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[title] => CAN'T PROMISE
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[hometext] => This was placed here as a test, but, all the same, I hope you enjoy it again :-)
[bodytext] => I can't promise you roses
with blooms of brilliant red
but I will be here for you
as much as possible instead
I can't promise you perfection
for perfection I am not
for I am like the rose
thorns and all I've got
I can't promise you wealth
with money to shower away
But I can give you my love
to share throughout each day
I can't promise you the stars
for they are out of my reach
but I can show you romantic walks
holding hands along the beach
I can't promise total happiness
and never a tear in your eye
though I can give you my word
that in every way I will try
I can't promise eternal life
for this is not mine to give
but I can love and support you
everyday in which we live
so you see I am not the best
and I'm not leaps above the rest
but then you will never know
until you've put me to the test
Mick Puttock
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[notes] => I also re-did this one as song lyrics, adding a chorus to it, see it HERE.
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CAN'T PROMISE
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Mick_Puttock
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Friday, 28th June 2002 @ 12:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I can't promise you roses
with blooms of brilliant red
but I will be here for you
as much as possible instead
I can't promise you perfection
for perfection I am not
for I am like the rose
thorns and all I've got
I can't promise you wealth
with money to shower away
But I can give you my love
to share throughout each day
I can't promise you the stars
for they are out of my reach
but I can show you romantic walks
holding hands along the beach
I can't promise total happiness
and never a tear in your eye
though I can give you my word
that in every way I will try
I can't promise eternal life
for this is not mine to give
but I can love and support you
everyday in which we live
so you see I am not the best
and I'm not leaps above the rest
but then you will never know
until you've put me to the test
Mick Puttock
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 10th July 2002 @ 02:22:11 PM AEST
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Dearest Mick:)
Just thought I'd give you some feedback.. *Poems great by the way.. :) Just to help in case you wanted to know if the comments section is working.. I saw this wasn't done yet; if you see this then they are lol
Personally I am so pleased you have as usual stunned me with how quickly your getting things together up and running although I am lost but what else is new? Can't find one of my poems to save my life.. hows Its Written coming along too? your the only one with my articles.. taught me a lesson if they are lost unless someone has a copy ; how important to print them out...
Well, we are here and that makes me so happy today!! Thank you!!
love & huggers always Nessa
p.s. I love how we can see whos online here.. very special hope you keep it:)
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by Chrissie on
Wednesday, 10th July 2002 @ 10:59:44 PM AEST
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I enjoyed this very much Mick...a very heartfelt and sincere piece
Chrissie |
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by ThornMEngla on
Thursday, 11th July 2002 @ 03:23:03 PM AEST
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| This is a very sweet poem Mick. My husband wrote something like this for me and he used in our wedding vow. |
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by WiL_CA on
Saturday, 13th July 2002 @ 01:35:45 PM AEST
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| Mick, please look at some of my poems, and drop me an email, i would love to discuss poetry with you |
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by lilsmurfy on
Monday, 15th July 2002 @ 05:29:21 AM AEST
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| aww sooo sweet and heartwarming ..very lovely poem and so well written :) |
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by chatabox on
Friday, 19th July 2002 @ 10:16:56 PM AEST
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as long as your honest Mike, thats all us girlies want. We dont want false promises.
brilliant write. |
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by jewelry726 on
Sunday, 28th July 2002 @ 09:13:10 AM AEST
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| Nice write, all you can do is be who you are and offer natural things for the heart. i'ts a sure way to keep a realationship from falling a part. I wish there were more people in the world that think like your poem. |
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by jayu on
Thursday, 1st August 2002 @ 02:28:54 PM AEST
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Simplicity is the best ! Thus proved by this very beautiful poetry ! great poem and ofcourse sincerely expressed !
all the best always !
love jayu ! |
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by Shayle on
Wednesday, 7th August 2002 @ 01:22:34 PM AEST
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| Thank you so much for having this sight up a running so well...I'm so glad that there is a place that people can share their feelings, emotions, and most of all the talents that they have.......this poem is so beautiful. It sounds like something that would be said at a wedding. Thank you again! ~Shayle~ |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 9th August 2002 @ 01:17:13 AM AEST
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| I really enjoyed the poem... Very honest. It was really well-written. |
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by Tiana on
Monday, 26th August 2002 @ 06:56:45 AM AEST
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Ahhh... I remember the first time I read this, Mick. I thought it was beautiful then and I think it's even more beautiful now, the second time around... (Still finding my way around the site, you've done a wonderful job!)
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by MnMnMsrcool on
Thursday, 29th August 2002 @ 01:02:12 PM AEST
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| wow this is a really good poem. the way you put things together and stuff. good poem keep writing |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by jessie_messie on
Tuesday, 3rd September 2002 @ 08:53:51 AM AEST
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wow
i really love that poem did u write it for some one specail. i really do enjoy it do u think i could use it if i said u wrote it email me nad give me ur answer my email is
redbonesblue@yahoo.com
my name is jessica thanx |
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by Poetess730 on
Wednesday, 4th September 2002 @ 10:42:18 PM AEST
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| that was just sooo heart touching and so very true... we cannot promise anyone anything but ourself and all the love we have to give... |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by makx10 on
Monday, 23rd September 2002 @ 08:08:10 AM AEST
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| This really is a beautiful poem. Its sounds like the words should be wedding vows. Its honestly and sincere. The ending could have been a little stronger but great write. |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by matlock on
Tuesday, 1st October 2002 @ 05:14:03 AM AEST
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I like the fact that I like it..
It is simple, but needs to be to convey the feeling.
Nice. |
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by matlock on
Wednesday, 2nd October 2002 @ 05:04:14 AM AEST
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This seems inspired by a certain experience. I can hear your heart in this.
I liked it. |
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by bhavnas on
Monday, 7th October 2002 @ 06:39:44 PM AEST
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Hello Mick ,
I have just become the member of this site n must say the first poem i viewed was urs n how so beautifully n well written...i erad it thrice n yet felt like reading time n again..u have done a wonderful job...tk care...bhavna.
