now,
And swimming to the moon,
Seems possible somehow,
I'll raise up my hands,
Then simply touch the sky,
Lift my feet up off the ground,
And teach myself to fly.
Then I'll soar upon the northern wind,
Where the birds will whisper lullabies,
They'll teach me how to sing of spring,
While I reach out for the sunrise.
I'll gently touch the softest dawn.
And hold it like it a child born,
Sing the day to sleep, for night,
Won't wait for me until the morn.
Then maybe in the shawl of dark,
I'll fly alone from where I stand,
With the moon a beacon, leading me,
I'll leave my place upon the land.
Then from there I'll cartwheel down,
Across the atmosphere,
And ride upon the starshine,
Through the galaxies which appear.
Then to the dawn I'll slowly fall,
Led by sparrow's wings,
To the longest grasses I'd stand tall,
And wait for day to end.
I'd float there till the nightime comes,
With the wind my only friend,
Till the moon lights like a beacon...
... And I'll stargaze again.
This jumping into glitter,
Seems so perfect now,
And swimming to the moon,
Seems easy somehow,
I'll raise up my hands,
Then simply touch the sky,
Lift my feet up off the ground,
And teach myself to fly.
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[acomm] => 0
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[score] => 20
[ratings] => 4
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Impossible stargazing
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 08:43:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Jumping into glitter,
Does not seem hard right now,
And swimming to the moon,
Seems possible somehow,
I'll raise up my hands,
Then simply touch the sky,
Lift my feet up off the ground,
And teach myself to fly.
Then I'll soar upon the northern wind,
Where the birds will whisper lullabies,
They'll teach me how to sing of spring,
While I reach out for the sunrise.
I'll gently touch the softest dawn.
And hold it like it a child born,
Sing the day to sleep, for night,
Won't wait for me until the morn.
Then maybe in the shawl of dark,
I'll fly alone from where I stand,
With the moon a beacon, leading me,
I'll leave my place upon the land.
Then from there I'll cartwheel down,
Across the atmosphere,
And ride upon the starshine,
Through the galaxies which appear.
Then to the dawn I'll slowly fall,
Led by sparrow's wings,
To the longest grasses I'd stand tall,
And wait for day to end.
I'd float there till the nightime comes,
With the wind my only friend,
Till the moon lights like a beacon...
... And I'll stargaze again.
This jumping into glitter,
Seems so perfect now,
And swimming to the moon,
Seems easy somehow,
I'll raise up my hands,
Then simply touch the sky,
Lift my feet up off the ground,
And teach myself to fly.
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lostinmyself
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 09:02:21 PM AEST
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Omigosh, hun. This is BETTER the second time round. (And I'm hungry
for a few MORE rounds...). As I said to you earlier, this feels like a soft
dream. So peaceful and tranquil and the imagery is exquisite!! I feel
light as air reading this.
Hun, I think ya done taught yourself to fly REAL good! lol
Beautifully sigh-evoking!
*hugs by the truckload*
~Breezy
(who is ever-so-glad to have you back!) |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by purplestary on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 09:33:42 PM AEST
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| i agree with breezy...this is beautifuly written. i love it...and yes you have taught yourself to fly...your wings are beautiful. ;) |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 10:54:04 PM AEST
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aw Philly, you know I love this!!
It just bursts with possibilities....and I really need to believe in those right now...thanks. |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 11:09:33 AM AEST
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Philly this is delightful. YOu never skipped a beat in this brilliant poem. It makes me want to jump inside the lines and go on this adventure with you. If this is fighting block I cant see it. Profound and flawless as always.
Bravo! Bravo!!!!!!!!
Michelle |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 02:38:20 PM AEST
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This is a beautiful write. I love the metaphors. It flows so well...like a soft summer breeze cooling someone and just making them feel soooooo comfy. :-)
Simply put, I love it.
Thank you,
Tim
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 03:56:53 PM AEST
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Rated you a five earlier, dear Philly. But I had to comment too, and say this reminds me of those oh so starry nights in my mountain highs. If we can fly anywhere, it certainly felt like it gazing out there from the high places! I love this because I love to imagine flying (without a motor - heh).
*hugs*
Jules |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by boobiepeach on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 07:12:06 PM AEST
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very nice write.
your imagery amazing yet so simply written.
i felt life i could lift off my chairand float for a moment
great write
peace |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by Kie-Kie on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 08:16:21 PM AEST
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*smiles* so tranquil :D I LOVE it sweetheart :D Simply marvelous :D
My new favorite :D
Love ya,
~Kiela~ |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 09:54:48 PM AEST
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I'll pretend i didn't hear honest opinons only lol. now on with the comment like any one reading this needs 2 lie lol. It's beautiful phil
need i say more, ok i will, it touched my heart
the words r like little paintings that induce that first feel of love in spring time. Tottaly lovely, you know how 2 spoil your reader.
Welcome Back
((((((Phil))))))
Ben
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by twick on
Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 01:32:17 PM AEST
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I like your style.
This simply clarity while using metaphors and imagery. |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by faith_my_eyes on
Saturday, 4th March 2006 @ 12:05:17 PM AEST
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| This is lovely, fanciful, whimsical and something I am sure Anne Shirley (Anne of Green Gables) would be in love with. Well done, Philly! |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 30th March 2006 @ 09:20:50 PM AEST
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Wow, I was reading this poem for the second time, and started to high light my favorite verse for this comment , and then realized , wait they are all exquisite and enchanting, Bravo!!! I Have a new favorite poem now,
Hugs,
LG |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by silver_runaway on
Tuesday, 4th April 2006 @ 10:09:14 AM AEST
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This is beautiful, plain and simple
*Laura* |
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Re: Impossible stargazing
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by wizard on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 01:15:30 PM AEST
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not all writes can be "our best", of course.
i thought this was an excellent post, very enchanting.
wiz |
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