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Array ( [sid] => 106596 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Chained freedom [time] => 2005-09-27 12:56:00 [hometext] => || Again, not a rhyming poem. Hint: My eyes are blue, there is a connection there with the wedding dress... || [bodytext] => Sew my eyes - so I can't see the needle.
Look out.
Time goes backwards before dementia sets in.
Child runs out.
She looks like me.
Look at her eyes.
They're real.
They are burgundy.
How odd?
How ... normal?
I have no idea.
Walls close in as the room gets Bigger.
Accents switch places and countries no longer exist.
The shoes lay out-on the ceiling ... waiting.
Waiting to cover my hands with imaginary delight.
Time ... come back.
Stop.
Don't keep going.
I don't want to see the future yet.
Where are we?
A funeral?
A funeral ...
There are few people laughing and in elegant gowns.
Keep going.
Look forward.
A burgundy casket - made just for me.
Laugh.
Laugh all you want. I am not here.
My corpse is backwards ...
Does no one notice?
Shouldn't that be fixed?
Frames are weeping because their insides don't exist.
No photographs of me alive - only photographs of my dead parts.
My therapists - front row.
Smoking candy cigars in their plastic suits.
I'm in a blue wedding dress and my eyes are white.
My vision turns black and yet ...
... I can see everything clearly.
This is who I am.
A corpse drowning in unattainable happiness.
A thing only for the worms to thrive on.
Eat on, maggots ...
... The wedding dress is for rent. [comments] => 5 [counter] => 163 [topic] => 73 [informant] => Desolated_Denial [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 4 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => abstract )
Chained freedom

Contributed by Desolated_Denial on Tuesday, 27th September 2005 @ 12:56:00 PM in AEST
Topic: abstract



Sew my eyes - so I can't see the needle.
Look out.
Time goes backwards before dementia sets in.
Child runs out.
She looks like me.
Look at her eyes.
They're real.
They are burgundy.
How odd?
How ... normal?
I have no idea.
Walls close in as the room gets Bigger.
Accents switch places and countries no longer exist.
The shoes lay out-on the ceiling ... waiting.
Waiting to cover my hands with imaginary delight.
Time ... come back.
Stop.
Don't keep going.
I don't want to see the future yet.
Where are we?
A funeral?
A funeral ...
There are few people laughing and in elegant gowns.
Keep going.
Look forward.
A burgundy casket - made just for me.
Laugh.
Laugh all you want. I am not here.
My corpse is backwards ...
Does no one notice?
Shouldn't that be fixed?
Frames are weeping because their insides don't exist.
No photographs of me alive - only photographs of my dead parts.
My therapists - front row.
Smoking candy cigars in their plastic suits.
I'm in a blue wedding dress and my eyes are white.
My vision turns black and yet ...
... I can see everything clearly.
This is who I am.
A corpse drowning in unattainable happiness.
A thing only for the worms to thrive on.
Eat on, maggots ...
... The wedding dress is for rent.




Copyright © Desolated_Denial ... [ 2005-09-27 12:56:00]
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Re: Chained freedom (User Rating: 1 )
by Pisces101 on Tuesday, 27th September 2005 @ 01:46:43 PM AEST
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i normally really don't like morbid poetry. but you did this one well. i like the ending "this wedding dress is for rent" it concludes the poem to let everyone know that what they was thinking was tru...... and what the h*** are you doing walkin down the aisle feeling this way? good heavens.... i hope i don't feel like that. great write keep it up.


Re: Chained freedom (User Rating: 1 )
by remote on Tuesday, 27th September 2005 @ 02:10:25 PM AEST
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Very good write, with nice witty interludes. Great flow and great ending too.


Re: Chained freedom (User Rating: 1 )
by fairyfire1988 on Tuesday, 27th September 2005 @ 02:22:12 PM AEST
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very nice, i like it a lot...very pretty...in a morbid way
good job
~mandi~


Re: Chained freedom (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 27th September 2005 @ 04:35:31 PM AEST
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Great write!


Re: Chained freedom (User Rating: 1 )
by Whisper on Tuesday, 27th September 2005 @ 05:35:14 PM AEST
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Geee that was quite the write. A up and down emotional ride of words

Whisper




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