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by Q-DiZzY on
Tuesday, 22nd October 2002 @ 01:39:06 PM AEST
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Mick, I have to say...you very inspiring...
The poem is wonderful
good job
~1~ |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Tyes on
Friday, 25th October 2002 @ 05:45:59 PM AEST
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| I think this is a classique piece. Very good work. Did you have to revise it severally ? |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by KSonic on
Friday, 25th October 2002 @ 07:57:43 PM AEST
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| This poem is nothing short of amazing... |
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by Poetic_Angel on
Sunday, 27th October 2002 @ 02:15:46 PM AEST
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| i really liked it. good job!! |
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by inad on
Monday, 28th October 2002 @ 04:01:11 AM AEST
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| The poem is so deep, I really liked it, you did a wonderful job |
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by gina on
Friday, 1st November 2002 @ 05:39:04 AM AEST
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what can i say! its the 5th time i read it , and each time i enjoy it as its the first time...
gr8 write, keep em coming |
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by sweetolbaby on
Saturday, 2nd November 2002 @ 02:14:09 AM AEST
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| This is poem is too beautiful and I wish I could relate to it but I just can't . But it's still beautiful anyway. I want too hear more of this guy! |
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd November 2002 @ 02:57:32 PM AEST
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This is a great poem. One of the best I have ever read. It is truely hoenst pirce and honesty is the best that any one could possible want when love it involved. It is truely beautiful, it really touched my heart. Keep on writing.
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by KraZshyt on
Saturday, 9th November 2002 @ 03:41:25 AM AEST
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great poem and I hope you keep writing
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Opium on
Saturday, 9th November 2002 @ 05:56:19 AM AEST
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| Well I sure liked this test! ...keep writing, I think you have a great talent! |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by juliette on
Monday, 18th November 2002 @ 11:37:19 AM AEST
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| This is the second time I've read this poem and I'm wondering why I didn't comment on it the first time. Oh well, I should have - Wonderful poem! |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by crucifixioncross on
Wednesday, 27th November 2002 @ 10:13:50 AM AEST
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| 1300 reads and over 12 replies? why is this the only one with this many. mine all have like 30 reads and aybe 4 replies. maybe we should all take an extra hour to look at others posts and give em some reply. this was an excellent peice but was a litle bland. if you are looking for critism ill give it some other time but for now nice rhyming and you kept it in rythm pretty well. its not perfect yet tho :P no writings perfect cause its never done... |
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by Panther_1978 on
Friday, 29th November 2002 @ 05:20:31 AM AEST
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| Great poem Mick... I tryed to be the perfect man to someone I truly loved but that didn't get me no where... Anyway, good write! |
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by tvs_catcher_5 on
Sunday, 1st December 2002 @ 08:02:47 PM AEST
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| Nice work with the words, good layout, i don't have much to say, I just joined, but rather good i must add. |
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by POETRY_AND_LOVE_BUG on
Thursday, 5th December 2002 @ 07:32:55 PM AEST
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sooooooooooooooo pretty and you will defentaly find that "special Sombody" if you keep on writing like this it was pretty and great
:) |
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by MoonLite on
Thursday, 12th December 2002 @ 07:42:14 PM AEST
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| all I can say is "aww". that was such a sweet poem. I would die to have someone read that poem to me and mean it. the person you wrote that to (if there is one) is very lucky. |
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by Ilhar on
Sunday, 15th December 2002 @ 07:35:18 PM AEST
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| that is all anyone can really ask of someone to love. keep them coming that was beautiful. |
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by yellow_sundragon on
Monday, 16th December 2002 @ 03:34:12 PM AEST
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This has to be my tenth time reading this poem, at the old site and this one. I must say, I still love this, it has to be my altime favorite poem. Mick, have you ever considered publishing your poetry? Or am I way behind and you've already done it?
YS |
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by Olddarkme on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 06:54:10 PM AEST
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| I think it's a nice poem. It's simple but then again so are most poems about love. It's a very touching poem that is enjoyable to read and which touches on how love goes beyond our own flaws. |
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by Eloise on
Thursday, 9th January 2003 @ 04:12:34 AM AEST
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| this is a beautiful poem... i wish i could write like this.. |
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th January 2003 @ 04:03:39 PM AEST
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you are gay!!!!!!!!! fooker dukie poopoo boogie go take a doodoo!!!!!BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHahahahahHAAHhaAhaHahAHaaHAhAhahAHaHAhAHahahahahaAHAHAAHAH!!!!!!!!!!!
SIKE SIKE SIKE SIKE!!!!!!!!!! poem ROCKZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!IT ROCKS!!!!!!!!! |
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by starierose on
Sunday, 12th January 2003 @ 06:25:15 PM AEST
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| I thought that this poem was really good and it's true you can only do so much for a person in a relationship. |
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by kengie on
Tuesday, 14th January 2003 @ 04:07:28 PM AEST
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A very lovely poem..very much from your heart....poems from the heart is all I have...
kengie |
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by ladymae3 on
Thursday, 16th January 2003 @ 04:34:54 PM AEST
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| it was decent, but it didnt take my breath away. i cant really relate to the theme, |
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by SusieQ on
Friday, 17th January 2003 @ 02:32:01 PM AEST
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Mick, I am a new member, a senior person. That is an attention-getting title and very appropriate to your NICE POEM! If a lady has ever been disappointed in a love, made sus-picious of flowery words and promises, then, your words are just what she wants to hear.
Good luck. SusieQ |
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by Serria on
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| GEZZ!!! it was sooo nicely written!! only if i could write like that! |
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by angel71 on
Tuesday, 4th February 2003 @ 09:34:44 PM AEST
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Hi Mick,
well its my first time here and I've just read this poem and...wow, its really lovely. Where can I find a man like that lol.
