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[sid] => 76949
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => paralysis, Uncapitalized
[time] => 2004-12-22 21:03:41
[hometext] => Somewhere between philosophical and (on a deeper level) depressing . . . I hope no one understands this.
[bodytext] => meanwhile,
in her twig-raspy smokethroat
~murmur,
Grandma says real stories
begin in the middle
but Nora dear, 'meanwhile'
should be capitalized
because
it heralds a story and sentence
---and the[n] mourners, hired,
wonder
where have all the middles gone?
. . long time pa a ssing . .
{before I was born
my grandmother
died of a stroke, and
in the months before her death
the left side of her body
was
~completely paralyzed}
but that was
just
the be gii i nni i ing--------
[comments] => 15
[counter] => 927
[topic] => 13
[informant] => ShadowDaughter
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 19
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => DarkPoetry
)
paralysis, Uncapitalized
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Wednesday, 22nd December 2004 @ 09:03:41 PM in AEST
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meanwhile,
in her twig-raspy smokethroat
~murmur,
Grandma says real stories
begin in the middle
but Nora dear, 'meanwhile'
should be capitalized
because
it heralds a story and sentence
---and the[n] mourners, hired,
wonder
where have all the middles gone?
. . long time pa a ssing . .
{before I was born
my grandmother
died of a stroke, and
in the months before her death
the left side of her body
was
~completely paralyzed}
but that was
just
the be gii i nni i ing--------
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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2004-12-22 21:03:41]
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by autumngreeneyes on
Wednesday, 22nd December 2004 @ 09:16:34 PM AEST
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| I kind of do..my mother-in-law died after having a stroke..she lived several months afterward. She was completely paralized however and couldn't make her needs known..She had cognitive power..thought..but couldn't talk..or move..she was like a..a.. shell. The really sad part was that she had a fortune hidden and couldn't tell us where. Can you imagine how she must have felt inside??? We found most of it cleaning and taking care of estate matters..but if any of it was buried...we'll never know... |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Wednesday, 22nd December 2004 @ 09:36:36 PM AEST
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| wow, this is really good.. dont exactly understand it, but hey! its great anyway!!! |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 02:38:42 AM AEST
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Intriguing, but impenetrable, I guess.
Happy Christmas! |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 04:43:18 PM AEST
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u remind me of e.e. *****s lol and if yer
wondering i don't really get this... very
interesting though.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 09:32:01 PM AEST
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My! This is extraordinary!
My mind is turning, turning with each read (and there have been several... reads, that is). The nuances here... capitalization was never so meaningful nor a word (all of them, actually) so intentionally and perfectly placed... the concept of middle, the paralysis - so profound and so well employed here.
No... I don't understand fully... I have a million thoughts as I read this but the most dominate of those are tainted by personal experience I suspect. I have a feeling that even if you were to attempt to explain it fully, no one would ever know it as you do. I've said it before and I'll say it again - your wisdom far exceeds your years (this time though... it feels a bit different when I say that).
Impressed beyond my capacity to express it,
SNM
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by MoonlitAngel on
Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 11:51:01 PM AEST
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definitely don't understand
:D |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by EternitysLyre on
Sunday, 26th December 2004 @ 07:14:56 AM AEST
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Being cryptic is fun.
So why, after comepletely not-getting this poem, do I feel so depressed? This was almost as tough as I end up being sometimes; personal writing has a way of eluding common comprehension.
Did you write this first, then understand it, or understand it, then write it?
Methinks the former. |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Friday, 7th January 2005 @ 08:29:26 PM AEST
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Like others have said, theres no way I could
ever fully understand the true meaning behind
this poem, but I do understand how you set it
up, and the double meaning of:
"but that was
just
the be gii i nni i ing--------"
You put a lot of thought into this, and it came
out quite good. Keep writing. Even if not for
others, but for yourself(as in this case). |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 11:14:19 PM AEST
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| "Twig-raspy smokethroat." Such description! I perceive the depressing part even if I don't completely understand. Wonderful write. Blessings. |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by Eve on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 01:28:09 PM AEST
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Oh, but I don't understand. Such a riddle you've put in this one... my head's reeling too much to work it out.
The emotion kills me, though.
Sailing Viking seas with no sense of direction,
-Eve. |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 04:32:37 PM AEST
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Whether I understand this or not, I find it completely fascinating. You have captured the less-than-conherent ramblings of age that when brought together can often be foudn to be cohesive and as complete as necessary. Nice stuff.
Stitch |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by Bleeding_Nightmares on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 11:07:51 PM AEST
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| Full of sorrow meaning and agony of reality issues. beautiful poem. |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by Cancer on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 11:18:50 PM AEST
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cryptic and interesting. no matter how little i understand, it's still enjoyable because of the way it was written.
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by afraid_of_fear on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 07:32:30 AM AEST
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It seems I have unjustly been missing a lot of your writings..
this is full of wonder and emotion, and although i'm sure i do not understand it as fully as you suggest, it was an incredible read nonetheless. keep up the excellent work, Nora.
xxx |
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Re: paralysis, Uncapitalized
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by AndTheFoolShallBurn on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 12:00:22 PM AEST
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| Very nice. No, I don't fully get it, but that's ok, because it's obviously and openly heartfelt. |
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