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[aid] => mick
[title] => On Cobblestone
[time] => 2004-11-11 19:32:44
[hometext] => The most simply pure and -for lack of a better word- happy poem that I've written in a while. For Jarred and SNM, because I have a feeling they'll understand.
[bodytext] => windshield-wiper dreams
that slide- crystalline, snowborn
down shining eyes [but not as tears]
I should have been here
long before
but the world, post meridiem
never existed till the moment that I
stepped outside
(here, now! a world of tomorrows)
and saw
roads remembering cobblestone
and streetlights with still the potential
to not exist.
the way is paved
for trepidation, once removed,
repulses us- we should like
to shed it from our thoughts
and, because we can,
we always, always do
but-
I will, I think, trip
to please the road
reminiscing on cobblestone
garish, the lights arc
knifing the quiet (which
I might call 'night'
but 'night' is of cliches, stale
and I don't need it anymore)
-I shut my eyes
because the illumination
sought by builders
is superfluous, and
sometimes, you just need to be
blind.
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[informant] => ShadowDaughter
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[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
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)
On Cobblestone
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 07:32:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
MiscPoems
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windshield-wiper dreams
that slide- crystalline, snowborn
down shining eyes [but not as tears]
I should have been here
long before
but the world, post meridiem
never existed till the moment that I
stepped outside
(here, now! a world of tomorrows)
and saw
roads remembering cobblestone
and streetlights with still the potential
to not exist.
the way is paved
for trepidation, once removed,
repulses us- we should like
to shed it from our thoughts
and, because we can,
we always, always do
but-
I will, I think, trip
to please the road
reminiscing on cobblestone
garish, the lights arc
knifing the quiet (which
I might call 'night'
but 'night' is of cliches, stale
and I don't need it anymore)
-I shut my eyes
because the illumination
sought by builders
is superfluous, and
sometimes, you just need to be
blind.
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
... [
2004-11-11 19:32:44]
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Re: On Cobblestone
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 11th November 2004 @ 08:36:52 PM AEST
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"He did not know he could not fly--
so he did."
I shall tell you at every possible opportunity that you can fly (for I believe it so fully). This, is a glorious example of your having stretched your wings. You, dear Nora - can and will soar far above the road, above the lights... but you will always, I know, remember the cobblestone. I would wish it no other way.
There is beauty beyond the lights - above in the nighttime sky - just as there is underneath the lights... the beauty, is not in the surroundings, not in the details - not even (dare I say it) in the words employed, but in the eye, the I, that is able to see it all so clearly - even (especially) when blind.
This is extraordinary. As are you, Nora - as are you.
I love you, hon --- thank you for sharing this... for everything,
SNM |
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Re: On Cobblestone
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by Kie on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 06:05:56 AM AEST
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It always touches my heart when a poet dedicates poetry to friends. That is so generous and loving.
You write beautifully as always but this has an underlying sadness to it.
I just want to give you a hug((( )))
Kie |
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Re: On Cobblestone
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 10:05:33 AM AEST
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this poem is exquisite, however what i see beneath the surface just warms my heart, your talent is a beautiful thing, i see you writing novels someday, keep up the great work nora:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: On Cobblestone
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by MoonlitAngel on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 09:48:08 PM AEST
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| I think the only part of this I really get is the last line - but boy did that line hit me! lol. So yeah. Great line. Loved it. :P |
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Re: On Cobblestone
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 03:27:23 AM AEST
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Well now, this one was truly an incredible read.
I should have been here
long before
but the world, post meridiem
never existed till the moment that I
stepped outside
(here, now! a world of tomorrows)
and saw
roads remembering cobblestone
and streetlights with still the portential
to not exist.
I love that.
Obviously, I felt I understood at least some of what you said here. Some eludes me, of course, but such is as it should be with any somewhat complex piece.
Nicely done! Methinks I have just read a poem that may "remember itself".
*applauds* Bonus est, or some such.
Andrew |
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Re: On Cobblestone
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 19th November 2004 @ 11:51:36 PM AEST
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Damn I wish I could dissect this poem with
my AP English class. I feel so stupid because
I can not acertain what this poem means. Its
so flawlessly written. I have an idea of what
this means, but at the risk of sounding like a
monkey I won't even attempt to guess. Good
poem.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: On Cobblestone
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by Cynthia on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 10:02:49 PM AEST
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| Nora, this was amazing. This poem speaks out. Very, very well done. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: On Cobblestone
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by Nazmythian on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 01:19:21 PM AEST
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Praise, from an author who really wishes he had stolen your pen moments before you wrote this and these had been his words. Each read reveals another marvel of fantastic craftsmanship. I have found another favorite that shall be returned to time and again.
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: On Cobblestone
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 06:04:03 PM AEST
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"the way is paved
for trepidation, once removed,
repulses us- we should like
to shed it from our thoughts"
I foundered here and read it over about fifteen times, which is my wont when I'm suddenly submerged by thoughts deeper than that which I have been prepared to swim within.
I'd like to say I could write like this. I don't know - perhaps I could if I ever concentrated hard enough and expunged this propensity of mine to rhyme everything I write . . . oh well.
You leave me dreaming. Again. |
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Re: On Cobblestone
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by Dri on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 01:06:06 PM AEST
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you are the half of me that recent fire has burned away.there is no other explanation
-dri |
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