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by WoRdUpHoMiEg on
Saturday, 15th February 2003 @ 12:10:46 PM AEST
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| I can't tell you how wonderful this poem is. This is exactly what I would like to recieve from a certain someone. It's absolutely perfect and I love it. Thanx! |
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by merge on
Wednesday, 19th February 2003 @ 08:48:31 PM AEST
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| I enjoy this poem. This is a good way to put love. All to often we are caught in the emotion and fancy of love without taking the time to understand it completely. |
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by One_L on
Monday, 24th February 2003 @ 02:44:05 PM AEST
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| awesome poem, LOVE it =D |
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by Former_Member on
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| WOW........................................i really have no idea what to say..........................this is beautiful.....and obviously a heck of alot of other people agree with me! a great write and a great site aswell! |
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by Desi on
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| I try not to judge people before I get to know them, but poetry can say a lot about a person's mind, heart or soul. You sound like a very willing, loving, caring person. If you wrote this poem to anyone inparticular, they should be greatful to know you and have your love. Its an excellant piece of work. You should consider being a professional poet. |
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Hey Mick! I just wanted to say what an awesome poem this was. It shows and tells a lot that most guys wont say or even write for that matter. You must be a very sensative soul. If you want to discuss and read more of my poetry then drop me a line.
Love me,
~Dreamer18~ |
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by Former_Member on
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| It was touching, keep it up. |
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by Uncooked on
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| Your poem has lots of voice. Its a poem you can see the author in, I hope. Maybe I will hear it on the radio someday. Or in one of those famous poetry books that Chapters sells. |
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| Just one word is all i can say - awesome.. :) |
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by Ju-Ju on
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| its perfect! |
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by JamesHowlett on
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| This is a great poem. It's beautifully written. Good Job. |
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by SamV on
Tuesday, 27th May 2003 @ 05:27:48 PM AEST
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| You did a nice job on this poem.. |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 28th May 2003 @ 11:15:09 AM AEST
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| Truely stunning....no words can say |
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by Ilhar on
Thursday, 5th June 2003 @ 06:52:04 PM AEST
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breathtaking
Shari |
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by Saira on
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| This is truly a beautiful write!! Loved it! |
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by Lady_Bubbles420 on
Tuesday, 17th June 2003 @ 07:31:52 PM AEST
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| I loved this poem. It was really good to read it the time I did because it was something I was trying to say to a person I cared about. |
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by loveisendless on
Saturday, 21st June 2003 @ 09:12:59 PM AEST
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| I see why it's no.1-you write really great,i'll be reading more of yours soon!Please read mine & tell me what you think! |
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by Sapphire on
Monday, 23rd June 2003 @ 10:47:25 AM AEST
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| How true this is! So very well written. Well done - you've captured the essence of the human soul that longs to be able to do all this, but has the insight to know his boundaries. It would be nice to hear it put to music. |
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by hot-shot on
Saturday, 28th June 2003 @ 07:07:37 PM AEST
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| hey mick! u have written a gr8 poem ..............really a very nice piece of work....keep it up dude. |
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by EyesRustedShut on
Tuesday, 1st July 2003 @ 09:52:02 PM AEST
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| Dang dude..... you must have veiwed your own poem like 3,600 times haha |
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by M on
Thursday, 3rd July 2003 @ 07:47:14 AM AEST
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This is such a cute poem. i can see why so many people have commented. I hope she did put you to the test and found you as perfect as possible.
Thank you for this site, too, it is so good, you should be very proud.
love and hope, EmilyxXx |
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by Niceguysfinishlast on
Thursday, 3rd July 2003 @ 09:32:52 PM AEST
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very well shows the meaninglessness and frialty of human life
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by Kimmie_mac on
Thursday, 17th July 2003 @ 10:44:42 AM AEST
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| All I can say is this poem is just great. I wished I wrote it. LOL Kimmie_mac |
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by jaeann on
Wednesday, 6th August 2003 @ 07:28:36 PM AEST
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| how beautiful....this should be union vows..... |
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Saturday, 9th August 2003 @ 03:35:13 PM AEST
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WOW!
can I say wow again?
This was amazing.
especially stanza 2...that got me.
This is elegantly written with the deepest sense of how love really feels.
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by sylph on
Saturday, 23rd August 2003 @ 05:24:23 PM AEST
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| lovely touching piece, mick! |
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by Pariah on
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| Well I liked it and I thought it was great :) |
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by HedderMarie on
Wednesday, 24th September 2003 @ 07:20:28 PM AEST
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Mick-
I truly liked the poem...personally it was very touching and brilliant...awesome job! |
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by loopylou on
Wednesday, 1st October 2003 @ 04:56:16 AM AEST
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| hey, this is a really simple yet clever poem with a lovin message that really touched me i cant wait to here more about you lou |
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by eviltinkerbell25 on
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| Touching, really (not). I wanted to puke. |
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by EternitysLyre on
Sunday, 19th October 2003 @ 10:27:22 AM AEST
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| As a poem, somehow i agree with the person above. |
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by lady_lollipop on
Friday, 24th October 2003 @ 04:34:22 AM AEST
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| This poem is great and I enjoyed reading it....keep it up! |
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by mercedes on
Sunday, 26th October 2003 @ 10:00:30 AM AEST
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| I did like the poem, it was sweet. But me, Ill go for the bad guy not the sweet guy any day. |
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by michelled43 on
Thursday, 6th November 2003 @ 09:12:51 AM AEST
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| im sure you have enough comments on this but it is a great write and a beautiful poem......i really loved it and it really makes me realize what kind of guy i want to find.... |
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| I liked it a lot! |
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by NikkiMNelson on
Monday, 8th December 2003 @ 07:08:38 PM AEST
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Very beautiful, inspiring poem!!
Write more!!
~*~Nikki~*~ |
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by whisper-of-night on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 02:48:19 AM AEST
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Beautiful, just beautiful, if only I can write something like this...... I love these lines-
' can't promise total happiness
and never a tear in your eye
though I can give you my word
that in every way I will try'
's you see I am not the best
and I'm not leaps above the rest
but then you will never know
until you've put me to the test.'
You spoke my mind!
