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Array ( [sid] => 113166 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => To my dream girl, My One Last Breath [time] => 2006-01-14 14:25:13 [hometext] => I want to know if you think this would be a girl or boy who wrote this poem? I'm a newcomer so I need comments! Also tell me how this makes you fell. Thanx! [bodytext] => Everything's blank.
The pain won't go away.
Will it ever stop?
or will it just take me away.

My world has been spinning,
churning, and swirling.
I know it will never stop,
because my life is at a turning.

Right now I'm starting to realize,
that this stage is actually real.
But I just can not take it,
I don't know how to deal.

What can I do Girl,
to get back in your life.
I miss you so very much,
and without you I want to die.

I'm sorry for what I did.
It came so very fast.
But please can we just forget it.
Forget about the past.

I know that it would be hard,
for both of us to see,
a picture that shows my love for you,
and also your's for me.

But do you think I think,
that what I did was right.
NO. I swear that I'd do anything,
to just take back that night.

Everytime I think of it,
I bite my skin to the bone.
It's just been tearing me apart,
so much of my blood has shown.

I wish we could have kissed just one more time,
For else I shall meet death.
Because with that one last kiss,
Would have come my one last breath.

That's my side of it,
Brendan

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To my dream girl, My One Last Breath

Contributed by flyineagle on Saturday, 14th January 2006 @ 02:25:13 PM in AEST
Topic: LostLove

Everything's blank.
The pain won't go away.
Will it ever stop?
or will it just take me away.

My world has been spinning,
churning, and swirling.
I know it will never stop,
because my life is at a turning.

Right now I'm starting to realize,
that this stage is actually real.
But I just can not take it,
I don't know how to deal.

What can I do Girl,
to get back in your life.
I miss you so very much,
and without you I want to die.

I'm sorry for what I did.
It came so very fast.
But please can we just forget it.
Forget about the past.

I know that it would be hard,
for both of us to see,
a picture that shows my love for you,
and also your's for me.

But do you think I think,
that what I did was right.
NO. I swear that I'd do anything,
to just take back that night.

Everytime I think of it,
I bite my skin to the bone.
It's just been tearing me apart,
so much of my blood has shown.

I wish we could have kissed just one more time,
For else I shall meet death.
Because with that one last kiss,
Would have come my one last breath.

That's my side of it,
Brendan

Copyright © flyineagle ... [ 2006-01-14 14:25:13]
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Re: To my dream girl, My One Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Saturday, 14th January 2006 @ 03:21:07 PM AEST
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it sounds like a guy wrote the poem. I can feel the persons anguish in this. well done and well written. ^_^

Re: To my dream girl, My One Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Saturday, 14th January 2006 @ 06:16:18 PM AEST
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suggests to move on, past is gone.. future is everything. thank you for this poem.. reminds me of who kissed who to point Him out and ... anyway nice poem.. dream girl .. last breath.. fun title, wonderful write as well, good job.. Raquel Leah

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