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[sid] => 90658
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Caramel, For No Reason At All
[time] => 2005-04-11 19:13:46
[hometext] => For Becky, who won't see it.
[bodytext] => you are
bittersweet, dearest
less and less
a name than a face
(I'm dreaming you in
- syllables.)
caramel
for no reason at all,
and-
the sentence ends with an and.
again.
hope you know I'm
thinking of you
touching flat metal on the last
chocolate bit of Hanukkah gelt
I saved for you
because
you haven't had enough holidays
(meant to send it to you for
Christmas, then
your birthday, then
goodbye)
hope you know I'm
better, now
less needy
less meek
more secure
hope you know you
pop up in my mind, now and then
and I wonder if I need you
and I wonder who's missing what
hope you know I'm
smiling, as
I write this (maybe? maybe?)
hope you know I'm
-lying
(hope you know better than
to take offense.)
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 990
[topic] => 16
[informant] => ShadowDaughter
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 28
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => FriendshipPoetry
)
Caramel, For No Reason At All
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Monday, 11th April 2005 @ 07:13:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
FriendshipPoetry
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you are
bittersweet, dearest
less and less
a name than a face
(I'm dreaming you in
- syllables.)
caramel
for no reason at all,
and-
the sentence ends with an and.
again.
hope you know I'm
thinking of you
touching flat metal on the last
chocolate bit of Hanukkah gelt
I saved for you
because
you haven't had enough holidays
(meant to send it to you for
Christmas, then
your birthday, then
goodbye)
hope you know I'm
better, now
less needy
less meek
more secure
hope you know you
pop up in my mind, now and then
and I wonder if I need you
and I wonder who's missing what
hope you know I'm
smiling, as
I write this (maybe? maybe?)
hope you know I'm
-lying
(hope you know better than
to take offense.)
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
... [
2005-04-11 19:13:46]
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
(User Rating: 1 )
by bobotheclown on
Monday, 11th April 2005 @ 08:58:53 PM AEST
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ahh what a wierd poem Nora yet very good at
the same time. Your unique style of poetry
consistently reminds me of e.e. cu mmings. I
hope you are doing well as I have not talked
to you in along while. Thanks for sharing this.
Bobo (Joel)
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 12th April 2005 @ 04:12:14 AM AEST
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I'm just guessing here Norries ... but I believe I will miss Becky too ... as will many others here.
This ... well ... yeah, Tremendous.
Nazzy ~
( find a smile soon or I'll moon you again !!! ) |
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by EternitysLyre on
Tuesday, 12th April 2005 @ 08:23:00 AM AEST
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So bittersweet that true almost doesn't do it justice.
~The Palatine Poet |
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 12th April 2005 @ 08:31:22 AM AEST
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Becky did tell me that she was leaving YPDC I can’t believe it was her time already, her talent and artistry will be surely missed.
Nora, you did a great here. You’re poems are unusual yet they’re good in a poetic way. You have your own style and I like it.
Jane
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by jthzero on
Tuesday, 12th April 2005 @ 08:56:24 PM AEST
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all the golden sand we hold in hand do creep to the deep
-nicce poem- |
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 07:19:16 PM AEST
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Heh.
(because self doesn't have anything else to be readily said at the moment)
Andrew
(hoping all goes well with Becky) |
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 04:00:14 PM AEST
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This was lovely Nora..
and just an FYI...I know she saw it. |
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by bonewiz326 on
Saturday, 7th May 2005 @ 08:48:39 PM AEST
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vEry nicely written keep up the good written and never stop
alex |
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by heartless_soul on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 05:38:34 PM AEST
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This was beautiful with heart felt words and feelings in them, your style and structure are astounding and well used, a great read if I do say so myself (sorry if this seems rude but I dont know who Becky is but I am sure that she knows these feelings are sent to her.) Be well.
*H_S* |
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 11:48:33 PM AEST
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I am sure she saw it. She does log in at times. It is a lovely poem.
Rita |
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by Dri on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 07:55:20 PM AEST
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| good lord... you commented on a few of my poems and i finally got around to checking you out... you are such a brilliant writer. i am impressed, and in awe. |
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by liquidsunshine on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 01:08:58 PM AEST
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Beautiful, Nora.
I never really got to know Becky or you very well, but... I could always feel the friendship. Even on the screen it radiated something.
Anyway, hope you'll both be okay.
Love and peace,
Chelsea |
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Re: Caramel, For No Reason At All
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by Suz on
Friday, 9th September 2005 @ 11:20:47 PM AEST
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| Wow, this poem is really really beautiful, and it makes me sad that I'm not really a part of your life anymore and I don't know what it's really referring to specifically. I've thought about you a lot lately... I miss you even though we haven't talked in a while... forgive me? I love you -Zanna |
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