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by jeanie on
Thursday, 15th January 2004 @ 06:06:16 PM AEST
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wow, you said exactly what I wanna say!
however, I still haven't found the right words...and neither yours were what I would feel that contains allwhat I wanna say.....
anyways, you've done well :D:D
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by Jacktripper on
Friday, 23rd January 2004 @ 08:51:33 PM AEST
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| Well Mick it's an honor to read one of your poems I just recently joined your website YPDC and find it excellent. I think a poets home is here. Classic poetry written which happens to be my favorite. The "i can't promise" intro to each epilogue puts such a taste to the work of art. Well thank you for what you've brought to all aspiring writers. I look forward to seeing more of your work and projects in the future. |
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by fandy on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 10:56:03 PM AEST
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| wow wow wow...so true!!!! |
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by PumpkinPie on
Wednesday, 28th January 2004 @ 02:16:44 AM AEST
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Wow what a beautiful poem! I just hope you showed the one who makes your heart flutter this piece of art.Makes me dream of what is to come of my futur love(at least I hope so!!!!)God bless,
PumpkinPie |
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by emvyar on
Saturday, 7th February 2004 @ 01:49:36 AM AEST
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Great depiction of honesty and truth in the face of early Love...
This work could really shine... it needs a little work on several forced lines and some polish on its meter....
very nice piece.
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by faithmairee on
Tuesday, 10th February 2004 @ 06:10:41 AM AEST
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excellent work...i really liked this a lot...
faith |
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by None_illa on
Wednesday, 18th February 2004 @ 09:15:49 PM AEST
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| good job mick...i could feel the emotion and how real and tru it really is |
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| how is this #1? it sucks. |
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by uchendu on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 11:27:24 AM AEST
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| Hi lol.. this is a great piece.. keep up doing what u are doing... check me out lol |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 03:33:54 AM AEST
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| That sound so nice .Good write. |
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by venkat on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 07:10:55 AM AEST
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| Honest and truthful.. the best qualities I love always..thank you Mick for sharing your noble ideas. venkat |
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 01:27:10 AM AEST
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| this isnt a poem this is *****, i could write better with my a**
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by Dina on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 05:14:22 AM AEST
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| Mick, she must believe you as your words are quite true and beautiful. |
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by corrupted_minds on
Thursday, 8th April 2004 @ 01:27:29 AM AEST
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yep yep it's all there, i envy the love you feel.
Woei queen |
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by AdoringLittleStar on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 11:55:40 AM AEST
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This is a beautiful poem. I really enjoyed reading it.
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by Kirby on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 11:25:19 AM AEST
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| I feel bad sying this but I have been a poet on this site for a very long time it seems and I have never read any of your poetry and I am glad that this was my first one I read of yours. It was such a beautiful poem.I normally don't like to read rhyming poetry because it becomes childish but yours flowed like the sea. It was such a great poem. Love:::Kirby |
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by ammalu on
Friday, 30th April 2004 @ 03:08:48 AM AEST
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| enjoyed well. 'love and support' yes, it is the the real promise to keep up and the best answer to any such test-thanks for the honest and realisitic feelings expressed-keep it up. |
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by princess8383 on
Tuesday, 4th May 2004 @ 10:33:23 AM AEST
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| This is one of the best poems I have ever read, I would just like to thank you for posting it, I wish I could write as beautifully as you. |
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by pixie on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 01:03:19 PM AEST
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What can I say..... everyone else has already said it for me, but ........ what a beautiful and wonderful piece of work, you should be proud
Pixie xxx |
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by SnowB on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 10:13:54 AM AEST
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What a beautiful verse....if you have true love then all the other things just don't seem to matter as much...I love this...thank you for sharing..
Lena |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th June 2004 @ 07:03:04 PM AEST
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| :-P wow. there ARE still romantics in this world. what a beautiful poem! |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 30th June 2004 @ 08:23:09 PM AEST
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| that is 1 stonker of a poem...but i dont understand how u got so many comments... =| i mean i didnt think ANY poet was THAT universially liked... |
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by Brians_Sweety on
Sunday, 4th July 2004 @ 04:24:19 PM AEST
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I'm sure this comment won't mean much concidering you have had so many already. But I really enjoyed your poem it touch me in several ways. Thank you sooooo much for sharing!!!
Stephanie
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by buchi on
Monday, 5th July 2004 @ 03:09:22 PM AEST
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My first read of Mike's poem..
I can see men memorizing every line and offering it on a golden platter...I LOVE this easy flow of truth and self...rhyming structure flow usage etc etc...awesome ..hallmark all the way... |
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by HellsLibrarian on
Wednesday, 7th July 2004 @ 09:09:53 AM AEST
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| simply lovely. I like it very much. |
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by Sinful_Misery on
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| That was just awesome man! |
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by Twinkle on
Thursday, 15th July 2004 @ 11:08:20 AM AEST
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Excellent.
I have the samething to tell my love, you expressed it well. keep the good work, warm reagrds. |
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by Bruce on
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| truly a brilliant write |
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by Tanmaya on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 03:42:25 AM AEST
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This is a nice poem.
It's sweet. And I really mean that.
But honestly, I'm a bit surprised...at all the comments praising it to the skies.
It's good, but definitely not #1.
It's rather amatuerish.
Nice, but nothing extraordinary.
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by kammie on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 12:16:39 PM AEST
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it was wonderful beautiful and emotional!!
a great write xxxx kissesxxxx kammie xx |
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by mickie on
Saturday, 24th July 2004 @ 12:46:57 PM AEST
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Mick, what can i say? this is abollutely brillant & very sweet. the girl by ur side is very lucky. u r very good at what u do. don't ever stop, okay?
take care! |
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by pixie on
Thursday, 29th July 2004 @ 04:39:29 PM AEST
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wow Mick this is wonderful, amazing and beautiful you have created a masterpiece here :)
takecare,
pixie xx |
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by ExoticDreamer on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 12:31:22 PM AEST
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| Loved this. True to the heart of love. Wonderful |
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by buchi on
Monday, 2nd August 2004 @ 03:32:55 PM AEST
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| The best is not the biggest but the most complete, perfection that which is enough,it fully quenches all requisites... |
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by emeraldeyes on
Wednesday, 4th August 2004 @ 02:15:50 PM AEST
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| sounds to me like she's gonna get all she needs...BEAUTIFUL poem. I'll be back to read more of your work. I'm impressed with this. |
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by CrimsonTears on
Sunday, 8th August 2004 @ 08:37:30 PM AEST
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This is an absolutely amazing poem....outstanding write....whoever the person is that your writing to she is really lucky....FANTASTIC!!
