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White Walls
Contributed by
spazz911
on
Thursday, 8th September 2005 @ 10:11:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
self-harmpoetry
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White walled insomnia
rips through my hole
suffocate brightness
pays penence my soul
no way is up
each wall is the same
like a lightened movement
in which no one has came
call out I hear nothing
my own voice has fade
spoken no language
since I entered this cage
denies me my freedom
for no door hath she
this white wall is fading
and I have no key
can't live in brightness
so here comes the red
rains down upon it
from out of my head
head, hands, and heart
feel lighter tonite
and the walls of my room
are no longer white
Copyright ©
spazz911
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2005-09-08 22:11:27]
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Re: White Walls
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 9th September 2005 @ 05:21:58 PM AEST
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Heartfelt, good job, can't wait to see more.
- Cassy |
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Re: White Walls
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by sprinter27 on
Friday, 9th September 2005 @ 10:39:46 PM AEST
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oooo.... i like kc. well, like but don't like. if you know what i mean. do i need to bring in a bulldozer? cause i will. and then i'll bring paint. how about that. take care of yourself, kc. i want to, but with gas prices, i can't always be there for you. sorry. just take care and keep writing!
~sprints (shell-shell as by someone) |
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Re: White Walls
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by xxbreathlessx on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 05:31:23 PM AEST
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| it flowed nicely and had alot of hidden messages (at least to me) and the ending was a nice contradiction to the beggining. good job. |
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Re: White Walls
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Sunday, 2nd October 2005 @ 12:43:37 PM AEST
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| great poem. i like the way u ended it. keep it up |
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