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[title] => Looking in the Mirror
[time] => 2019-02-16 02:16:33
[hometext] => Who am I without the mask?
[bodytext] => I close my eyes,
and I take a deep breath;
Think about how,
I turned into this mess.
Lately I`ve been sleeping,
in a strangers bed,
My feet are freezing,
my nose is frozen,
my eyes they open.
And I look at this thing,
they call a human being,
and I roar her.
And it feels like its been days,
yet the face,
of the clock taunts me,
tells me otherwise,
again I close my eyes.
Again I open them.
And I look at this girl,
who can`t look at herself.
Someone so weak,
thinks she`s portraying strength.
But this act,
it means nothing,
(no, nothing at all).
[comments] => 7
[counter] => 211
[topic] => 61
[informant] => allforyou
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[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
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Looking in the Mirror
Contributed by
allforyou
on
Saturday, 16th February 2019 @ 02:16:33 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I close my eyes,
and I take a deep breath;
Think about how,
I turned into this mess.
Lately I`ve been sleeping,
in a strangers bed,
My feet are freezing,
my nose is frozen,
my eyes they open.
And I look at this thing,
they call a human being,
and I roar her.
And it feels like its been days,
yet the face,
of the clock taunts me,
tells me otherwise,
again I close my eyes.
Again I open them.
And I look at this girl,
who can`t look at herself.
Someone so weak,
thinks she`s portraying strength.
But this act,
it means nothing,
(no, nothing at all).
Copyright ©
allforyou
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2019-02-16 02:16:33]
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Re: Looking in the Mirror
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by JamesStockdale on
Saturday, 16th February 2019 @ 02:44:48 PM AEST
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A wonderful expression of those days and months of being in a funk. Most of us have been there or now reside there. It ain/'/t pretty...…….
Some of us reside in a funk we did not create and thus the pain deepens. I like the last three stanzas for the close. Great job. |
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Re: Looking in the Mirror
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by ingeniusidiot on
Saturday, 16th February 2019 @ 02:47:25 PM AEST
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I understand all too well. We try to be something that
we arent and when we look in the mirror we dont
recognize the reflection looking back at us. The fact
that you see that there is an issue and can talk about
it show a great deal of strength and is the first step
to a means of finding a resolution.
Great piece, I wish you the best and God Bless
Rich |
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Re: Looking in the Mirror
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th February 2019 @ 04:29:07 AM AEST
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wow... introspective.
you know, it is a mask
for me, or it was, when
I reached a certain point in
my life.
the point where, I
was lost, there was no plan.
oh, sure there were plans,
but no decisions.
it sucked some of the
time, but then, some of the
time, I had a remedy for
that as well.
I do not know what you call it.
It is not being weak, or of
lesser moral certitude.
It is almost the opposite
of being fake, to be fake
and to one day realize as
such.
hey you, only you
are tapping on your
own shoulder,
maybe you were always
a gifted actor,
and nothing changed
the way you imagined
it could, if you only
were good, at pretending
that it would.
this is deep, since it
means something,
it is a topic, that you
could not pretend
to even think up.
It is a real solid poem!
I guess.
Peace!
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Re: Looking in the Mirror
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th February 2019 @ 05:26:31 AM AEST
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I guess many of us can relate to this.
At least an excellent poem came out of it. I hope it helps you.
Take care,
Tim |
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Re: Looking in the Mirror
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by Jecks on
Monday, 18th February 2019 @ 05:50:34 PM AEST
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I wonder how much of what we become throughout life is determined by all the things outside ourselves that put pressure on us. Or taking a deep breath and pushing back, shaping ourselves the way we want to be.
Most of us are probably somewhere in the middle. We don`t always recognize which is which. But hey, at least you are looking and that is good. |
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Re: Looking in the Mirror
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by Invierno on
Friday, 22nd February 2019 @ 05:21:56 PM AEST
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SHE-ite! What a great poem! Stanzas I and II are terrific, but it lost its perfection with a hasty ending. I hope you can take the time to turn this into the masterpiece it can be.
With great respect,
Invierno |
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Re: Looking in the Mirror
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 6th April 2019 @ 02:28:41 AM AEST
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Many of us put on a "public" mask because we feel that is how we should act.
Sometimes it is easier to hide your problems and fears but then they fester and magnify.
It is often easier to open up, but taking that first step is the hardest part
Steve |
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