Lots of Love
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by AnastasiaN on
Saturday, 4th September 2004 @ 12:04:04 PM AEST
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well there are many comments on this poem! and i'm still new to this but i loved the poem and am looking forward to seeing more talent...thanks for the opportunity!
Anastasia |
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by tears_of_blood on
Saturday, 4th September 2004 @ 02:36:40 PM AEST
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| i liked this poem alot i made me start to think about me and my ex and that stuff well keep them coming |
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by inoc on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 09:06:51 AM AEST
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surpurb!!!!
I loved it thanks for a beaut write!
cheers! |
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by Solnubis on
Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 08:05:51 AM AEST
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| Very well written, this was beautiful. I could feel the meaning of each verse and visualize being read to from the man I love. |
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by emospaztic on
Saturday, 25th September 2004 @ 11:52:42 AM AEST
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Bittersweet, but I love it.
-emo. |
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by Yousef on
Sunday, 3rd October 2004 @ 06:19:53 PM AEST
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| A good poem, not more than that. |
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by spyke_420 on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 09:27:13 PM AEST
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I would have to say that in my opinio you are the best cue you tell the truth of what you can and can not give......I have great respect for that......sorry for my spelling
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by buchi on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 07:08:30 PM AEST
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The poem is nearly perfect in its way- the thoughts striking and natural- the versification singularly sweet. The third stanza embodies a fine idea, beautifully expressed.The peculiar points of interest ,of a lover in "Cant Promise" are vividly shown forth....and has an antithetical force without effort or flippancy. The final thought, in the last stanza... exhibits a mature idealist...
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by Dan666 on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 12:22:58 PM AEST
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| God you must have the most comments a nd reads on this site i enjoyed reading it and i like it very much well done!! |
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by Mesano on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 04:37:19 PM AEST
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this is truly an amazing poem, so deep and filled with love... i shall read it again and again... two thumbs up for sure... i dont know what else to say- its hard to find a word to describe something as extrordinary as a good poem
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by Faddy on
Tuesday, 23rd November 2004 @ 05:40:49 PM AEST
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| I really love this peom, it's incredibly beautiful in a sense that finding love and keeping it is a wonderful gift, no matter what you can or can't promise. |
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by sunshiny on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 01:13:33 AM AEST
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| Wonderful poem. Very sincere and heartfelt. Great work! Thanks! |
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by tiffy on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 06:24:54 PM AEST
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| this is a great poem it shows real emotion and feeling! the song version is good to! |
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by in2thetwilightzone2 on
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| that is so sweet |
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by sek-c-shaun on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 06:10:23 PM AEST
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| amazing poem....you should read some of my poems tell me what you think of them, they wont be as good as this though......but i really liked this poem |
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by New_York_Chick on
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| fabulous job |
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by Stew on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 02:04:13 PM AEST
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i love this poem! it is so beautiful!
stew |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 01:52:33 PM AEST
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Very well placed and written. Don't take offense to this because none is intended, but this reads like a Hallmark card. I know you may find that as an insult but honestly I have known more graceful and lovely women to cry at Hallmark poetry than at anything written in classic literature, and I am including a few English-Lit majors.
All around great job. Sweet, caring, simple in depth, but all around Superb!
BRAVO!!! |
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 01:34:24 PM AEST
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| Amazingly done. You said evrything very honestly and didnt say nething outrageous and it still seemed so fantastic. Amazing |
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by lil_noel09 on
Saturday, 29th January 2005 @ 12:42:04 AM AEST
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| wow! this one touched me and left me thinking about it for a long time. I wish i could find someone who was like that for me! Great write! Keep it up!! |
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by wetnwild on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 07:26:53 PM AEST
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| This is a really good poem!! I Love the way you write! |
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by Gothchyk on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 08:56:35 PM AEST
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| amazing and beautifully written, great job |
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by BrownEyez on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 03:10:27 AM AEST
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| It's a beautiful poem, I'm looking forward to reading more of this great talent you have. |
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by shadowed_soul on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 11:34:10 AM AEST
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I'm just new here and this is one of the first ones i read. I think it is a very lovely poem. Well done and thanks for the read.
Shadowed_soul |
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by Leviticus on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 05:38:59 PM AEST
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| Absolutly astounding. You are truly inspirational. |
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by __happyhurt__ on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 01:04:19 AM AEST
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| Wow. Im liking it alot. I love the rythm and repediness. Its great. Nice work. |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 11:20:44 AM AEST
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| lovely poem. |
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by trenikia on
Wednesday, 16th February 2005 @ 01:01:00 PM AEST
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| i love that poem it reminds me of my relationship and how i feel about it. |
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by Maylaur on
Thursday, 24th February 2005 @ 08:23:20 AM AEST
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As soon as I read this poem I had a friend of mine read it. It is the story of her relationship with her current boyfriend. It matches them so perfectly.
Beautiful, beautiful poem. You are a wonderful writer! |
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by JacobsKK on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 12:43:08 AM AEST
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Wow! Very touching. Thank you so much for sharing! excellent job. :-)
-KK |
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by helianthus on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 08:03:42 PM AEST
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| this was so pretty. i want to be in love. really. i do. |
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by babyboo8 on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 11:45:50 AM AEST
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| This poem is so sweet!!!!Did you really write it for someone or just felt like writing something like that? |
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by SkaterGirl16 on
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| This is so beautifully written. I love it |
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by Naveen on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 06:40:10 AM AEST
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Its great poem simple but still expressive, nicely moves to the plot,Great write, I will surely look forward to your other poems.
