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[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Jumping hurdles
[time] => 2005-10-08 04:41:51
[hometext] => To one specific person. Yes i am angry but after sometime i will forgive and probably erase this poem.
[bodytext] => I feel alone inside
even though i am a friend
I could complain and chide
I try not to do it
yet even i have my limits
even i get stressed
I want to know what you want me to do?
You want me to be like you
it will never happen
you want me to think like you
but all i see are flaws
you're critical of my ways
it seems that you don't like me
I guess i will ask you straight
so that i will know
I show respect to you
and yet you still dog me
sometimes i wish i did not know you at all
I've had some hard times
and learned some lessons
it will take me awhile
to be the way i was before
I know you say
you really like me
and yet i feel
I'm on eggshells
I do not think
you even know me
so why must you
put me through hell
I have walked through the desert
it has been a ver' tough year
I have tried not to put burdens upon you
so i ask you to give mercy
as i am inclined to do
yet i should not be asking this of you
I know you say
you really like me
but life is harder
when around you
I can not tell you
even simple things about me
with out you copping
an attitude
I feel alone inside
yet i give my heart to others
the only one who thinks it's wrong
is the one I'm talking too
I know I've done my best
I gave all that i offered
and yet you still take more
I wonder if you're my friend.
[comments] => 14
[counter] => 482
[topic] => 16
[informant] => Archie
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 45
[ratings] => 9
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => FriendshipPoetry
)
Jumping hurdles
Contributed by
Archie
on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 04:41:51 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I feel alone inside
even though i am a friend
I could complain and chide
I try not to do it
yet even i have my limits
even i get stressed
I want to know what you want me to do?
You want me to be like you
it will never happen
you want me to think like you
but all i see are flaws
you're critical of my ways
it seems that you don't like me
I guess i will ask you straight
so that i will know
I show respect to you
and yet you still dog me
sometimes i wish i did not know you at all
I've had some hard times
and learned some lessons
it will take me awhile
to be the way i was before
I know you say
you really like me
and yet i feel
I'm on eggshells
I do not think
you even know me
so why must you
put me through hell
I have walked through the desert
it has been a ver' tough year
I have tried not to put burdens upon you
so i ask you to give mercy
as i am inclined to do
yet i should not be asking this of you
I know you say
you really like me
but life is harder
when around you
I can not tell you
even simple things about me
with out you copping
an attitude
I feel alone inside
yet i give my heart to others
the only one who thinks it's wrong
is the one I'm talking too
I know I've done my best
I gave all that i offered
and yet you still take more
I wonder if you're my friend.
Copyright ©
Archie
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2005-10-08 04:41:51]
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 05:07:19 AM AEST
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Wow, Archie, what an awesome write! How much I can feel the anger, frustration, the emotions. How all too well I can relate to so many things in this poem. Soooo many things....but these lines run a direct paralell to my life:
"I know you say
you really like me
and yet i feel
I'm on eggshells
I do not think
you even know me
so why must you
put me through hell
Incredible. I know you say it's for one person but thank you for sharing anyway. It's a great write!
Thanks,
Tim
:)
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 05:48:28 AM AEST
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Wow Archie. This was full of emotion, yet not consumed by it. You've controled your writing hand well, seperating it from your heart, while your heart dictates the words. Something like that.
Well said, my friend.
Take care.
David |
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by sandypoet on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 06:03:00 AM AEST
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| Sometimes you just got to get it out.. so it wont eat you up inside.. I know how it feels to be really confused on how another one feels about you.. but the bottom line... You shouldn't have to be confused. it is there or isn't. great write. |
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by inoc on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 07:06:29 AM AEST
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I hope the hurdles will become easier for you as I do not know you, but you seem such a nice person...
all the best Archie...
coni |
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by sweetangeluk on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 07:44:40 AM AEST
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You want me to be like you
it will never happen
you want me to think like you
but all i see are flaws
your critical of my ways
it seems that you don't like me
I guess i will ask you straight
so that i will know
A true friend would never intentionally hurt you. A friend is someone who you can confide in and share you joy and sadness with.… Friendship is a special bond that should never be one sided. Maybe this person is not truly a good friend.
Just be you Archie if they are a friend they will love you for who and what you are.
Love Angelxxx
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by jigsma on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 08:59:31 AM AEST
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Eggshells is not a good place to be... Been there myself. Best wishes!
Excellent!! |
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 04:28:10 PM AEST
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Well Archie, people like who you described, don't deserve to know people who would 'jump hurdles' for them. A friend isn't someone who tries to belittle you, and has you watching your words/actions. I like this write alot. It's honest and forthcoming, as is the author. I don't think you should delete this.
Let the person feel ashamed...they damn well should be.
Great job: )
Scorp. |
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by anitajames on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 11:16:29 PM AEST
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It's very difficult to have and be a friend without succombing to all the traps that go along with it. It often seems that people initially are attracted to us because of who we are, but the minute they have us, they try to change us. I have a very cynnical attitude about this, but I have learned it the hard way. I'm sorry that you are going through this.
hugs,
Ann |
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 11:09:04 PM AEST
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If that person doesn't like you for who you are then that's their bad luck. Don't go changing a thing my dear friend. An honest truthful write that needed to be said. I'm glad you got it off your chest. I agree with Scorp, I wouldn't delete the poem.
*heartfelt hugs*
Sue |
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 9th October 2005 @ 11:58:38 PM AEST
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This is a good testimony on what constitutes a good friendship, and what doesn't. It allows for the expression of a lot of your emotions. Particularly, it expresses your frustration, perhaps anger, about not feeling excepted and censored. It's apparently hard to just be yourself.
May you persevere in defending your integrity as a person.
Will |
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 08:03:36 PM AEST
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wow deep and emotional .
well done |
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by emystar on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 09:32:57 PM AEST
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Very sad but hope u r feeling better now.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by Robert_Edgar_Burns on
Monday, 10th October 2005 @ 10:50:16 PM AEST
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I have seen my share of battles, death, pain, and misery.
But it never strikes as deeply as when the victim is you yourself. We should then ask ourselves: "Are we doing for others
what they can't do for themselves to deserve praise heaped on us or are we doing it because Christ lives in us and loves everyone in spite of them loving us back or not." Do we want man's
praise or someday hear "Well done thou good and faithful servant." "Because you have done these things to the least of these My children, you have done them unto Me!" Enter thou into
My Heavenly Kingdom!" I hope this gives you a different perspective , one that I had to adopt myself to retain my sanity, because like you, I know how real the pain is. Maybe then it will be
easier for you to more quickly forgive this person. There is "Freedom" in forgiveness. Both for you and the offender. May God prick the heart of this person towards repentance. That is their problem. Forgiving is yours. God Bless you.
Love, Robert Edgar Burns
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Re: Jumping hurdles
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 04:34:55 PM AEST
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And now you realize why they are called Hurdles Archie.. the barriers we must all learn how to leap over.These obstacles can be hurdled over, patience, the Lord will help us all. I have faith in you...
A verse from Apples of Gold by C.R.Gibson
We can do anything we want if we stick to it long enough.
Huggs Archie
Raquel Leah |
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