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Array ( [sid] => 106432 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Broken [time] => 2005-09-25 03:02:11 [hometext] => This is just a poem that attempts to communicate the struggles in life and the pain that you can't ignore, I think everyone can relate. [bodytext] => No one ever told me that life would be easy,
No one ever said I would make it through okay,
But no one ever said it would be this hard either,
Or that I'd struggle to make it through each day,

You would think that with all the ***** in life,
Someone would warn what could happen to you,
But everyone just makes their mistakes,
And expects you to learn from your mistakes too,

It's hard when there's so much on your mind,
So many thoughts and feelings you don't understand,
And you realise that you're slowly falling behind,
And you're not going to end up quite where you planned,

One day you stop and you look at yourself,
You compare who you are now to who you were then,
You know that you have become somebody else,
That you'll never be who you were ever again,

And that makes you feel a little bit sad,
And the feeling begins to invade,
So much is going on in your life,
That you can't work out the source of the pain,

Problems that you can't quite grasp,
Begin to grow and grow,
What is wrong with me? You ask,
You don't know why you don't know,

In all of the confusion and all of the hurt,
You wonder where you are under all of the dirt,
You can't even work out how you feel,
Everything seems fake and nothing seems real,

The world seems to blur and still you go on,
Because you can't fix what has gone wrong,
You try to continue you try to be strong,
One day you break after so long. [comments] => 7 [counter] => 161 [topic] => 75 [informant] => bedazzled [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => anguished )
Broken

Contributed by bedazzled on Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 03:02:11 AM in AEST
Topic: anguished



No one ever told me that life would be easy,
No one ever said I would make it through okay,
But no one ever said it would be this hard either,
Or that I'd struggle to make it through each day,

You would think that with all the ***** in life,
Someone would warn what could happen to you,
But everyone just makes their mistakes,
And expects you to learn from your mistakes too,

It's hard when there's so much on your mind,
So many thoughts and feelings you don't understand,
And you realise that you're slowly falling behind,
And you're not going to end up quite where you planned,

One day you stop and you look at yourself,
You compare who you are now to who you were then,
You know that you have become somebody else,
That you'll never be who you were ever again,

And that makes you feel a little bit sad,
And the feeling begins to invade,
So much is going on in your life,
That you can't work out the source of the pain,

Problems that you can't quite grasp,
Begin to grow and grow,
What is wrong with me? You ask,
You don't know why you don't know,

In all of the confusion and all of the hurt,
You wonder where you are under all of the dirt,
You can't even work out how you feel,
Everything seems fake and nothing seems real,

The world seems to blur and still you go on,
Because you can't fix what has gone wrong,
You try to continue you try to be strong,
One day you break after so long.




Copyright © bedazzled ... [ 2005-09-25 03:02:11]
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Re: Broken (User Rating: 1 )
by ForlornSapphire on Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 03:17:43 AM AEST
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I have to say, I know exactly how you feel. Please know that you aren't alone in your pain. Stay strong and know that you will eventually come out on top. I have to keep thinking that or I won't ever make it through my days.


Re: Broken (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 03:29:09 AM AEST
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Well I'd say u captured this subject extremely well.
huggs,
emy


Re: Broken (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 04:24:42 AM AEST
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  • Great write, very heartfelt,
    and yes, many can indeed relate to this,
    I'm sure.

    I loved the flow and rhythm in these lines, too.

    Keep writing!

    And, a big warm welcome to YPDC!
    *hugs*


    ~KayT





  • Re: Broken (User Rating: 1 )
    by remote on Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 04:31:07 AM AEST
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    I understand what you are trying to say.

    You need to consider the following and write this poem again, you will feel much better.

    Like a sheep we wait to be lead, we have to be 'told' everything. I was under an impression that mankind had something called 'self awareness', 'thinking brain' and libraries. Shut your eyes, close your mind and be surprise how pathatic the life's got.


    Re: Broken (User Rating: 1 )
    by Archie on Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 08:20:07 AM AEST
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    Another writer who i am very fond of said these words about how you feel;

    "If you're troubled then you better let it go
    You're hustles ain't for nothing
    but you have to let it go"

    I think your poem speaks much truth, the question is what are going to do with it?

    Quote from "Troubles" by Alicia Keyes


    Re: Broken (User Rating: 1 )
    by brew on Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 02:16:14 PM AEST
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    Just keep going, seems most have to fall and go deep, yet it has to come back up and the light gets brighter. ! yes, we all have probs, but just think..........there are so many with worse. Be thankful you have your health, and if that is one bad thing, Im sorry.!

    Brew~


    Re: Broken (User Rating: 1 )
    by ChildsFaith46 on Sunday, 25th September 2005 @ 07:54:03 PM AEST
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    This peom is really great. I loved it. It's really deep in meaning, and It relates to my past. If i had used your awesome poem in the past it would have help me out greatly. The meaning of your poem stands out without any explaining. Great job......looking forward to reading more of your poems.
    ~Childs Faith~




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