Naveen |
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by lilsprtygrl21 on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 03:12:04 PM AEST
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Very nice poem. So sweet! This is probably the best poem that I've read on this site that is straight and to the point. Keep writing!
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by PainfulSpirit06 on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 06:07:31 PM AEST
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| Very sincere and honest. A lot of people need to realize that they can't give someone everything that they can't give to themselves. Absolutely wonderful. |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 07:31:41 PM AEST
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Thats so sweet! you cant give everything money can buy, but everything love can give.
Nicely done.
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by candysears on
Wednesday, 27th April 2005 @ 09:30:41 PM AEST
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Hi,
This is a great piece of work,very
Good..
Plus honest and to the point.
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by MorningGlory on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 09:37:04 PM AEST
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| Beautiful....The most interesting things in life are simple. You caught heart and emotion so well in this poem. |
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by poetrygirl1991 on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 08:30:17 PM AEST
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| this poem was very good keep writing ~~Chrissy |
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by midnightwriter on
Sunday, 15th May 2005 @ 04:07:17 PM AEST
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| Rock on bro! Very well said. A ton of depth to this poem. |
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by KayeRains on
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V1, L4... Doesn't flow. L2 has 6 or 7 'beats' (depending on how you count 'brilliant') whereas L4 has 8. In this instance, it just does not work and it threw me off, first thing as I started to read the poem.
V2- (I can't promise you perfection,
For perfection I am not.)
Okay, Nice. I like that but then....
(For I am like the rose,
Thorns and all I've got.)
'For' Should have been left out completely. Also, I think you meant 'are all I've got' and not 'and'. I thought I'd point it out.
V3- is okay.
V4- Little Nitpicks...
(I can't promise you the stars
for they are out of my reach.)
Again, I think this is an unnecessary 'for'...
maybe... 'They are beyond my reach' ? (Can you really show someone romantic walks on the beach?)
V5 - I Question L2 but have no suggestion.
V6- L2 'this' is passable but 'that' would sound much better.
V7- The ending... usually my favorite part.
(So you see I am not the best
And I'm not leaps above the rest
But then you will never know
Until you put me to the test.)
(L1 ... 'I'm' would flow better than I am)
My problem with this ending is simple. Best, Rest, Know, Test. Three rhymes. It sticks out like a sore thumb.
You have a good poem. Good luck with it.
Ka'Lei
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by zeferret on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 05:35:17 PM AEST
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| Wow... that is a really good poem! I think it is really nice... it really is a great poem! |
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| HEY DOWN HERE!!!!!! I JUST THOUGHT YOU SHOULD KNOW THIS WAS A GOOD POEM. I REALLY ENJOYED READING IT. BY THE WAY WHAT ARE THE USER RATINGS FOR AND IT MUST FEEL GOOD TO GET 10,000 READS AND AN EQUAL AMMOUNT OF COMMENTS. I HOPE YOU GET A CHANCE TO GLANCE AT SOME OF MY WORK. UNTIL THEN KEEP ON TRUCKING!!!! |
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by Shnyzz on
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| ONE MORE COMMENT. WHO IS THIS KA'LEI PERSON. I LOVE THEM. |
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by punkprincess6689 on
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| i luved ur poem it was rly good and filled with emotion and it was sweet. |
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by AmyLee4Ever on
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Wow... hmm... to me this is perfection. I don't know how you wrote something like this. It is really nice.
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by visualizing_life on
Tuesday, 26th July 2005 @ 02:23:23 PM AEST
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| hey i loved your poem!! although, i must correct you on one thing....you said at the end that your not leaps above the rest, but you must be to write these things in your poem...saying that your not perfect and wont make promises that you cant keep...not many people will or do that so that makes you a little above the rest .....keep writing....hopeless |
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by Writting_Fever on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 10:06:39 PM AEST
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| This poem rocks! You are an amazing writter. If the only thing that you could give her was your love, that should be good enuff! |
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by bruised_angel on
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| love this poem |
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by xthrewmyluvawayx on
Thursday, 4th August 2005 @ 12:55:24 AM AEST
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| such a sweet poem...i enjoyed reading it alot... |
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by voiceinthewilderness on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 11:40:08 AM AEST
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| That's really good man, I like the contrast. Definately song material. |
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by AshRayne on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 01:22:59 PM AEST
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dont' most people hope and pray that their love could be as wonderful as those in fantasy books? at least someone realizes that its not, but it can come close. congrats on a heartfelt poem!
exquisite writing that is your gift, be blessed, for you are perfection.
~Ash |
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by forsaken_soul33 on
Wednesday, 24th August 2005 @ 08:35:51 PM AEST
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wow, i really liked your poem. it was nice and sweet. It was full of emotion!!! it was a very good write. keep up the good work.
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by CrazyCowboy557 on
Thursday, 25th August 2005 @ 10:50:10 AM AEST
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| Great poem. It really shows how as imperfect as someone is, if you give your all, it doesn't matter |
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by Former_Member on
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| There's not much to say, it was an amazing write, im speechless as to my comment, i really hope to see more from you. |
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by jheng on
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great poem, i am touched by it. its so sweet not to promise everything, but all you can give ... |
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by moon_light on
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| oh i love this one. how sweet. |
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by jheng on
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nice poem, i enjoyed reading it. its very sweet |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Saturday, 8th October 2005 @ 11:39:22 PM AEST
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What can I say??? The subject is extremely generic, the content is uninspired and unoriginal, the rhymes are forced and awkward and follow no real structure...It's just a collection of random generic sappy mush with no real feeling or insight. It might impress a very sappy 14 year old girl with little intelligence.
Final Verdict: "Swing and a miss" |
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by Flio on
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| what a POEM! ur a POET alright! |
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by VampryssCherry on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 09:37:30 PM AEST
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| That was a beautifully written poem. Keep it up, I hope to read more from you. |
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by Tatikaze on
Tuesday, 1st November 2005 @ 09:13:42 PM AEST
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| I really liked this poem.... It said everything I wanted to get out, but never did.... Waiting to see more....Thanx for this one |
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by Faddy on
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| when i 1st came here a yr ago, this was the greatest read poem in it's category. it's been nearly a yr and i congradulate you. like i sad a year ago, finding love and keeping it is hard and amazing, your poems says it all |
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by Poetic_Influence on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 03:00:26 PM AEST
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| nice work |
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by Jessie53067 on
Friday, 2nd December 2005 @ 12:03:42 PM AEST
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This is beautiful. It's sweet but it doesn't promise the world like so many love poems do, it does the opposite. Lovely work.
