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[aid] => mick
[title] => You (Alone)
[time] => 2006-09-10 15:27:44
[hometext] => *** I jotted down a few lines just before giving in to sleep last night. I thought there would be more to come today. But, it wants to be this... and I will not deny it. ***
[bodytext] =>
You alone can birth new dreams
like newborn stars in the everything
of a perfectly purple-blue twilight sky
as rich as a deep red, burgundy wine.
Babe,
you alone…
can make me cry.
[I swear I'll never take that for granted.]
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You (Alone)
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Sunday, 10th September 2006 @ 03:27:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You alone can birth new dreams
like newborn stars in the everything
of a perfectly purple-blue twilight sky
as rich as a deep red, burgundy wine.
Babe,
you alone…
can make me cry.
[I swear I'll never take that for granted.]
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2006-09-10 15:27:44]
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Re: You (Alone)
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by kiss_yourself_goodbye on
Sunday, 10th September 2006 @ 04:08:35 PM AEST
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I liked this
It was simple but really intriging
i find that i can never write a poem in two pieces, i have to write it all in one go
maybe thats why there was no more in the morning
check out my poem called 'four reasons' let me know what you think
thanks
emma |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 10th September 2006 @ 04:56:37 PM AEST
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snemmers .. in all honesty here, hun ..
I wish I'd written this!
It's perfectly beautiful. And beautifully perfect.
as is~
and I want to add how impossibly wonderful it is
that you added that line at the end. Some don't
understand how amazing it is to feel emotion~
enough to move one to tears ..
[and how sad that is .. I would wish for everyone
to feel it like this .. at least ONCE in their lives]
This is real, my friend.
~Breezy
(who emphatically agrees) |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by jerseysue on
Sunday, 10th September 2006 @ 05:28:21 PM AEST
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| Its spoken from the heart, its beautiful. Sue x |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 10th September 2006 @ 05:39:38 PM AEST
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Snem, That was short and very touching. Sometimes they just fall out that way. I think all was said that was needed. Beautiful piece.
Peace, Laura (who finds your words magical) |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by Baronhawk on
Sunday, 10th September 2006 @ 07:09:37 PM AEST
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There is no set standard to poetry except perhaps in the eyes of literary critics. But for the creative process it is an undisclosed certainty. Sometimes you will write down fragments that will only make sense over time and sometimes you will write a stanza that will not...and refuses to be anything else but what it is...a symptom I gather of the emotional nature of the poetic process.
Short, abrupt and sudden...that is what your write here is but what it lacks in detail and form it more than makes up for, in my opinion, with the highly charged emotion that it seem to evoke...like a short but tightly wound and powerful spring...it rushes out to my senses and clubs my head with its fury. That is my understanding at least...a feeling of such intensity...of such emotion...that whatever the protagonist have felt I too can taste its gist. |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by Spike on
Monday, 11th September 2006 @ 06:58:54 AM AEST
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Now Snem, no more peanut butter sandwiches before bedtime! You never know what creative insights might trickle out before the cloak of dreaming darkness descends.
S |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by lillyjane on
Monday, 11th September 2006 @ 10:23:52 AM AEST
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| It does not need anything added perfect as it is.. Beautiful. xxxx |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by Keilantra on
Monday, 11th September 2006 @ 02:50:35 PM AEST
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ths was good. i read the first 7 lines,
and i thought it was good.
then i scrolled down and read the last line
and God
i thought i was EXCELLENT,
thats what you call and ending, yeah?
xXx
~kei |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by Uncertain_Oblivion on
Tuesday, 12th September 2006 @ 09:50:40 AM AEST
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This was so sweet...I loved it. I am glad you left it like this. It needs nothing else.
"This is the sound of silence no more!" |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by fielding88 on
Tuesday, 12th September 2006 @ 11:53:42 AM AEST
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| Ooh, neat little piece. You really captured the romance of the thought, and that made this very pleasant to read. Nicely done : ) |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by holderofthestone on
Tuesday, 12th September 2006 @ 12:57:09 PM AEST
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| beautiful... sweet and potent! amazing write |
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Re: You (Alone)
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 14th September 2006 @ 08:33:12 PM AEST
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Short, sweet, wow, and what a devoted emotion to romantic thought.
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Re: You (Alone)
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by JamesStockdale on
Tuesday, 1st September 2020 @ 03:59:46 AM AEST
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| Beautiful it is. |
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