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[aid] => mick
[title] => A Woman Scorned
[time] => 2005-10-23 20:44:37
[hometext] => Derived more from past incidents...sorta ; )
[bodytext] => Venomous anger erupts
love failed to corrupt
Pity the mockery
of a lusty debauchery
Let the chips fall where they may
revenge served cold, a rancid entree
You'll wonder how this occurred
as fantasy and reality become blurred
The scathing end has yet to come
won't know what hit you till I'm done
You shouldn't have done this, did you think?
Don't mess with someone on the brink!
Creep up behind you, won't make a sound
you'll wish you lost what you thought you found
A painful lesson I will embed
Me as your foe? You'll wish you were dead
[comments] => 20
[counter] => 1053
[topic] => 6
[informant] => hauntedscorp
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[ratings] => 20
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => AngryPoetry
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A Woman Scorned
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 08:44:37 PM in AEST
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Venomous anger erupts
love failed to corrupt
Pity the mockery
of a lusty debauchery
Let the chips fall where they may
revenge served cold, a rancid entree
You'll wonder how this occurred
as fantasy and reality become blurred
The scathing end has yet to come
won't know what hit you till I'm done
You shouldn't have done this, did you think?
Don't mess with someone on the brink!
Creep up behind you, won't make a sound
you'll wish you lost what you thought you found
A painful lesson I will embed
Me as your foe? You'll wish you were dead
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-10-23 20:44:37]
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by MrJeans on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 08:51:37 PM AEST
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I think you got your point across:)
Angry, defiant, with a deep-rooted promise.
Great! Love a good story of karma
coming back ten fold. Keep it up!!!
Mr. |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 09:07:24 PM AEST
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Angery Scorp!...lol..good job Scorp i must say i didnt feel all that scared of you but it did make me smile..lol.. =]
~Clark |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 09:20:02 PM AEST
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Wow Scorpy!!!! LOVED THIS!!! (I relate .......lol) You choose your words
expertly and have crafted a very believable vengence here ...
"Me as your foe? You'll wish you were dead"
Nothing sums up a scorpio's sting quite like that line! Perfect!!!
Go get em chicklet!
~Breezy |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 09:53:48 PM AEST
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Wow, I wouldn't want to be the guy who crossed you here. Pretty fiesty, Scorp. I really like the poem, however. It's direct and you certainly present as empowered to take care of yourself. Very candid and full of imagery.
Well done, Scorp the avenger :) ...from someone with such a gentle heart. :) I don't really see you as an avenger.
Will |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by brew on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 10:29:20 PM AEST
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MAN O MAN....................Again, and wrong. Been there, done that.......and can so relate.! Good, inner heart write.and made to the POINT>!
Brew~ |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by wizard on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 11:21:51 PM AEST
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hey scorp, great write. i can feel your anger...
wiz |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 24th October 2005 @ 11:34:29 AM AEST
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Nicely done scorp apparently some one has
become very abbrasive to you, hope they read this, once again your on the mark, a nice
peice of poetry, not mention the effectiveness
of it's pecussive inuendo, give him hell scorp.
(((((scorp)))))
Ben |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by sweetangeluk on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 08:33:32 AM AEST
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Oh been there scorp. Hell has no fury like a woman scorned.
Felt the anger and hurt in this one
Fabulous
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 11:33:18 AM AEST
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Brillant.. This was wicked good... great write.. thanks for the comments..
christina |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 12:23:25 PM AEST
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Revenge is sweet
a good silent scream... |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 05:20:21 PM AEST
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hey scorpy.....remind me never to tick you off...
I could feel the venom dripping from this piece....as always you write with emotion so, so well.... |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by ChibiMiroku on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 04:25:04 PM AEST
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Pretty short and to the point, but a good poem nevertheless. ^^
I'm getting the feeling, though...that this would make a really good rap song. Nicely done! |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 08:24:09 PM AEST
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| good vent ,,get everything off your chest...I liked it ,,,,good wrute from a good writer,,,,Eddy |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by jyssvw22 on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 04:50:02 PM AEST
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the anger in this write comes across strong, good job expressing yourself here, your writing keeps improving, and I look forward to more writes from you.
be well scorp
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 08:35:35 PM AEST
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(((((((((((((((((((( Scorperriffic ))))))))))))))))))))
Where is that little eeeeek emoticon when I need 'im?
Kinda "sorta" am glad I'm not on the receiving end of this most angrified write....no change that to definitely glad!!!
Whew *wipes sweat from forehead*
As always consistent as you are in all your writes this one is again awesomel & truly intense! I had to duck ;-} as I read....feeling the emotion coming right at me from the monitor like a lighting bolt. No mere lighting bolt I might add too.
Obviosuly the person this is driected at didn't think. Gives the rest of us something to think about, however. Don't mess with the Scorpenatoreriffic.
Incredible write and I hope it helped you getting that embedding lesson out. :-)
Take care,
Tim
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by SocialMisfit on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 02:58:01 PM AEST
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lol scorp, you always seem to have the most intense poems, your writeing is just so awsome. keep em comeing i love to read your stuff.
SM |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd November 2005 @ 03:28:19 PM AEST
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been praying for you my dear friend, i feel your grieving, its not worth these emotions, sadness, pain of anger, let it all go.. trust in Jesus... He will set you free from your pain and hurt...
RLD |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Saturday, 5th November 2005 @ 08:01:53 PM AEST
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Scorpy, I don't know how I missed this. To self absorbed in my own garbage I guess. I absolutely love this. And oh how I can relate. Very powerful words.
~Shannon |
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Re: A Woman Scorned
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 12th June 2014 @ 08:26:37 PM AEST
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strong, well written! wow! lol! i see you with a cast iron
pan after your tormentor, the image is great as it may
be the same one from your other poem...
hugs n' love nessa |
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