-Jessie
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by The_Cowardly_Lion on
Saturday, 10th December 2005 @ 09:05:18 PM AEST
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| I liked this poem. simple and true. the way romance should always be |
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by 15andcounting on
Tuesday, 13th December 2005 @ 01:05:44 PM AEST
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| This poem is amazing and so sweet. By the way, I am looking for poetry to read at my wedding, would you mind if I used this? Full credit would be given to you, and it will not be published or recorded. |
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Wednesday, 21st December 2005 @ 08:42:49 PM AEST
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| this poem rocks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i loved it.. |
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by Poser on
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| Dang, I thought it was touching. Good piece of art you have on your hands here. |
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by matts_sweetie_04 on
Sunday, 1st January 2006 @ 11:45:20 PM AEST
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| OMG! This poem made me cry. It is so freaking sweet. It touched me in many ways. Keep up the great work!!!!! |
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by SocAstn on
Monday, 9th January 2006 @ 03:26:26 AM AEST
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Mick, I really enjoyed this poem. Def. a good write.
Austin |
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by AmishGuy222000 on
Friday, 13th January 2006 @ 12:24:47 PM AEST
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| ::Claps:: Very nice. |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th January 2006 @ 02:54:27 PM AEST
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this was an excellent poem!
can i put u on the test? ;);););)
it was a wonderful read! |
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by Artemis03 on
Monday, 6th February 2006 @ 10:23:59 PM AEST
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| Wow.. this poem is so beautiful.. I love each line and each word...So very heart touching..and words I one day hope to hear from someone special |
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by Former_Member on
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| That poem was absolutely kickbutt!! It's so sweet. And it's so true. Great job [clap] Stay awesome! |
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by slogan on
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| great write. I really enjoyed reading this...jh |
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by slogan on
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| great write...jh |
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by earthman on
Friday, 17th March 2006 @ 09:03:48 PM AEST
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I can't promise you the stars
for they are out of my reach
but I can show you romantic walks
holding hands along the beach
fav. stanza
the last stanza finished well i thought |
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by ek_da_poet on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 12:48:23 PM AEST
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| this was the best poem i read on this poetry site.. you need to give me sum advice on writing keep it up pe@ce |
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by PGreene on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 01:33:57 AM AEST
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| wow, straight from the heart. this is exactly what i wish i could express to my gf in words..the problem with me was i was making it too complicated. ur simplicity was the key. i love this poem |
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by suesmuse1 on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 09:41:48 PM AEST
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Touching poem, beautiful words from the heart!
Keep writing. |
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by djdarkrose04 on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 10:47:16 AM AEST
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| Very heartfelt...sincere....i love this poem...a great write! |
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by mali on
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| this poem is so beautiful and honest. great job |
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by Tricky on
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| That's sounds like a proposal speech. It's breathtaking, to say the least. I really love it. Awesome job........*sigh* |
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by chulysnacky on
Friday, 30th June 2006 @ 10:50:24 PM AEST
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I can definately relate to this poem, I have definately felt this way before and I must say it is absolutely beautiful. I love it.
ChulySnacky |
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by crave on
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| enjoyed this poem- thank you |
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by jono on
Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 01:14:51 PM AEST
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YOUR POEM SUCKS!
ONLY JOKING! great poem. |
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by jono on
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| nice one you have such a talent |
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by bluewolf on
Wednesday, 26th July 2006 @ 02:40:55 PM AEST
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| beautiful poem, i really enjoyed it |
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by CaddishCut on
Friday, 11th August 2006 @ 01:52:03 AM AEST
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| WOW! Simply amazing. Beautiful! |
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by lexesmith on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 11:36:45 AM AEST
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| that is a really amazing poem it really spoke to me!! |
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by Saloni on
Thursday, 2nd November 2006 @ 06:34:51 AM AEST
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| hey! its true.. can't promise.. promises are often broken! really well written.. its a beautiful poem.. enjoyed reading it.. well done.. 5 stars |
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by myloveispure on
Thursday, 16th November 2006 @ 09:11:41 AM AEST
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| only one word can describe this poem....amazing |
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by Stellar on
Tuesday, 28th November 2006 @ 08:47:39 PM AEST
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"I can't promise total happiness
and never a tear in your eye
though I can give you my word
that in every way I will try"
I absolutely love that verse. It's the simplest promises that mean the world. This is a great poem. |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th December 2006 @ 10:36:49 AM AEST
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| You shouldn't restrict yourself with rhyming, it's only backing your poem into a corner with no other place to go. |
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by Kirby on
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The first word out of my mouth after i read this was aaawwwww that was so cute and romantic and you could feel the love when you read it and see it in your words. Such a great write you are a great poet.
Keep writing
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by Errious on
Tuesday, 12th December 2006 @ 05:00:12 PM AEST
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Oh wow! fantastic poem!
Amazing end! Speechless!
Tom |
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by kishdaswani on
Wednesday, 10th January 2007 @ 10:51:30 AM AEST
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bro nice poem man, wish i could verbalize my poems as well as yours, check out my stuff and comment on it , would like to hear your insights
keep on writing!
cheers |
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by Dom on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 04:32:17 AM AEST
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This is a very sweet heartfelt poem I'm sure any woman would love to have had written for them.
Great writing, keep up the good work.
Dom |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th January 2007 @ 09:54:14 PM AEST
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its beautiful! it rhymes, and its truth
i love the way it can apply to anyone, and that you can feel the emotion!
LOVE IT!
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by Linds on
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this is beautiful. i wish i could relate.
