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Morning Run
Contributed by
Jeff_Scott_Morehead
on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 08:43:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Morning Run
Got up with the rise of the sun
Grabbed my jackets as I went out for a run
Took in the coolness of the air
Let behind all my worries and cares
Down a path what is familiar ground
Where only the birds make the sound
Jogging at a decent speed
To keep on going, I feel the need
One mile or maybe two
Even three before Im through
Until I cleansed of yesterday
And the stresses that came my way
Oh such beauty my eyes can see
On the trail ahead of me
There is peace and contentment on this road
Awaiting, after shedding this heavy load
So my feet must not tire
Until I reach my fondest desire
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Jeff_Scott_Morehead
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2005-10-31 08:43:00]
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Re: Morning Run
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by shadowmoon on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 10:04:52 AM AEST
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| varry descriptive. i can relat to this one. |
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Re: Morning Run
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by Lin54 on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 11:55:10 AM AEST
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Good poem--I can feel the feet hitting the ground and the leaving the past behind and reach ahead without a worry!
Thanks for sharing!
Linda |
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Re: Morning Run
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by JordonsBaby17 on
Friday, 20th January 2006 @ 11:29:11 PM AEST
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| very nice |
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Re: Morning Run
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by thexshattered on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 08:12:06 AM AEST
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| The concept of "running away from your troubles" is a pretty overdone topic, but I like the way you narrated the piece. Narration in poetry is not a strong suit of mine, and I admire your inclination. Some rhymes seemed fun to just repeat over and over, and others were the kind filled with dramatics that make an impact on the reader. I suggest trying to uniform those types or rhymes: either the fun kind, or the dramatic kind all throughout. Both types, however, played a good role in your piece. |
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