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Array ( [sid] => 11534 [catid] => 1 [aid] => Mick [title] => no title yet, need help on that one! [time] => 2003-01-29 00:00:00 [hometext] => ok, here's a rough draft of a poem I wrote for my little sister, for her upcoming wedding . ANY comments would be GREATFULLY accepted... i'm pretty sure I still need to work on this one, so any suggestions, please send 'em my way. (i am especially thankful to lowman, ladyfawn and fwog, for nudging me in the right direction! THANK YOU!!!) [bodytext] => My heart belongs to you
Forever and a day
These words I pledge to you
As our vows , we say

The union of two lives
Combining to become one
A happy future beckons us
Tomorrow has just begun

So gently cradle my soul
I'll share my love with you
We'll walk this path together
And guide each other through. [comments] => 6 [counter] => 183 [topic] => 2 [informant] => tanna [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => LovePoetry )

no title yet, need help on that one!

Contributed by tanna on Wednesday, 29th January 2003 @ 12:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic: LovePoetry

My heart belongs to you
Forever and a day
These words I pledge to you
As our vows , we say

The union of two lives
Combining to become one
A happy future beckons us
Tomorrow has just begun

So gently cradle my soul
I'll share my love with you
We'll walk this path together
And guide each other through.

Copyright © tanna ... [ 2003-01-29 00:00:00]
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Re: no title yet, need help on that one! (User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on Wednesday, 29th January 2003 @ 06:03:20 AM AEST
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this poem is very beautiful.. especially..thoughts expressed in last stanza.. Good luck..venkat

Re: no title yet, need help on that one! (User Rating: 1 )
by LOWMAN613 on Wednesday, 29th January 2003 @ 09:18:01 AM AEST
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Tanna,not bad at all You did it! You could still add a line with their names in it, it will personalize the peice! I liked this though she will too! Christina

Re: no title yet, need help on that one! (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Thursday, 30th January 2003 @ 12:03:47 AM AEST
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Beautiful... very well done, you asked for help so I'm giving my two cents again lol.. unless you do not agree with these words, I feel this smoother flow,

The union of two lives
Combining to be one
A happy future beckons us
Our lives have just begun,

love and hugs always Nessa

"Love, and health to all." ~Shakespeare~

Re: no title yet, need help on that one! (User Rating: 1 )
by Tanna on Thursday, 30th January 2003 @ 12:52:26 AM AEST
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Yup, I think you're right...thank you Nessa :)

Re: no title yet, need help on that one! (User Rating: 1 )
by karoody on Friday, 7th February 2003 @ 11:11:06 PM AEST
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you are definitely on the right track...that is the sweetest thing you could do for them.

Re: no title yet, need help on that one! (User Rating: 1 )
by riverofwords on Saturday, 15th February 2003 @ 08:27:21 AM AEST
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hi tanna ...yuo did a good job on this
i agree that addig the names will personalise it....if this poem is what you want to say then dont change a thing ..if any doubt then rewrite it until i says want it to
any help just contact me ,be very happy to help ..dont think yuo will need it
hugs
yuor new friend

peace be yuor journey
terry

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