Amazing,
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by Fairiepsycho on
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| I really love this one of yours. Which coming from me is good since I can't write anything happy to save my life. I've never been much for happy love poems but this one I absolutely adore!! |
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by hgillila on
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I love this poem, it's nice to hear from the other side. Great job!
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by AirHead on
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| You can't promise but what you actually do in the poem is promise the important things in a relationship, honest & true,,,,, |
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by AirHead on
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| Beatiful write, wthank you |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th March 2008 @ 07:17:27 AM AEST
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| I see why this is the most read right now, great job! |
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by liamleash on
Sunday, 27th April 2008 @ 10:46:15 AM AEST
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Mick this poem is amazing. One of the best reads i have had so far.
Great piece of poetry .
Superb |
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by Desideratum on
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| Very sweet. |
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by TaintedAir on
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| That is a very beautiful!! 5 stars |
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by ragman on
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| nice poem....well constructed.... |
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by Former_Member on
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i saw this was the most commented on poem, and i wanted to find out why. now i think i have. it is a simple poem in many ways, the structure is simple, the language is simple, but this adds to the beauty of it. it flows beautifully and has a certain 'punch' to it. the ending is perfection, and rounds off a quite wonderful poem.
quite simply the work of a genius,
-phil |
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by blasko on
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| nice |
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by warriorsb13 on
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| DUDE, thats awesome, i just wish i had come up with it, haha. i mean i'd never dream about writing something like that! have you ever thought about making more poems, making a poem book, and publishing it?!?!?!?!?! I'd buy that book. |
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by windowguy on
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| Undoubtedly an excellent poem. Full of emotion and noble thoughts. |
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by manbeast on
Friday, 17th April 2009 @ 11:32:51 AM AEST
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the emotion is great, well conveyed, the strongest aspect of this poem
the rhyming is good, although a little obvious at times
the weakness of the poem is that it lacks meter. overall a pleasant read, but attention to meter could make it a beautiful work
write on |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by storyteller on
Thursday, 23rd April 2009 @ 10:10:52 AM AEST
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| Well done. Simple, yet effective. |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Drifter on
Monday, 27th April 2009 @ 04:52:27 AM AEST
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but I can show you romantic walks
holding hands along the beach
These are weak lines
I can't promise you perfection
for perfection I am not
for I am like the rose
thorns and all I've got
These are the strongest lines in the poem |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by unexplainablesilence52 on
Thursday, 21st May 2009 @ 02:35:35 PM AEST
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| Very nice (= |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by TeeBaBee on
Tuesday, 2nd June 2009 @ 01:49:27 PM AEST
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| Great poem :) |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by smith2267 on
Tuesday, 9th June 2009 @ 08:30:16 AM AEST
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Very nice. Simple, yet very tight, rhyme scheme.
And the sentiment is nice, and seems heartfelt. Did you have a girl in mind when you wrote it? |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by bubkin on
Saturday, 25th July 2009 @ 08:51:50 AM AEST
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| i truly enjoyed reading this ! |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by CwisssStunnaaa on
Friday, 11th September 2009 @ 07:29:33 AM AEST
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this has to be one of the best poems i read
you should check out my poems and tell em what you think |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by SilverGirl on
Thursday, 7th January 2010 @ 09:18:49 AM AEST
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the verse saying " for perfection i am not"
i think u can better say for perfect i am not
perfection is a concept and one is not a concept
perfect is an adeject so i think it suits better :) |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by write2death on
Sunday, 6th June 2010 @ 11:04:00 PM AEST
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| that is an amazing poem! gosh I wish I could write poetry that well! |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by brialuv on
Sunday, 20th June 2010 @ 06:50:33 AM AEST
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| such a wonderful poem and so true...when you enter into a relationship nothing is promised |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by quadira on
Saturday, 10th July 2010 @ 03:06:36 AM AEST
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| I love this. Its clear, heartfelt and most of all speaks to the heart of all us girls. thanks |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th July 2010 @ 07:04:17 PM AEST
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| I had to sift through a lot of mediocre poems before having read this one. The poem is beautiful and true, all save the last line, I think it is very cheap and cliche primary schoolish but the rest is good. I liked it a lot |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Nightshade333 on
Friday, 6th August 2010 @ 08:13:28 PM AEST
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| Short and Sweet I loved it. |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Albion on
Saturday, 14th August 2010 @ 12:49:53 PM AEST
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| This is beautiful, i really enjoyed reading it well done |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Punkrocknemo on
Friday, 27th August 2010 @ 11:57:04 AM AEST
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| This is a really good poem. I thought some of mine were good but this is really good. Keep writing! |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by CarrieLindeman on
Sunday, 26th September 2010 @ 05:45:09 PM AEST
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| Super sweet poem. I really enjoyed it!! |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Anbarean on
Wednesday, 20th October 2010 @ 11:41:24 PM AEST
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| such a nice and beautiful one .......love it....love it....love it |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Lyre on
Friday, 29th October 2010 @ 06:45:35 PM AEST
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Whoa. Romantic!
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by cait on
Thursday, 16th December 2010 @ 09:02:52 PM AEST
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| ooh very nice. i especially like the 4th and 5th stanza. |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Violet_Fae on
Tuesday, 4th January 2011 @ 11:44:36 PM AEST
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| A Beautiful read....and something a loved one longs to hear. |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by nachi1981 on
Monday, 14th March 2011 @ 06:50:57 PM AEST
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| very nice. i like the rhyming scheme.. |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by baritonefreak on
Thursday, 14th April 2011 @ 06:41:26 AM AEST
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| this is beautiful. |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Purge on
Sunday, 1st May 2011 @ 11:33:37 AM AEST
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| Loved it! |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Helenesovig on
Monday, 6th May 2013 @ 09:04:01 AM AEST
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| So beautiful, thank you for uploading this. |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th September 2014 @ 06:22:15 AM AEST
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| Beautiful poem, truly beautiful. SL |
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Re: CAN'T PROMISE
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by Lionel on
Saturday, 14th February 2015 @ 09:00:08 PM AEST
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| Can't promise, but you are honest. I really enjoyed this poem. |
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