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[title] => The Rest Of The Dead
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[bodytext] => Blood like cherry pie
Marmalade skies
Nowhere to hide
Tonight is the night
You`re all gonna die
In comes the high tide
Get yourself ready to say goodbye
You`re all too young
To be the chosen one
But this evil heart
Bleeds not for anyone
You the sinners
Shall not walk away winners
For tonight
You`ll be a worm`s dinner
Off with your heads
Come join us
The rest of the dead
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The Rest Of The Dead
Contributed by
jamesstockdale
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Saturday, 2nd February 2019 @ 06:51:51 PM in AEST
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Blood like cherry pie
Marmalade skies
Nowhere to hide
Tonight is the night
You`re all gonna die
In comes the high tide
Get yourself ready to say goodbye
You`re all too young
To be the chosen one
But this evil heart
Bleeds not for anyone
You the sinners
Shall not walk away winners
For tonight
You`ll be a worm`s dinner
Off with your heads
Come join us
The rest of the dead
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Re: The Rest Of The Dead
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by Invierno on
Sunday, 3rd February 2019 @ 01:26:45 AM AEST
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Gritty, dirty, dark and chilling. /'/Blood like cherry pie/'/ is an absolute perfect entree/'/ to this well crafted dip into the psyche of Mr. Stockdale.
James, you swung and knocked out a stadium light! I want you to continue to explore this path. See where this lonely avenue of the heart leads.
Critically, as with most of your poems, I think you could take a few minutes and read it over out loud, then silently. See how it plays to the world of ears. I write this as a friend with no claim of teacher or one who is /'/better/'/. I welcome advice....god knows I need it!, so don/'/t go gettin/'/ your feathers ruffled, my pal from the east.
I read your efforts because I know you write without pretense, and that is gloriously refreshing. I think your poems will shine even more if you take care to eliminate words not needed to complete your mission.
Pretend every word you include is a ten dollar bill. Consider every word you can yank from the poem is another ten dollars in your pocket. BUT, never, NEVER, omit a word if it compromises the integrity of the whole.
You are growing as a poet. I see it. WE see it. From Africa, (Cheers, Russel!) to England (Yo, Alice!) to the middle of Duhmerika (oh! Hi, there Invierno!), to the west coast down so-cal way...(Say Soft!)
I applaud your latest effort....my heart valves are slapping and clapping.
Invierno
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Re: The Rest Of The Dead
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 3rd February 2019 @ 02:42:40 AM AEST
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James, to be short, I second Inverno/'/s critically ept, or adroit view.
the blue, the red, and all the rest, and not just from sea to shining sea.
the blue bonnet of thought, the heredity of all life, here now and soon to be gone, the same way it came into this jewel
or for too many erstwhile this wretched place.
I think of this book, where one chapter is entitled, "The Slave who dared to think like a Man."
"Life of a Slave Girl", by Harriet Jacobs.
What do we call to terms to make one think?
We are part worm, part viral particle, part a lot
of things this Earth has delivered.
I said to be short. How funny, is that word?
Peace! |
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Re: The Rest Of The Dead
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th February 2019 @ 05:11:09 AM AEST
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Wow! //Blood like cherry pie//
This // really// is dark!!! Color me very impressed.
//You the sinners
Shall not walk away winners //
Okay, okay, I give!
Short, descriptive, and oh whoa so impressive, Jimmy!
*applauds to you* |
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Re: The Rest Of The Dead
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by softerware on
Monday, 4th February 2019 @ 08:31:26 PM AEST
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WOW.
A complete departure from your customary style and content. You had me at the first line!
This is a side of you not often revealed, and from what I see here, it has had ample time to bloom in restrained secrecy.
Promise you will continue to share your darker views. They are stunning. You have found a vein of gold. Unleash it!
softerware |
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Re: The Rest Of The Dead
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by softerware on
Monday, 4th February 2019 @ 08:33:18 PM AEST
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I will never look a cherry pie in the face again.
softerware |
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Re: The Rest Of The Dead
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by unknown_utopia on
Saturday, 9th February 2019 @ 06:21:17 AM AEST
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did not know you go to the dark side
good job
well done |
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